My Heart’s Desire
It’s Friday Fictioneers time, folks. Hosted as ever by Rochelle, a hundred or so bloggers write their 100-ish word take on a photo prompt which this week has been supplied by fictioneerer Dawn M. Miller.
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Well folks, I have nothing! Therefore I have composed a “poem”, using a slightly spurious link with the photo – lamps-light-fire. It has no twists, no comedy or dark humour and is, I suppose, vaguely romantic-ish. Not something I do, but since I don’t want to miss out on a week I’m going to publish it anyway. Then we can all just move on.
And weirdly after I finished it I found it was 101 words. What a fluke.
Copyright Dawn M. Miller
Candle burning in the dark
It calls to me, it calls to me
Sulphur bright, the Devil’s spark
She calls to me, she calls to me.
Eyes like fire, she beckons me
Towards the light, towards the light
My heart’s ensnared, no longer free
Within her light, within her light.
Closer now, I see her face
A face divine, a face divine
Desperate now I quicken pace
To make her mine, to make her mine.
At last she holds me in her arms
Consumed by fire, consumed by fire
No more sorrow, safe from harm
My heart’s desire, my heart’s desire.
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I liked that…even if there weren’t any lamp explosions in the end 🙂
Seriously, well done!
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You don’t know how hard it was to stay serious the whole way through. I kept smiling as some comedy line came to me.
Thanks 🙂
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no lamp explosions? must be a different one!
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Yep, no explosions, apocalypse or sudden death this week!
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This is beautiful Alistair… didn’t know you had that in you…
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Neither did I, I don’t know where it came from. I couldn’t even tell if it was any good, my experience with poetry is very low.
Thank you!
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well your poem is wonderful, perhaps you should dabble in it a bit more 😉
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Thanks, maybe I will!
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Wow, you kept that ‘light’ hidden, I loved the repetition, it gave a melody to the whole piece 🙂
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The first repetition came into my head and then I thought maybe I could fashion a poem around it. I was actually using your recent poems as inspiration, the clever things you do and the way your poems flow.
🙂
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Get away with ya, I’m only an amateur. You should really look at writing more though 😉
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I shall if the muse takes me again!
You could easily put together an anthology of your poems – I bet it would be popular. I’d get it for my Kindle for sure 🙂
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I don’t know–that Devil’s spark bit hints at some possible darkness. Or maybe I’ve just caught too many parts of Bill’s “Supernatural” binge!!
janet
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I was actually undecided – during the first verse it was going to be some sort of devil-woman snares man type of scenario, but weirdly it went the other way. I believe it’s the first thing I have written in my entire life which comes close to romantic 🙂
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And you know what? That’s OK! 🙂 After all, it’ almost Valentine’s Day.
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You’re right – I’d completely forgotten!
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That was great! I really liked it. Was meant to be as it came close to the 100 word mark too.
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I’m glad you liked it! I was sure the word count would be miles off, so I was quite surprised when I pasted it into Word and saw it was OK.
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this is fantastic Alistair. i enjoyed reading it very much.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Lovely!
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Thanks!
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Very Poe-ish 🙂
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Agreed and very well done sir! Enjoyed.
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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🙂
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Didn’t come across many poems in the links.
Lovely!
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There’s the occasional couple sometimes. Never thought I’d do a poem for FF, though.
Thank you!
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I liked this, the repetition worked really well. It could almost be a lyric… Nice work.
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Thanks! I got the first repetition in my head and decided to make a poem out of it.
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This is an amazing poem, I love it’s metre & the words are incredible. It carries real feeling & energy. I didn’t know you were a poet as well. You should definitely write more 🙂
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Thanks so much! I wasn’t sure if it was any good as I don’t read much poetry – only stuff people write on WP really (absolutely hated it at school) so I’m glad it worked out.
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Quite lovely!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed my little foray into poetry 🙂
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Alistair this was an incredible poem even if outside your bailiwick. I truly enjoyed the meter and repetition. But I do read all poetry out loud. I like to absorb it through all my senses at once. Great piece.
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Thanks! It took a while to get the meter right, and quite a bit of shuffling lines around.
I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Dear Ali,
Beautiful poem. Seriously. I could see this set to music.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
I’m glad you liked it. Someone else mentioned it could be lyrics as well. Knowing me, though, Heavy Metal 🙂
Ali
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Wow, this was wonderful! You’re a poet and didn’t know it!
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Thanks! I don’t know what came over me 🙂
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Nicely done… though I am envisioning a moth closing in on the blue glow of a bug zapper and getting splattered all over the place, so this wasn’t that far off your usual FF theme after all! 😉
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Hey, you’re spoiling the mood of romance and whatnot 🙂
I do feel that I’m letting down my core following of blood-thirsty action junkies!
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that’s really lovely! and i liked the repetition 🙂
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked my little dabble into poetry (in which no-one died) 🙂
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This was lovely Alistair. You should write more poetry even if it’s something new for you. This piece proved you do it well.
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Thank you, I’m glad it worked out okay and that you enjoyed it!
I’ve done a few poems on my blog but my idea of poetry is generally a little immature – the second line has to rhyme with the first line, for example. I’ve been trying to learn from other people’s poems on WP, though.
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I like this a lot. Nice twist on the prompt! I liked the repetition. It read really well.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it! It took ages to get it to scan correctly.
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The work really paid off!
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It sounds like a witchy chant. Well done! I enjoyed it.
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It could be, couldn’t it, to lure the victim in.
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A beautiful poem – so graceful. I love it!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed reading it.
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I thought this worked quite well. Sometimes diving into a new form can be fun and refreshing.
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A change is as good as a rest, as they say.
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What a cool poem-loved the rhythm and that sing-song feel to it.Well done DR 🙂
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Thanks! A little foray into poetry before resuming normal service 🙂
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:-)It was great!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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:-)I did
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Call it whatever you like, this is really great! For someone who’s got “nothing,” you’ve brought a really good poem to the mix. I agree, it has a very sing-songy feel to it, but the words are well written. Nice work!
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Thanks! I was pretty down on it because I honestly didn’t know if it was any good or even worked as a poem – that’s how little I know about poetry, to my shame.
I listen to a lot of music which is maybe why it’s a bit sing-songy – I guess lyrics are poetry really.
I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I think of lyrics as a kind of poetry, but I’m not a poet either. That said, this certainly read like a poem and was really well done.
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Thanks again 🙂
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I absolutely loved it. I love the repetition. The rhythm reminds me of Tiger Tiger Burning Bright. Anyway your poem is crazy good!
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Thank you! I didn’t know if it was any good or not but people seem to have liked it so I’m a happy bunny 🙂
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A very enjoyable read.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Well you exposed yourself in this poem. Very well done.
Now you can write about that romantic evil one you have waiting in your “book” self.
Honestly, DrAli, well written.
I like the word vibration it has.
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I’m glad you liked it! It look a little while to get it right but it seems to have been worth it.
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Very nice Alistair. I admire people who can write poetry and have the confidence to put it out there. I think it is such an intimate form of expression I find it much harder to share than other forms of writing.
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I don’t do many and to be honest it was quite difficult to press “publish” once it was done.
I’m glad you liked it.
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