History Repeats
It’s Monday and that means it’s time for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get a photo prompt and an opening sentence plus 150 words to complete the story. For this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.
The supplied sentence is in bold in my story.
The neighbours were not happy about my choice of yard art.
First they tries light hearted banter.
“Blimey, mate, what’s the ‘ell’s that? Not keeping it, are you?”
After a week they’re done mincin’ words.
“Listen, chum, I’m not meaning to be rude, but that’s an eyesore, ya know? You gonna move it or what?”
I ignore them, miserable gits.
Then it gets serious. I comes out in the mornin’ and find the Native American covered wi’ paint. Makes him look somehow diseased.
I says nothing. They says nothing. They know I know it were them.
Next day, someone’s shot holes in the bison with an air rifle. The day after that, the Native American has both his arms shot off. These neighbours come over from England couple a’ years previous. Settlers, you might say. Suddenly I got a diseased-looking Native American and a shot bison.
Funny how history repeats. Maybe tomorrow I’ll complete the cycle and scalp the bastards.
Fun story, and your protagonist has the right solution.
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I think he does, thanks!
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Hee hee! Loved the last line! Thanks for writing for this challenge Ali! I truly appreciate you sticking with the MFtS and hope to see you again next week. Be well… ^..^
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I’m glad you liked it!
Thanks for organising the challenge every week 🙂
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I think you could call that … (ready?) A PLAN.
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It certainly is that. I’m not sure he’ll actually go through with it, though.
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You nailed it with the title. Brilliant.
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Thanks! I sat there for a while trying to think of a decent title, I find it’s sometimes the hardest part.
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Terrific story… You captured the essence perfectly with the touch of comic…
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂 I was aiming for a sort of history message with a slightly comic tone.
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Touché! Palpable shot sir. Great take on the prompt D-man.
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Thanks! I’m glad it worked, I wasn’t entirely sure.
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you are gifted! 😀
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Thank you 🙂
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You captured the voice of the protagonist very well and as usual, a great take on the prompt. Although I swerve towards the “people repeat history, for history is man-made” arena, I enjoyed this and I think the neighbours should definitely be wary.
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People are people, so mistakes made in the past are sure to be made again I reckon.
I’m glad you liked my story!
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touche indeed.. very clever tale draliman, great work 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Heavy stuff. Well done. I’m waiting for your book…..
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I’m waiting for my book too 🙂
I’m glad you liked my story!
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I can see those yobs cowering as you get ready to scalp them!
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I’m sharpening my scalping knife… 🙂
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Nice work. It’s funny on the surface but with a serious theme. I enjoyed the narrator’s voice 🙂
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I’m glad you saw both the humorous and serious sides of my story. Thanks!
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I loved it.
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I’m glad 🙂
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It is a great ending.
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Thanks!
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What a great take on the prompt and the title really works. Very clever, I am finding that I really like your style and look forward to seeing what you write each week.
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I’m glad you liked it and thank you for such a lovely comment!
My stories tend to shift with my mood (comedy/dark/message), but I guess my overall style remains the same 🙂
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Ha! Very Funny! 🙂
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I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Funny and clever, all in one. I really like the idea of history repeating itself with the diseased-looking Indian and shot bison – and the last line finishes it off perfectly.
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Thanks, I’m glad it all worked. I was a little worried!
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Ali you are unique! This is a superb in depth double sided tale ~ The serious side surfaces with the last line ~ Brilliant 🙂
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I’m glad you liked it! I was worried it wouldn’t work but evidently it did 🙂
Thanks!
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We have lots of that going on over this side of the pond 😛 Yard art and all.
Ellespeth
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We’re more “gnomes” over here 🙂
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I completely forgot about Mondays. I’ll have to get back a it.
But tot you …
Love it. I like the voice. Shows the mentality of these people.
Then the punch line. I can just see him sharpening his knife.
Phyllis
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I originally wrote it in “standard” English but then thought it would better with a bit of – whatever sort of English that is, with his thoughts in the present tense.
I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Well done, my friend!
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Thanks 🙂
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Great story! I love the humour but with the underlying serious message. The final line is perfection. 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you saw both sides!
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I think you must write a book, Draliman. You’re great in this! Pawkisses 🙂 ❤
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I just need a great idea for a story. I’m better at mini-stories!
Thanks 🙂
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That was great, Ali. History has indeed repeated itself. Hilarious and well done. 😀 — Suzanne
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂
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I enjoyed the dialogues. Liked his solution/thought in the last line. 🙂
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Thanks! I doubt he’ll go through with it but he’s pretty annoyed 🙂
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This is brilliant! LOL! I loved how it went along as fiction and the end, it is true. Great job!
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I’m glad you liked it! I thought I’d conceal a little message amidst the “fun” 🙂
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You did good!
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Thanks 🙂
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Great job!!! Loved the twist of history!
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I’m glad you liked it! I was a little worried when I researched “scalping” – it appears that it was originally a European thing and ultimately in America everyone was at it – but I thought I’d run with it.
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