Full Speed Ahead!
Here is my contribution to this week’s Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. 100-150 words is the goal, and the supplied opening sentence is in bold in my story.
This week’s other stories can be found by clicking on the blue froggy. I couldn’t help thinking that the boat (if that’s what it is) in the picture looks like the slowest boat ever, so that’s the way I went in my rather nutty story this week. I had fun substituting the usual words associated with sleek and fast ocean-going vessels with the ones I used here :-).
Sorry about the ending, I’m already over the word count :-(.
The crew of the Angel Flame received orders to head out.
“Pleasure yacht ‘Schnitzel’ adrift – all craft assist!”
Derkin put to sea, his son Timmy standing excitedly at the prow. The Flame’s powerful twin engines pushed the craft to an impressive 1.5 miles per hour. Timmy shouted with glee!
They cut through the waves like a spork through a brick, eating up the inches, thundering at nearly no speed whatsoever towards the stricken yacht. Another rescue craft drew level and then shot ahead, its lone occupant pulling hard on the oars.
“Faster, Dad!” yelled Timmy.
Derkin gritted his teeth and engaged the afterburner, increasing speed to 1.75 miles per hour. Suddenly a three inch wave hit them full on, swamping the boat.
“We’re taking on water, we’ll have to turn back!” he yelled. “I hope we make it!”
Timmy gasped.
Derkin turned the Flame and stared in horror. The dock was already over thirty feet distant! Throttles open to the limit, they reached safety twenty minutes later and were home in time for tea.
I love this phrase “like a spork through a brick.” Fun use of language that went really well with the ending – back in time for tea. 🙂
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I had a good time with the language in this one – it’s fun to use phrases you could never put in a “serious” story 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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Lovely and funny story. Good stuff!
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I’m glad you liked my little piece of nutty fun 🙂
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The boat was racing at 1.75 miles per hour. LOL!! Great story!
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I’m surprised he could keep control at such speeds 🙂
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No kidding!
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I’m still laughing. And I’m SO glad they made it home in time for tea. Another tragedy averted!
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It was a pretty close thing for them there at the end! I’m glad it made you laugh, it was fun to write.
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“like a spork through a brick” may be my new favorite simile.
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I think it describes the progress of that “boat” quite well 🙂
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What an amazing display of derring-do! 🙂
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Yes, they were pretty brave even setting foot on that boat, let alone setting sail 🙂
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Had The Flame been dispatched to rescue the Titanic, it would have arrived yesterday…
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I can imagine skeletal fingers still gripping the wheel…
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Such a funny tale Ali! Powerful twin engines hitting top speed of 1.5 miles per hour – hysterical! Thanks for your contribution and be well! ^..^
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I’m glad you liked it! It was fun to write 🙂
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Still chuckling over the speed! 😀
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🙂
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Ok, this is going to be repetitive but I think my new favorite sentence is, “like a spork through a brick” what an image! I also like “Derkin gritted his teeth,” I could feel him straining to go faster. Great story!
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Ah, Derkin, bless him! That boat’s probably his pride and joy. I’m glad you liked it, it was fun writing some silly imagery 🙂
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Very nicely done. Great job of building tension and your character development was superb but your humor – well that took the day, didn’t it?
Spork through a brick, brilliant!
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I’m glad you liked it, I thought it was time for some humour. I had a laugh writing it 🙂
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What can I say, it’s all been said. Excellent!
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Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed my bit of silly fun 🙂
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HaHaHaHa! Too funny! 😀
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Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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30 feet from the coast and they made it, what an adventure! Thanks for the laugh, this was lovely, and hilarious.
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It was a close thing. Live is dangerous on the (almost) open sea 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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I liked it – I enjoyed the bit of tension that lightens in the end.
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Glad you liked it! I like popping in a bit of tension, even if in this case it was a bit tongue-in-cheek!
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Hilarious and well done, Ali. I loved the description “like a spork through a brick.” 😀 — Suzanne
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That seems to have been quite a popular phrase 🙂
Thanks!
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Absolutely wonderful! Glad they make it home for tea. 🙂
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That’s the main thing! A nice fish and chip supper after all the excitement 🙂
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Sounds wonderful. I used to live in Nova Scotia and New Brunswick (Canada). Fish and chips, and my favourite: fried clams — the real thing fresh from the sand bed.
Now I’m hungry — hard to find good f&c here — use the wrong fish.
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I’d be lost without proper fish and chips. Fortunately they’re everywhere here!
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I’m still laughing…. the imagery is wonderful! I love the “spork through a brick” line…. too funny!!! Loved this!!!
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I’m glad I made you laugh 🙂 The word “spork” by itself is funny!
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I really loved your story, but i felt like you rushed through it. You could continue on this next week 🙂 Cheers!(i’m sure it’s from the word limit)
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I had to pretty much cut it in half. It did leave me feeling a bit disappointed with the whole thing as it could have been so much more, hence the rather rushed ending :-(. I’m glad you liked what I managed to squeeze in, anyway!
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A very amusing story that had me smiling then grinning ~ Nice work Ali ~
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Thanks, I’m glad it made you smile and grin!
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What a fun story! I love your language use throughout – though ‘like a spork through a brick’ has to be my favourite! Really well done. 🙂
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Lots of people liked that line 🙂
I’m glad you liked it. It was lots of fun to write!
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I love the ending which is very surprising and I can’t stop grinning.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it and it made you smile 🙂
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Lovely story. I also liked your use of words. Recently looked up “gamboling”, it’s so British that it took me time to find it. Or the internet dictionary to allow me to, insisted on gambling.
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Thanks, it was a lot of fun to write, all the totally misplaced tension.
Although “gambolling” is quite general in description, I’ve only ever seen it applied to lambs 🙂
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Haha loved it! One of your best Drali, very funny 🙂
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Thanks, I enjoyed writing it, it was fun 🙂
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Fun! 🙂
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Fun to write, too!
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That was a father-son outing I could live without! Enjoyed the read!
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I think they had fun, though! Glad you liked it.
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