Diner of DOOM
It’s Friday Fictioneers time again, hosted by Rochelle, and this week the photo was contributed by Raina Ng. We get around 100 words to write about a picture, and you can read this week’s other stories by clicking on the blue froggy.
Be afraid. Be very afraid, as I present to you “The Diner of DOOM”.
Copyright Raina Ng
Kat and Jed exchanged anxious glances as they hid behind the diner’s counter. Outside the noise was getting worse – banging on the door and windows, groaning, breaking glass.
“They’re still out there. What are we going to do?” asked Kat, trembling.
“What can we do? Call someone? Who’s going to come? We’re on our own.”
“Barricade the doors,” said Kat. “If they get in here… it’ll be carnage.”
“We could distract them. Throw them some burgers.”
“Urgh! The thought of watching them mindlessly rip into the meat…” shuddered Kat. “Animals!”
“Well,” said Jed, “it was your idea to do a Student Happy Hour.”
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That’s great. Really tense and then I laughed out loud!
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Mission accomplished, then 🙂 Glad you liked it!
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Hahaha! The end surprised me, and made me laugh! 😀
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That’s what I was aiming for, I’m glad I made you laugh 🙂
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LOL. It turned from a horror story to a funny one. Good one.
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Thanks, with only 50 more words I could really have amped up the tension!
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We had a diner like that near college. I tremble with the memories … but man oh man, did they make a GREAT burger. Greasy, with fried onions, served up with chips on a hot platter. Ah, those were the days.
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That sounds like a student’s dream! My mouth’s watering just at the thought.
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I was fully into a “Walking Dead” episode until the last few lines there. Nice!
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Thanks, exactly what I was going for!
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Ha. I thought this was a zombie tale. No, it’s college students. Almost the same.
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Ha, you’re not wrong 🙂 Though obviously when I was a student all students were hard working, conscientious and cool.
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Yeah, I remember those days.
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🙂
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Ha! Lovely one. Worse than zombies!
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Way worse.
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oh, what a wonderful turn at the end. Ready for monsters . . . Well, I guess we still got them.
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We did for sure. I can imagine them hoping it’s zombies rather than students 🙂
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Didn’t expect that! Thanks for the chuckle. Good response to the prompt.
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I’m glad you liked my little twist!
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Oh, you. Nice twist. 🙂
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What am I like?! 🙂
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And there I was preparing myself for something horrific…then again, Students/ rampaging…almost the same thing!
Great and funny story!
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Zombies. Students. Same result 🙂
I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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LOL! Good one!
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Thanks 🙂
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If there’s a happy hour, the students will come! Any excuse for a happy hour. Good one! I’m dying. I can’t think of anything at the moment.
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“Happy Hour” is like “Holy Grail” for students. It certainly was when I was one!
I’m sure something will come to you 🙂
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I remember the ferocity in which my sons football team tore into their meals. I’d get put of the way!
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It’s best not to get between students and college athletes and their food. Especially if it’s “all you can eat” 🙂
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it was an ending i didn’t expect from you. i expected the worst. 🙂
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I think it was the worst – hungry rampaging students 🙂
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Hahaha.. i was thinking of something ominous. BuT this ending is genius.
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I’m glad you liked the ending, I’m in “comedy mode” at the moment 🙂
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Reminds me of the time I took charge of the first graders as prefect 😀 Didn’t turn out so well. Genius ending indeed.
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That sounds like a recipe for mayhem and anarchy! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂
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Nicely defused at the end there. 🙂
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Thanks, I like building tension and then twisting it at the end 🙂
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Excellent surprise twist, and oh so true! For a good burger … I’ll bet everyone has at least one memory of the perfect bite! 🙂 Thanks for visiting my blog, I’ll have to consider this flash fiction challenge too. Such fun!
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Just wanted you to know, I dipped my toe in the pool and then jumped right in! 🙂 Gave you all the blame, I mean credit!
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I just read it – very good! And thanks for the “credit” 🙂
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The perfect bite – like “The Perfect Storm” except with more tasty goodness 🙂
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Very good. I was laughing at the title and then thought are you serious this week? But no.
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No, I’m in comedy mode at the moment! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Comedy mode works for me 🙂
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🙂
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I loved the last line! I was not expecting it to be students… Good story Ali! ^..^
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No zombies here! Well, students…
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I remember those days and the damage we did! 😀
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Me too!
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Students!?!? Do they even have any money? What was Kat thinking?
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I don’t think she was thinking, ES 😦
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Great story! You set us up with your title and lead in to the story. But students can be pretty scary, too! (I used to be a college professor, so I know!) 😉
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At least you know where you are with zombies 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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True! 🙂
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HahHah! Good one!
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Glad you liked it!
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Beautifully Written
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Thanks!
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I laughed at the end. I’ve been to Student Happy Hours and that is an apt description. Hope the hamburger was cooked! Don’t want to get sued for creating bad stomachs, too.
Great story and fun read.
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I always put a “bad stomach” down to the ten pints of beer when I was a student. Maybe it was the food all along 🙂
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Yes, it’s always the food.
Beer is a whole food group on to itself.
Wow, 10 pints. You would loose me at 8!
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That was a long time ago…
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Hilarious! The best twist ending I’ve read in a long time. Nicely done, Alistair!!!
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I’m glad you liked my little twist 🙂
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Loved it….very funny!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Students in their feelings of ecstasy are difficult to control 🙂
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If not impossible. In fact, best just to get out of their way 🙂
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Shades of Animal House. That was hilarious. Those kids would frighten zombies away. I loved that twist at the end, Ali. Seems fun-loving students are more dangerous in a pack. 😀 — Suzanne
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Definitely more dangerous in a pack, and more scary too. Give me zombies any day! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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You always surpise us, with your stories, Draliman. We were awaiting the outcome with tension and laugh it off at the end 😀 Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend 🙂 ❤
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I’m glad you liked the twist at the end of my story! You have a good weekend too 🙂
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Great twist! I was really expecting zombies. 🙂
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And you got zombi… er, I mean students 🙂
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This is very funny.
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I’m glad you liked it!
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Hahaha! I loved it! Totally not what I expected, which made the punchline even better.
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I was hoping people would leap to straight to “zombies” 🙂
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I certainly did. Mission accomplished!
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This make me shudder.. actually worse than I anticipated.. I thought it would be something benign like a zombie feeding frenzy.. but students..
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Give me some nice predictable zombies any day.
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Dear Draliman, Cute and funny story – I coughed on my coffee when I read the last sentence – you are so clever! Just great! Nan
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I’m glad you liked it! Sorry about the coffee 🙂
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What can I say that others haven’t already? So, I just say ‘oh no!” and then “hahaha!”
Ellespeth
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Glad you liked it!
I’m not sure students are preferable to zombies, though 🙂
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Dear Ali,
You made me laugh out loud. Thank you, I needed that. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
I’m glad I made you laugh! I think I remember you commenting on someone else’s contribution once that you’re not into zombie stories (if I’m remembering correctly), so I did wonder what you’d be thinking of this until you reached the end 🙂
Ali
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Honestly, zombies never entered my mind. And yes, you do remember correctly. Zombies and vampires leave me cold. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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That was good. Very good.
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Thank you 🙂
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hilarious. have you considered putting your little stories together into a book some time? people would pay for this stuff you know..
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I do think about it from time to time. Just choose stories which don’t rely on the photos (or take some similar ones myself). One day…
I’m glad you liked it!
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Even if you were inspired by the photos, the stories are still yours- you should do it! 🙂
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She showed such innocence to such a hard truth!
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She certainly should have known better!
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