MFTS – Hedge Attack!
Here is my contribution to Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. This week it is using my opening line!
We get around 150 words to finish the story based on an opening sentence (in bold in my story) and a photo.
To read the other stories, click on the blue froggy.
The barista shook his head. That hedge couldn’t have moved closer overnight. Could it?
The next day it was half-way to the door. The barista rubbed his eyes but said nothing, fearing that the madness that had inflicted his late grandfather was taking hold.
Two days later, they were in the shop! Now everybody noticed. The barista’s relief that his sanity was intact was short-lived, however, as the hedge slithered towards him.
“Wha… what do you want?” he screeched, trembling.
“How rude!” said one of the hedge-people.
“Whatever happened to ‘Good morning, may I take your order’?” muttered another.
“Cappuccinos all round!” said a third. The barista breathed a sigh of relief. “And one more thing…” (the barista’s heart thumped in his chest) “… a plate of blueberry muffins!” The barista smiled and filled their order. All that worry and panic over nothing.
At their table, the hedge-people were talking.
“Lovely coffee, that!”
“Lovely. Delicious muffins!”
“Delicious! Right, everyone finished? Good. Okay, let’s kill these hedge-trimming human bastards. Who’s got the Huge Ball of Destruction?”
For a second I thought we would have a happy ending… A clever twist with the last line, though. 🙂
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Happy ending? What’s that then? 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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Must have cappuccinos first, then kill the humans. Those hedge-people have their priorities straight!! Great story!!!
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Definitely! Need to caffeine-up before getting down to work 🙂
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Haha! Instead of eat and run, they eat and kill. Great story Ali! Thanks for the prompt sentence this week.
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First things first. Those muffins looked too good to miss out on!
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Yes, it is too bad they weren’t good enough to want to keep them alive so they can make them some more. 🙂 Great story!
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They can just move on to the next coffee shop 🙂
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Yes, they can.
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You just can’t relax for minute. You have to watch everything all the time. Geez.
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You certainly can’t trust human-shaped hedges.
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Love the turn around at the end! Well done Ali and thank you so much for helping with this week’s challenge! We had some fun, – neh? Thanks for another excellent contribution to the MFtS challenge, and be well… ^..^
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I’m glad you liked it! Despite having the photo and opening line for days it still took me until yesterday afternoon to decide on a story 🙂
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That happens. I choose the photo early in the week. Come up with an opening line. Change that a few times. Then I figure out what I am going to on Monday. I have had a hard time with one of the challenges… Thanks again Ali. You did a great job with that opening line! Be well… ^..^
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Thanks, you too!
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My goodness but that was a whole lot of niceness leading to destruction….militant hedge people….enjoyed your take….
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It doesn’t hurt to be polite before the violence!
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It took them, what, four days just to get inside the shop? I like the barista’s chances of outrunning these hedge people.
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That was them in “sneak mode”. I bet they can really move when their sap’s up!
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Reblogged this on On Writing…Writing On and commented:
Rather than write my OWN Mondays Finish the Story this week, I’m-a-gunna reblog this fabulous little tidbit from Dramlian on Life. Laughing is good for you people!
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Had to reblog this ’cause it was too darn funny. And much easier than trying to come up with my own MFTS this week. 🙂 Thanks for the great bit of Flash.
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I’m glad you liked it, and thanks for the reblog 🙂
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O boy.
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ha ha.. nice one.. enjoyed reading it. i liked the twist. A proper blend of fiction and stroy well served by barista! 🙂
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
I always like a little twist at the end 🙂
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Haha, omg, revenge of the hedges! This gave me such a laugh! Nice dialog.
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Thanks! We need to watch out next time we reach from the hedge trimmers…
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That’s the reason why I never trim my hedges. Yeh, that’s the reason :p
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🙂
Now I just need to write a story about why it’s not a good idea to wash my car, do the gardening…
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Reblogged this on momentarylapseofsanity.
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Thank you 🙂
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Truly fun! Hedge revenge, but only after coffee and muffins! They have their priorities straight! Good one, and congrats on a great photo and prompt!
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You can’t go slaughtering humans on an empty stomach! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Congratulations on being chosen to supply the first line this week, Ali. What a sneaky twist at the end. Where are the hedge trimmers when you need them? I’m wondering what kind of destruction a hedge ball can wreak. Those people need to be trimmed at the knees. Nasty hedge people. 😦 Well done, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne
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Maybe one of the customers is a landscape gardener. Though he’ll probably be the first victim!
Coming up with an opening line isn’t as easy as I thought it would be 🙂
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Huge ball of destruction should have been checked at the door,
Just sayin’.
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Starbucks bouncers aren’t what they once were, sadly.
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A terrific finish that came out of the green ~ The unsheared hedges will control the topirarists ~ Blood and sap will flow and mingle ~
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topiarists ~ They are already controlling keyboards by cutting out letters ~ Have a great week Ali 🙂
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Darn those crazy “topirarists” 🙂
You have a great week too!
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“out of the green” hee hee 🙂
It’s war of the Hedgerows.
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You tricked us into expecting a “happy ending” ….Good surprise at the end there. Also the descriptions of the barista’s various stages of feeling set the tone of the story excellently.
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Happy ending? Me? 🙂
I’m glad you enjoyed it, and the barista’s constantly changing state of mind!
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perhaps he really had fallen prey to Grandad’s dementia and he placed them in the shop himself? He might have a hard time convincing the authorities it was ‘the hedge people” wot killed everyone? 😀
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That’s something I hadn’t considered, and entirely possible! Maybe too much coffee really has sent him over the edge 🙂
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political correctness these days eh? where will it end?? we have hedges demanding muffins for gods sake! :p
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Everybody/thing deserves a tasty muffin treat 🙂
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Yes.. Raising some interesting questions about their digestive system though :p
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🙂
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Love the twist at the end! Great story, Ali!
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I’m a real one for twists! I’m glad you liked it.
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