MFTS – Second Chance
Here is my story for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get an opening sentence which this week was written by Martin Furman, and a photo courtesy of Barbara herself.
To read this week’s other stories click on the blue froggy. My story is a little longer than 150 words (sorry) but I did manage to get it down from nearly 200. The opening line (which isn’t part of the word count) is in bold in my story.
Delphine always wanted to pilot her father’s plane and when he forgot his keys on her tenth birthday, she knew that taking off would be easy.
Come to think of it, landing would also be easy. Dead easy. With an emphasis on dead. But Delphine didn’t come to think of it and now she was soaring through the air, staring at a bewildering array of controls.
“Come on,” she thought. “I’ve seen Daddy do this enough times.” Heart pounding, she eased the stick forward as the ground came closer, closer. “I’m going to do it!” she thought excitedly. “Daddy will be so proud of…”
Trephos, Angel-In-Charge of Juvenile Admissions climbed down off his cloud.
“Well,” he said, shaking his head. “Made a bit of a pig’s ear of that landing, didn’t we?”
Delphine nodded sadly.
“Let’s see,” he continued, reaching for a large ledger. “Wow! You’re our one trillionth customer! That means you get a second chance!”
Suddenly Delphine was back home, alive, staring at her Dad’s keys. She grabbed them and ran out the door.
“I think I know what I did wrong last time!” she thought excitedly as she ran towards the plane.
Oh dear, looks like she may be back sooner than Trephos had planned.
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I fear you may be right 😦
But we may live in hope!
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You know, there might just be a one-in-a-trillion chance that little Delphine might survive 🙂
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Let’s hope so! She seems confident enough that this time she’ll get it right 🙂
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Hahaha! Seems Delphine has a thick skull. Hopefully, she makes the landing this time.
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Me too, otherwise her skull won’t be think enough when she hits the ground 😦
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Looks like she will never learn! Here’s for third chances!!! Great story!!
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She may need one!
Thanks, glad you liked it 🙂
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I’m hoping for a happy ending on this. It’s partly the dad’s fault for leaving his keys behind. Well done, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I’m hoping for a happy ending too 🙂 You’d think she’d know better after the first time, though.
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Love it, that’s a great wee story and I love the twist at the end. I’m going to have a go at this myself 🙂
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I just read yours, it’s great 🙂
I’m glad you liked mine!
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Some people only learn the hard way. Or maybe … she’ll get it right next time. It could happen, right?
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It could, but I don’t think it will 🙂
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“If at first you don’t succeed, just continue getting yourself killed” – Buster Possum
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Words to “live” by. Thanks, Buster!
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You have to admire her persistence. When I read this, I actually groaned and thought, “Oh boy, not again!” LOL great story Dman 🙂
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I’m sure Trephos will wonder at her common sense when she turns up again after only five minutes 🙂
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Loved your twist! Do overs come for a reason!
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Something she hasn’t learned!
Thanks 🙂
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Oh! boy someone needs a lesson on being careful.
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Unfortunately I don’t think she’ll get the chance…
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Most entertaining! 😀
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Thanks 🙂
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Never look a gift horse in the mouth! Great story Ali! Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge, and be well… ^..^
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If at first you don’t succeed…
🙂
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So true…
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Maybe she’ll have better luck this time – though I’m not holding out all that much hope… I think Trephos might be seeing her again rather sooner than he’d intended! Great story, Ali. 🙂
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She’ll be Trephos’ yo-yo customer. Though I doubt she’ll get a third chance. Hey, maybe she’ll land it this time with only a few broken bones!
I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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lol Some people truly never learn.
But if she does live through it, and keeps that attitude for the rest of her life, she’ll go far.
Or die young.
Either way, her live will never be boring.
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Very true. There’ll be no holding her back if she can only remember the landing procedure…
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Misinterpretation of a “second chance”? Hope her bonus includes support…
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Yes, I think she heard “second chance at landing” rather than “second chance at life”. Well, she’s only ten 🙂
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Oh wow.. Brilliant. I thought all hope was lost and felt sorry for Delphine. But the second chance was a brilliant twist. But again, there she goes again. Loved this rollercoaster.
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I couldn’t leave a poor ten year old dead at the end! At least this way she has a chance. I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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OMC…but forgive her, she’s only ten 😀 Pawkisses 🙂 ❤
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She is just a young one. Let’s hope she gets to be eleven 🙂
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She might have nine lives too… 😀 😀
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🙂
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This is wonderful! Thanks
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I’m glad you liked it!
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