MFTS – What Goes Around…
Here is my story for Barbara Beacham’s Monday’s Finish the Story. This week’s photo was provided by Marcy B. Ayanian. She also provided the opening sentence! The opening sentence is in bold in my story, and to view this week’s other contributions, click the blue froggy.
I spent all day yesterday holding on to a comedy story with grim determination, but couldn’t think of a decent ending so I’ve written this instead.
As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre.
The way his eyes flashed with amusement at some joke. The way his body moved while playing tennis at their Paris manor. The smile on his face when he repeated “I do” at their wedding, the smile which remained throughout the reception, and later, when they were alone…
The way his beautiful eyes opened wide as saucers as the laced brandy took effect, the poison causing his heart to falter, then stop.
She even spared a thought (however briefly) for the maid, eyes streaming tears as she was lead to the gallows, lips protesting her innocence of a crime she didn’t commit.
Lady Genevieve smiled as she rode back to the manor – her manor now – and looked out over Paris.
In the shadows lurked her butler, sometime lover of the maid, a grim smile on his face as he watched her sip the cocktail he’d so carefully prepared.
Some would have gone for romance, others for comedy (like you originally thought)…you went for “Arsenic and Old Lace” instead LOL
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I haven’t read the others yet (I always write mine first so that I don’t get subconsciously influenced) but I’m sure there’s a romance or two in there.
I don’t do romance 🙂
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She’s one cold lady!
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Yeah, soon to be cold and dead heh heh 🙂
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I admire how morbid you are! 🙂
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Karma is definitely a bitch. Sometimes, Karma looks like the butler 🙂
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Turns out this time the butler did do it (the second one anyway).
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Ooh, I like this one. What a cold and calculating lady. But I think she’s about to get her comeuppance… Good on the butler. Some lovely descriptions, Ali. 🙂
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Karma, your name is “the Butler” 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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So it was the butler! Great story Ali!
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That’ll teach her for killing his girlfriend!
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What goes around comes around. Heheheh.
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Yep, something she’s learning a little too late!
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What a great twist at the end! Loved the story Ali! Thank you for participating in the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well… ^..^
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I’m always one for a twisty ending 🙂
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I agree: Write first, read others afterward. Really fun read!
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I don’t like to be influenced!
I’m glad you liked it.
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You never disappoint. Don’t think you would be as good writing romance. 🙂
DJ
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No, I tried romance for a FF story once. When I wrote “she melted” everyone, knowing my writing, assumed she’d actually melted :-(. Well, I tried…
I’m glad you liked it!
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It takes great talent to kill off three people in 150 words or less. I admire your efficiency!
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Kill kill kill 🙂
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Karma has never been so swift. 😀
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She never even got a chance to try out her heated swimming pool!
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Yes! she got what was a commin’ to her! Evilsquirrel is correct…I admire your efficiency! 😀
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She certainly did! I like to keep my deaths/wordage ratio up 🙂
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Wow.. A story within a story within a story.. Loved the numerous twists you have in this story.
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It’s a twisted web of deceit and murder 🙂
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Wonderful! You made my day…love the twists and flips. Well told!
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I’m glad you enjoyed my twisty tale of murder most horrid 🙂
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Wow, Ali. People are dropping like flies in your story. It sounds like that estate might have a curse on it. It will probably have ghosts in future. 😀 — Suzanne
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I certainly wouldn’t want to inherit it next 🙂
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Sorry about not mentioning the most important thing.. Really well done. 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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The plot thickens. I also like to write before I read the other submissions. Sometimes that can be a hard thing to do though when they show up in my reader before I’ve seen the prompt.
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I know I have to get on and write my story when my email inbox starts to fill up with stories I don’t want to read yet!
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And like Ms. Joshi I too neglected to say how much I enjoyed the story, sorry about that. Great story.
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Lovely. Live by the sword, die by the sword. She got too comfortable too soon.
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She certainly did. After what she did she should have been watching her back.
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What twisted thoughts you have, she said admiringly!
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Thanks! I think 🙂
It was that or a Paris romance and I can’t do romance so that would be a big fail.
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Oooo I like that, and the little twist at the end 🙂
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Thanks! I do like my little twists 🙂
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ahh, you are the man, DrAliman!
I wanted her to win the manor, not fair after all her planning.
OK, I’m a wee bit off.
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It does seem that after all her careful planning she should have at least got to enjoy her manor for a little while 🙂
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