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FF – The End of the World

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle, who also provided this week’s photo.

For this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

 

The world had ended.

Plants and flowers withered and died, their once-delicate scent now pungent, cloying. The wind, foul, biting, left an almost chemical aftertaste. The few people still out hurried past, eyes downcast, lifeless. Animals slunk into darkened corners, seeking refuge.

The world had ended. For Shelley Smith.

“He’s dumped me, Mum! He was the one, I swear! I’ll never love anyone else! Not ever!”

She ran into her little en-suite and slammed the door, all tears and sobbing.

“What’s that, the third one this month?” Mum shook her head.

“And there’s still more month left,” replied Dad. “Teenagers!”

 

  1. August 16, 2017 at 7:49 pm

    I think that’s my granddaughter.

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  2. August 16, 2017 at 7:53 pm

    Oh boy, you really nailed it. I have a couple of teenagers myself. Voice was superb and the tale wonderfully told.

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:35 am

      Thanks! I don’t have kids but this is how they seem to react on the telly 🙂

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  3. August 16, 2017 at 8:00 pm

    Love this! Such an accurate portrayal of the melodrama in a teenager’s life. Hope you don’t mind, but I noticed a small error in the story. Mum refers to ‘the third one this month’, and Dad says there’s ‘still one month left’. Does Dad mean there’s still one WEEK left? 😊

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    • Dale
      August 17, 2017 at 3:01 am

      And… it’s an en-suite 😉

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:39 am

      Thanks, I’m glad is sounded “true to life”.
      Dad says “… there’s still more month left” 🙂

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      • August 17, 2017 at 1:54 pm

        Me bad … I no speak English. 😉 Sorry!

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        • August 17, 2017 at 2:00 pm

          With “on suite” I’m not one to talk… 🙂

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          • August 17, 2017 at 2:08 pm

            It’s borrowed from French, so you’re off the hook. 😁

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            • August 17, 2017 at 2:35 pm

              Yay 🙂

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              • August 17, 2017 at 2:44 pm

                Does one really say ‘there’s still month left’ in your neck of the woods? I understand it now, but have never heard it said that way before. In the UK, I heard the word ‘poorly’ used as an adjective rather than an adverb for the first time.

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                • August 17, 2017 at 2:53 pm

                  It works (though is probably not correct English) with “more”, as in “there’s still more ice cream left”, for example. It’s incorrect strictly speaking because “month” is not a collective noun, but it sounds funny. I wouldn’t have used it outside of dialogue, though!
                  As for “poorly”, people in the UK get poorly all the time. It’s when you’re not sick enough to be properly ill 🙂

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                  • August 17, 2017 at 3:08 pm

                    Oops, I forgot to include the word ‘more’ (note to self: quote properly going forward). Thanks for the explanation! Poorly = man flu? 😉

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                    • August 18, 2017 at 10:56 am

                      Sometimes, but it’s just a general word for “not well”. Though, when used to describe a child in my opinion it’s “real”, when used to describe an adult there’s a sense of sarcasm about it 🙂

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                    • August 18, 2017 at 1:29 pm

                      Ah … thanks for the insight! 😁

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                    • August 18, 2017 at 2:47 pm

                      🙂

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  4. August 16, 2017 at 8:37 pm

    I was well into the apocalypse there until you hit me with this superb tale!

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  5. August 16, 2017 at 9:05 pm

    Nice reveal halfway through. Some things are that important though.

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  6. August 16, 2017 at 9:16 pm

    Funny twist. Ah, to have the perspective of teenagers again, where this really *is* the worst thing that’s ever happened to them. Lucky them.

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:40 am

      Yeah, when I think about the things that seemed so important back then…
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  7. August 16, 2017 at 9:17 pm

    This really had me laughing! I was contemplating the end of the world and it turned out to be teenage angst! Most of us were drama llamas at that age! 😀 One of your best!

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  8. Dale
    August 17, 2017 at 3:01 am

    Lordy… You could not pay me enough to return to those “end of the world” days!

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:44 am

      Me neither. Everything was sooo important back then…

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  9. August 17, 2017 at 4:40 am

    Epilogue:

    And after Shelley finished having her a good, long cry, she emerged from her room to the smell of withered plants and burnt, decaying flesh. There was a foul, chemical aftertaste in the air. The landscape outside her room, where a house had once stood, a barren, smoldering wasteland. Mum and Dad were not there, waiting for their daughter to get over this latest jilting, like they usually were. It looks like this time Shelley was right. She would never find another one, for there was no other one. The world really had ended this time….. for everyone BUT Shelley Smith!

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:46 am

      See, you should join the challenge. I start, you finish. That way we get 200 words!
      Nice one 🙂

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      • August 17, 2017 at 8:25 am

        One of my favorite activities in Senior Composition class involved collaborative writing like that. My row was full of other strange kids, so our combined stories were always the best in class! I’ll see if I can provide another postscript to next week’s story….

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        • August 17, 2017 at 1:12 pm

          You can be a Friday Fictioneer by proxy 🙂

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  10. August 17, 2017 at 5:17 am

    Very well done and sad to say, very true of mercurial teenage romances. 😍

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:47 am

      Thanks – I can see this playing out in homes everywhere 🙂

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  11. August 17, 2017 at 6:31 am

    I remember that end of the world feeling – and over someone who really wasn’t worth it too! Nicely built opening and reveal. Great stuff

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:47 am

      But they seemed really worth it at the time, I bet 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  12. August 17, 2017 at 7:14 am

    Haha… brilliant voice and misdirection, drailman, Even though I was never daughter-ified, I can just picture this scene. Lovely. ‘real’ dialogue exchange at end.

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:48 am

      I like my little mid-story twists! I’ve not got any kids at all, but I used to watch Eastenders so I know all about “life” 🙂

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  13. August 17, 2017 at 7:29 am

    Ha, ha. The end of her personal teen world. If my daughter had to spend one evening at home without friends she’d curl into a ball in a large living room chair complaining and looking deserted. My son, on the other hand, could spend hours by himself reading. Hilarious and good writing, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:49 am

      I tended more towards your son’s state of mind 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  14. Moon
    August 17, 2017 at 7:38 am

    hahhaha. I really liked how you described her sense of utter hopelessness.
    Brilliant!

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    • August 17, 2017 at 7:51 am

      Thanks! Can you imagine anything worse happening ever when you’re young and (think you’re) in love… 🙂

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      • Moon
        August 17, 2017 at 8:34 am

        Hehehe. I am glad those days are ‘long ago and far away’ now 🙂😀

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  15. August 17, 2017 at 9:55 am

    Haha.. so more month is left. Will she be able to restrict to three ?

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  16. Jelli
    August 17, 2017 at 12:09 pm

    Ah, teenie bopper loves… gotta love the entertainment. heheh.

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  17. August 17, 2017 at 3:16 pm

    Hahahaha! That’s teenagers for you! Great story Mark!

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  18. August 17, 2017 at 3:16 pm

    Oops, sorry I called you Mark. Great story, Ali!

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    • August 18, 2017 at 10:53 am

      That’s okay. I always wanted to be named “Mark” and now my dream has come true 🙂

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  19. August 17, 2017 at 4:33 pm

    Your cunning plan sucked me right in, especially with the slinking animals! Loved this take on the prompt.

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    • August 18, 2017 at 11:00 am

      Bwahaha! It’s always nice when a plan comes together 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  20. August 17, 2017 at 5:25 pm

    Gads. And this is what I have to look forward to with my daughter. *sigh* Great story. I think you totally nailed it.

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    • August 18, 2017 at 11:01 am

      Judging by the comments from people who have daughters of that age, I believe you are correct 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  21. August 17, 2017 at 7:02 pm

    i was buying into your usual fare only to be disappointed. what a believable twist. 🙂

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  22. August 18, 2017 at 8:17 am

    MOL… Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend 🙂 ❤

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  23. August 18, 2017 at 9:49 am

    I’ve got three of the little critters. This is spot on!

    Click to read my FriFic

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    • August 18, 2017 at 11:02 am

      I’m glad I managed to get the reaction just right 🙂

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  24. August 18, 2017 at 11:08 am

    Haha! This was good fun, Ali. Loved it 😀

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    • August 18, 2017 at 12:05 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  25. August 18, 2017 at 3:37 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Spot on…as has been said numerous times, and rightly so. I had all boys so their teens were a little different. However, I remember being a teenage girl. Like Dale, you couldn’t pay me enough to go back to those times. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 18, 2017 at 5:50 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I have no kids, I was hoping that what I’ve seen on the TV and bits and bobs of others’ kids was representative 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!
      Ali

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  26. August 18, 2017 at 4:32 pm

    A realistic scene! Loved the sudden shift from the first scene.

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    • August 18, 2017 at 5:51 pm

      I glad you liked it! I wanted to draw people into an apocalyptic frame of mind (like poor Shelley’s!) first 🙂

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  27. August 19, 2017 at 1:16 pm

    This story is dead on lol. So corect and true.

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    • August 19, 2017 at 3:52 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! A typical every-day end-of-the-world scenario 🙂

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  28. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    August 19, 2017 at 10:29 pm

    You brought me into a dark dystopian world. I laughed when I learned it was just teenage hysteria.

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:17 am

      It’s only a dark dystopian world inside her own head. I’m sure by tomorrow she’ll be fine again 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  29. August 20, 2017 at 9:35 am

    Ah, the pains of being teenager. I remember those days of angst and the feelings of “what am I gonna do now?” scenarios. But, my mom always said things would get better, and they did. Good work, Ali!

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    • August 20, 2017 at 10:08 am

      But I bet you didn’t believe her at the time… 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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      • August 20, 2017 at 2:03 pm

        Actually, I was a very good kid. Kept out of trouble, which was easy to do when your town is small and you have parents who will run after you — one being a teacher, the other doing law enforcement on the side.

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  30. August 20, 2017 at 3:04 pm

    Excellent buildup to the punch line 🙂

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    • August 20, 2017 at 6:01 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  31. August 20, 2017 at 6:50 pm

    Spectacular dramatics are part of the everyday life of most teenagers, and woe betide anyone unfortunate enough to live with them! Love the way you’ve structured this story. The ending is perfect. 🙂

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    • August 21, 2017 at 7:11 am

      Mostly they grow out of it, fortunately 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  32. August 21, 2017 at 4:01 am

    Oh my…I remember these days!
    You put me there with my own daughter, once again.

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  34. August 21, 2017 at 12:20 pm

    Hehe, the young ones 🙂

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  35. August 21, 2017 at 3:41 pm

    And why do we ever want to be teens again?…

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    • August 22, 2017 at 10:58 am

      I want the youthfulness without all the rest of it 🙂

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  36. August 23, 2017 at 7:41 pm

    The melodrama of teenagers! Very fun, Ali. 🙂

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