FF – Country Holiday
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. The photo was contributed by Russell Gayer.
Copyright Russell Gayer
“No. No way.”
“You said you wanted a break in the country. Well, here we are. In the country.”
“It smells.”
“Country air!”
“There’s no internet.”
“Peace at last!”
“The bed’s all lumpy.”
“It’s the real country experience! Now, you finish unpacking while I visit the bathroom. It was a long journey. The brochure says it’s around the back somewhere.”
Two minutes later…
“Pack your bags. I’ve booked us into the hotel in town.”
“Eh? What happened to country…”
“Don’t.”
“But…”
“Just don’t.”
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draliman on life 
No sense of adventure. 😉
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We’d’ve just toughed it out in my day…
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We went to somewhere like that in Belgium. The loo had a chain flush. I pulled and the cistern fell on my head! We didn’t stay.
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Haha, I mean, oh dear, how terrible.
Ooh, can you do it again and video it? It would be a YouTube sensation!
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On your head be it!
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🙂
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Great stuff – loved this story!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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I’d rather be a prisoner with access to proper plumbing than a free person without access to it. 😉 A fun read. 🙂
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Proper plumbing is a must-have for me 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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LOL D-Man at his best 😀 That was fun!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Dear Ali,
Love the dialogue. Nothing more needs to be said. Good one!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
Ali
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This is precisely why I don’t go camping! 😀 Great story! 🙂
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Me too. I like the idea of camping, but not the lack of proper toilet facilities 🙂
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Given the photo, that sounds like a totally reasonable response to me! Great dialogue, especially the ending.
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For sure. I wouldn’t stay 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Love the dialogue, especially the last three lines.
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Thanks! I tried to reflect his mood. Not only had his grand plan come to nought but he was currently unwilling to accept that his wife was right all along. We men and our pride, you understand 🙂
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That would be me! I need running water, please and kindly thank you. 🙂
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Running water and an indoor toilet is the very least I expect from an establishment 🙂
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Yes. 🙂
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Loved the dialogue in this one, Alistair! So much fun… Nope.. I wouldn’t stay either!
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Thanks! I would be right out of there too 🙂
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It was the leaves on the toilet paper roll, wasn’t it?
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They were those really rough ones that give you a bum rash.
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Exactly how I behave on a holiday if I find a dirty loo 🙂
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Me too. One must have one’s standards 🙂
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A perfect response to the picture prompt and a very enjoyable read.
I am glad she didn’t have to beg or plead any further.😀
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Her husband has a line, and finally it was crossed 🙂
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A traumatic experience to forget!
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For sure!
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Ha, ha. It’s been a while since I roughed it that much. No thank you. I agree with her. Good writing, Ali. The dialogue was great. 😀 — Suzanne
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I wouldn’t have stayed either! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Hahahaha! He decided he didn’t want the country experience after all! LOL! Cute story, Ali!
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He was hoping more for a “country gentleman experience” I think 🙂
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Loved the ending.
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Thanks!
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Great realistic dialogue. I too laughed at the ending.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂 I like writing dialogue.
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Haha! City folks in the countryside… Like fish on land. 😀
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Yeah. They shouldn’t even try, really 🙂
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Shame he didn’t stay long enough to see the whirlpool bath down at the creek.
There’s “roughing it” and then there’s just plain rough. Well done!
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He’s missed out on a real delight. I’m glad you liked it!
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this is funny as it gets. well done. 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Couldn’t handle the “roughing it”? Cute story!
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Too used to city living 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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When I was a young kids, my parents took us camping a lot. I remember my Dad saying “If bear #$%^ in the woods, so can you.”
We once took a two-month long camping trip in the Rocky Mountains in USA. Moved every day to a new site. Lived in the tents, and never stayed in a hotel/motel. I was 11 then. Remember every single day of that trip, even today. It was a wonderful time.
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Wow, that’s quite a trip. Must have been quite an adventure!
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No staying power, some people.
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No, very sad. Young ‘uns these days, don’t know they’re born…
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After living for years with a windowless bathroom, I’d have embraced the fresh air!
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I did too, so one of my “must-haves” when house hunting was a bathroom with a window 🙂
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I think the appropriate thing to say when you go to a privy like that is: “Oh, shit”
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Haha, yes, very appropriate!
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Ha! Not so idyllic after all 🙂
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No. A real taste of ye olde country living 🙂
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Indoor plumbing is a line that should never be crossed! Great story, perfectly told through dialogue. Really well done, Ali. 🙂
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There’s roughing it and then there’s the Dark Ages. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Your dialogue is very natural, reflecting the changing moods of the characters, and it tells the story beautifully.
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Thanks very much, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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hehahahaaa! Hysterical laughter, followed by a “city-boy” comment.
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I’m glad you liked it! A city boy indeed.
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I’m with you. Give me comfort and then some!
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Why rough it when you can have a six-nozzle power shower at the local hotel?
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Oh wow…that sounds awesome!
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Haha, that was hilarious!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Fun read. Some experiences just… 😉
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It was one thing top far 🙂
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