FF – Inner Voice
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Dale Rogerson.
Warning: there are a couple of slightly rude words in my story for comic effect.
Copyright Dale Rogerson
“Great, isn’t it?”
“Beautiful.” No.
“We’ll be the talk of the neighbourhood!”
“We certainly will be.” … a laughing stock.
“Just wait till everyone comes round later!”
“It’ll be simply marvellous!” I feel a headache coming on.
“So, are you happy?”
“Deliriously, my love.” Shoot me now.
“What do you think, Benny?”
“It’s crap, Dad. Why can’t we have a proper Christmas tree instead of bits of sticky tape… shit, did I say that out loud? I meant, it’s amazing, father!”
“Thank you, Benny. A little more practice on your inner voice, please.”
“Of course, Father.” Piss off.
“Much better.”
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Ha ha ha! Love this! And there are definitely those who would benefit from using their inner voice…
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Ha, you’re not wrong 🙂
It’s so cool that your repair job looks like a Christmas tree!
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Hilarious!! I love the inner voice, sounds like mine from time to time.
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It’s a good job no-one can hear what we’re really thinking sometimes 🙂
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This tree reminds me of my Dad – the grandkids are always confused and disappointed with his minimal Christmas decorations!
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Ha, mine are also minimal but mainly because by the time I’ve gone up to the attic to get the tree and decorations I can’t be bothered to spend any more time on it!
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hehehe More people need to get in touch with their inner voice! 😀
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Yeah, say what you feel 🙂
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Ha! Ha! Love this. Made me laugh!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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LOVE this. I was thinking about writing about a Christmas tree but didn’t and am so glad. You did a smashing job of it. L-o-n-g ago when I was in college and came home for Christmas, my parents “presented” a tissue paper tree ~ blue and green tissue paper poked into wire, purchased from a friend. I should have applauded their artsie strangeness but didn’t.
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I hear tissue paper Christmas trees are all the rage 🙂 I’m glad you liked my story!
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Just like “A Christmas Story.” Minus the dogs, the Chinese restaurant, the lights and the snow 😀
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It’s a shame this prompt didn’t come out last month 🙂
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Love it! Very unexpected!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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That was a simply wonderful story! What kind of shit is this?
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Inner voice, Squirrel, inner voice!
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Great story – thanks for surprising me with your original take on the photo prompt! 🙂
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I’m glad you liked it! The moment I saw the shape of the tape I got fixated on a Christmas tree and ended up having to shoe-horn a story around it 🙂
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I need to get in touch with my inner voice too it seems. Hilarious!
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As long as it stays “inner” so you don’t get into trouble like Benny 🙂
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😁
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Too funny. The inner voice is a hoot.
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I’m glad you liked it!
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That inner voice… my parents managed to silence mine quite effectively.
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Benny’s parents aren’t being nearly as successful.
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sounds like a great dad who encourage his kids to speak their minds. 🙂
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Until they accidentally do, perhaps…
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Inner voices must be getting very tired in that family! 🙂
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There seems to be a great need for them 🙂
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Haha! Loved how this ended!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! A decent ending is always the hardest part. And thinking of an idea, that’s the hardest part too. And… 🙂
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This is brilliant! Well done.
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Great fun. I expect the father does a lot of unappreciated DIY
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So much goes on behind the scenes that families never see 🙂
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Loved their inner thoughts. Great humorous take on the prompt!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Very clever. A fun read.
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Dear Ali,
It’s probably a good thing that Father isn’t a mind reader. Cleverly done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Yes, he’d have a rude awakening if he was! I’m glad you liked it.
Ali
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Great take, I like the way you used the prompt … inner voice: shit Frankie you’re being bloody hypocritical, stop this immediately 🙂 (from threefoldtwenty dotcom)
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Hey, you wrote that out loud 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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Oh yes – those inner voices that are sometimes so difficult to restrain. Love your story.
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Sometimes you’ve just gotta let it out 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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This one made me laugh. Loved it!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Good one Ali. I needed a laugh this afternoon. No cricket on TV until tonight 😉
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Oh no, a cricket-less day! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂
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I didn’t even notice the Christmas tree pattern (oops)! At least Dad was trying to be festive. Or maybe Benny would’ve preferred him to be a Scrooge? 😉
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Benny would have preferred a proper tree 🙂
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Ha.. me thinks they will be the laughingstock… at least buy green duct tape if you intend to do a tree.
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Yeah, what a fool he is 🙂
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such an imaginative take on the prompt. wonderfully done story. I like the calm and patient Father. 🙂
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He’s a rock! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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LOL…well I didn’t see that!
Great eye, Ali. And a funny one.
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It’s the first thing I saw and I ended up fixating on it to the exclusion of all else 🙂
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I love that!
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🙂
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If only everyone around me worked more on their inner voice… 😀 Great story
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Thanks! Yes, if only 🙂
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MOL…great story😂😹Pawkiss🐾😙😻
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Thanks 🙂
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Still practicing on my inner voice 😉
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Aren’t we all? 🙂
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