FF – Ramblings from the Pub Part 2
Here is my contribution to Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Dawn Miller.
“Yeah, he had total tunnel vision.”
“Wow.”
“He couldn’t see anything unless it was right in front of his face.”
“Sounds nasty.”
“Yeah. The latest fad. Gym every night. Then no more gym. Night clubs every night. Then no more night clubs.”
“So what happened to him?”
“Hit by a bus. Never saw It coming. Very sad.”
“Very sad… sorry, I didn’t think you meant literal, medical tunnel vision.”
“What? No! Got obsessed with an online dating app. Head buried in his phone, didn’t like the look of someone, swiped left, BAM!”
“Karma.”
“Karma. Pint?”
“Yep.”
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Ah, the sensation of laughing at something that maybe you shouldn’t be laughing at. But what the heck, it’s funny…and then sad…but funny.
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We laughed, we cried, we laughed again… 🙂
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😀
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He was swiped left for real
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Ha ha yep!
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😀 (Ashamed to be laughing so much at this!) I’m surprised more people are not run over by cars and buses as they are glued to their phones when crossing the road.
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Me too. Many seem to have some sort of sixth sense, swerving around you on the pavement. It’s weird!
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Not everyone swerves. I’ve been run into by pedestrians looking at their phones!
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And I bet they snapped “watch where you’re going” at you, too…
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Serves him right really. It could happen to so many, I’m surprised it doesn’t happen more often.
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They probably don’t even notice when cars swerve into walls to avoid them…
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Yes, I know about the tunnel vision. Although at the pub, I often see two of everything – except on her, she has four. Randy
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Heh heh 🙂
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A gem. Just wondering at what Tinder age he died?
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I’m glad you liked it!
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Sounds like an obsessive kind of guy. So into his phone … Great dialogue!
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Thanks! Very obsessive.
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I read an article that in parts of Europe they have banned WALKING while using your mobile phone.
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Yeeks! I’d like to see how they police that.
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Real karma would be if he got the opposite of tunnel vision and could only see out of his peripheral. Gonna be hard to look at those dating apps when you can’t see what’s right in front of you….
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That would be a most annoying condition to be sure.
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Love the light-hearted tone of the narrator. Clearly no great loss for him.
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No, just a bit of gossip over a pint!
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Goodness, echoes of reality!
Susan A Eames at
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For sure!
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Dear Ali,
Such a casual conversation about a tragic event. All too true to life in every aspect. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Yes, many people have become quite jaded and tragedies can become gossip fodder.
Ali
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I feel bad for laughing, but I really enjoyed your story.
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Thanks, I allowed myself a smile too 🙂
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Obsessions kill. Eventually they’ll put motion sensors on phones like they do cars. 😀
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Linked to a little exoskeleton which would steer you away from trouble 🙂
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I liked this!
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Thanks!
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The worst part was it should have been his round! Nice one.
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Some people will do anything to get out of their round…
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Haha this made me laugh. Excellent 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Death by a dating app. How sad. 😦 — Suzanne
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Tragic, but it happens… 🙂
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Oh, ouch, that bit hard. Good one!
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Its all just gossip to our pub-goers.
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I like the way you led the readers down the tunnel, then BAM!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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You’re welcome.
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So true and I bet the driver of the vehicle had his eye on his phone – swipe left BAM.
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The driver was probably the one our hero was swiping left on too…
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Yes, I thought that!
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did somebody put him under the bus? how sad.
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Well, he walked out into the road without looking so I guess he put himself under the bus.
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Very amusing as always, Draliman. A tale of our times
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It surely is. Thanks!
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Sad but funny. Great piece.
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Thanks! Sad but funny, just like life sometimes 🙂
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Too funny. Second post I read this morning – totally unrelated – on the dangers of texting, or listening to music on the earbuds, and walking!
This was funny because of the dry way you delivered it!
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Dry is my thing 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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It is. And you do it rather well!
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🙂
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Sad story, I shouldn’t laugh, but something about the telling cracked me up. I can’t believe it, another “tunnel vision” story! We all caught it, and we all told different stories.
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Yes, quite a few tunnel visions this week!
It’s just a bit of pub gossip for these guys, so it’s all quite matter-of-fact 🙂
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I read it like a parable : ‘be warned’ or this can happen to you. I like the sentence with ‘Karma, pint ?’ very witty.
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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You’ve written this very skilfully, with a lovely crisp dialogue between the drinkers and a cunningly crafted confusion between medical tunnel vision and obsession for the latest fad. Nice work!
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked the dialogue 🙂
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Loved the ending 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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LOL…love this one!
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🙂
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Just when I thought herpes was the worst thing that could come from online dating…
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To be fair, I hear a lot of these smaller online dating sites can distribute viruses…
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Didn’t see it coming… haha.
“Pint?” 😀
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Yes please 🙂
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