FF – Building Fences
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Brenda Cox.
I used to play wiv da kids across da street. But den deir parents tried to take our stuff an’ break our houses. So our parents built a big fence. Now I can’t play wiv dem any more. An’ dey is nasty now too. Dey grabbed my teddy bear Mr Fluffles through da fence and dey kicked him aroun’. I can’t reach him. He looks lonely. Dey won’t give him back. Poor Mr Fluffles.
I hope our parents can make up soon.
It cold tonight. Mr Fluffles doesn’t have any heating. I hope Mr Fluffles is okay.
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draliman on life 
A fitting comment on our times
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Thanks – that’s what I was going for.
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A never-ending scenario. 😦
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Yes 😦
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society has become so divisive nowadays. welcome to the new reality.
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Sadly so.
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This is so innocent in many ways, if only adults were not such fools.
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Who said wisdom comes with age…?
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I hope he is, too. I think perhaps the fairies will bring him a leaf blanket and will sprinkle some fairy dust about him, to keep him nice and warm.
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Fingers crossed 🙂
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The innocents losing out while those with the power play games.
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Yes, as we are seeing first hand.
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Kids bully each other. I don’t think this is something brand new in our modern world. There are two kinds of kids: the bullies and the bullied. Most of the people I know were the bullied. But we grew up so now, we are only bullied by our own governments.
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Yes, those Russians, sorry I mean “bullies” of course, are quite nasty.
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Maybe Mr. Fluffles is a Trojan Horse 😅😈
I hope the kids don’t grow to be like their parents and keep this cycle perpetuating 😩
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Ha, yes! He’s on a mission 🙂
I hope they don’t too. It can take generations to break the cycle 😦
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Yep, always the innocent who suffer.
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Sadly so.
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He’s caught between a rock and a hard place. I hope it builds strength in him instead of breaking him. It can go either way. The dialect you used makes his story all the more poignant.
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While the “parents” fight, the resolve of the people does seem to be hardening.
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Very uplifting story 🙂 Nice.
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Thanks 🙂
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A hard story to read, for the sadness it conveys. The voice you chose conveys the naivety of the sentiments – but, my goodness, we need more of that naivety, more of the ability to see the good in people. The contemporary playing out of this story in Ukraine is a tragedy for all concerned, including the Russian conscripts. A fine piece of writing, Ali
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Thanks! I’m glad you saw I was trying to convey the current war, sorry, “special military operation” without actually mentioning it.
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I love this. A story of the hatred and violence of today told with the understanding and voice of an innocent child. It made me feel sad and that’s good. Excellent!
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Thanks 🙂 I was hoping to evoke sadness. That seems a bit mean of me, now I write it “out loud” 😮
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The voice of innocence describes the hatred and divisiveness of the adult world and we see how childish such behaviour really is. I hope the child can hold onto his innocence as he grows up – but somehow I doubt it. The hatred seems to be contagious.
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Sometimes I think children (actual children, not adults acting like children) should be ruling the world…
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Dear Ali,
So much said through the child’s voice. It’s sad when parents teach their children how to hate. I hope he can retrieve Mr. Fluffles. Very well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Yes, I keep hoping we’ll “evolve” away from all that, but not if parents pass it on.
Ali
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I don’t think I’ve ever felt so bad for a teddy bear. Powerful imagery.
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Thanks! Yes, poor Mr Fluffles 😦
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That was a sad story, Draliman, poor kids and poor mr Fluffles 😦 Extra Pawkiss🐾😽💞
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Yes, very sad 😦
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The voice comes through loud and clear … sadness.
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Yes, thanks.
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Oh poor Mr Fluffles. That made me sad. No one should be alone – not even a teddy bear.
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Somebody, save Mr Fluffles 😦
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