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FF – True Love

Here is my story for this week’s Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This is another rerun, this week requested by C. E. Ayr and the photo was contributed back in May 2013 by Ted Strutz.

This was a couple of months before my time, so I have written a story from my head! Click on the blue froggy for this week’s other stories.

Copyright Red Strutz

Copyright Ted Strutz

 

“Wow, sweetie, look at this place, isn’t it great?”

“For sure! Cosy, too. A real family business. Lovely place.”

“Can I get a glass of red, babes?”

“Of course, darling. But remember, eyes on the prize.”

“I know, I know. Cash from the till, safe in the back room.”

“Exactly. Once we’re done here, where would you like to go next, my love?”

“Ooh, shoe shopping, please. The owner’s blood is all over my boots.”

“What did I tell you earlier?”

“Um, never aim for the neck?”

“Correct! You got a real spurter there.”

“Ha, clumsy me! Love you!”

“Love you too.”

 

Categories: Fiction
  1. August 3, 2016 at 7:28 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Strange, grisly little meeting here. Almost has a Little Shop of Horrors feel to hit. Comedy and blood. Twisted tale well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 3, 2016 at 7:34 pm

      Dear Rochelle,

      I was also thinking of the film “True Romance” :-). I’m glad you liked it!

      Ali

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  2. August 3, 2016 at 7:47 pm

    Shopping with crowbars

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:52 am

      It opens doors in more ways than one.

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  3. August 3, 2016 at 8:17 pm

    Lol, this reminded me of a ditsy version of Bonnie and Clyde perhaps hailing from Essex.
    Nice details, and the closing segment was really well done.

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:54 am

      Heh, yes. I expect their getaway car is all pimped up with an illegal cat and UV lights underneath. I’m glad you liked it!

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  4. August 3, 2016 at 8:25 pm

    Cold-blooded killers need romance too! 😉

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  5. August 3, 2016 at 8:54 pm

    Funny and macabre. A great combination

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  6. August 3, 2016 at 10:29 pm

    Ah, I still need to see True Romance. I was thinking of Natural Born Killers, both Tarantino stories. You definitely have a bit of the macabre about you. 🙂

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:56 am

      I’ve never actually seen Natural Born Killers, but now you’ve reminded me of it I’ll have to track it down.
      I do have a macabre side 🙂

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  7. August 3, 2016 at 11:45 pm

    What a lovely couple! I hope they find a new hobby, though. This is probably not going to work out as a long term life strategy. Aw, but they are so SWEET.

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:57 am

      Maybe they’ll get to share a cell 🙂

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  8. August 4, 2016 at 1:56 am

    Bonnie & Clyde!

    DJ

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  9. August 4, 2016 at 3:22 am

    Bloody hell, Ali. I’m torn between cringe and romance. XD

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:58 am

      It’s a cringe-worthy love story!

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  10. August 4, 2016 at 3:52 am

    Danny said it first. Poor Bonnie needs new boots.
    Creepy fun.

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  11. August 4, 2016 at 5:38 am

    Any criminal with a good sense of fashion will make sure to dress in crimson. Sure, the police might spot them a mile away, but at least those bloodstains won’t ruin a perfectly good outfit…

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    • August 4, 2016 at 6:59 am

      A nice pair of red cowboy boots like Ted had in “How I Met Your Mother” would do the trick 🙂

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  12. mickwynn2013
    August 4, 2016 at 6:26 am

    Lovely yet disturbing piece. Funny and macabre. Well done

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    • August 5, 2016 at 3:23 pm

      Thanks! I like doing contrasts between comedy and “dark” 🙂

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  13. August 4, 2016 at 7:06 am

    Loved the matter of fact dialogue. Disturbingly Bonnie and Clyde. Well done.

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    • August 4, 2016 at 12:15 pm

      I like the idea of writing (but not experiencing!) people so disturbed they feel nothing over what they’ve done. I’m glad you liked it!

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  14. August 4, 2016 at 11:56 am

    Kind of reminded me of “Pulp Fiction.” Only they didn’t run into Samuel L. Jackson. 🙂

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    • August 4, 2016 at 12:17 pm

      My first thought was “True Romance” but I also had that couple from Pulp Fiction in mind (I think they were the ones in the diner?).
      Probably just as well for them they didn’t run into SLJ – I seem to remember he had quite a large gun in the film 🙂

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      • August 4, 2016 at 12:19 pm

        Yes and a foul mouth as well!! 🙂

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      • August 4, 2016 at 1:09 pm

        🙂

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  15. August 4, 2016 at 12:27 pm

    Am I the only one who saw vampires? OO Works with criminals, too, though. Great black humour.

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    • August 4, 2016 at 1:10 pm

      You’d think I would have, given as how nearly every book I read has vampires in it! I’m guessing it was the spurting neck 🙂

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  16. August 4, 2016 at 2:42 pm

    Bonnie and Clyde kind of a story! Hahahahaha! Funny!!

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    • August 4, 2016 at 5:56 pm

      Yeah, these two are made for each other 🙂

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      • August 4, 2016 at 7:38 pm

        LOL! Yes, they are! They are both dirtbags! Haha!

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  17. August 5, 2016 at 2:32 am

    it looks like they’re still rookies… but not for long. 🙂

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    • August 5, 2016 at 7:52 am

      They’ll soon hone their dastardly skills, I’m sure (sadly)!

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  18. August 5, 2016 at 6:33 am

    LOL! So calm and casual! 😀

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  19. August 6, 2016 at 6:03 am

    Makes you wonder about people like this who “love” each other. But I suppose they have shared interests so….

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  20. August 6, 2016 at 9:35 pm

    Yikes! But I laughed my whole way through this. Just another fun escapade for them, I guess. Oh, the memories they’ll have. It left me feeling me disturbed and delighted.

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    • August 7, 2016 at 4:22 pm

      It’s entirely possible they won’t live long enough to build up memories 🙂

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  21. August 7, 2016 at 9:26 am

    That was a different take on armed robbery and murder. Very good.

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    • August 7, 2016 at 4:22 pm

      Thanks. They’re a right pair, these two!

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  22. August 7, 2016 at 10:20 am

    Wonderfully disturbing! They are definitely an unhinged pair. I love the matter of fact dialogue. 🙂

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    • August 7, 2016 at 4:24 pm

      I always think such dialogue really speaks to the psychopathy of the characters… 🙂

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  23. August 7, 2016 at 8:33 pm

    You know, I really feel for her. Blood really ruins a nice pair of shoes.

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  24. August 8, 2016 at 3:01 pm

    I was also thinking of Bonnie and Clyde. They’re just a couple of young killers in love. I loved the dialogue, Ali. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • August 8, 2016 at 3:23 pm

      Young killers in love. Aww, sweet 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  25. August 9, 2016 at 8:42 am

    Yeah, we saw Bonny and Clide in it too…but your story gave us the creeps even more…Purrfect! Pawkisses for a Happy Day 🙂 ❤

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  26. August 9, 2016 at 11:06 am

    Ooh, a right couple of characters here. Love their conversation and the matter-of-fact way they discuss their grim deed.

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    • August 9, 2016 at 12:54 pm

      They’re “conscience-free” – which makes them all the more scary.

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  27. September 6, 2016 at 6:21 am

    Shopkeepers last thought… “Knew I should have closed a little early this evening.”

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