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FF – A Man Walks into a Gym

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by J Hardy Carroll.

Copyright J Hardy Carroll


Freddy stepped out of the taxi. This must be it, he thought. On the corner, lots of signs. Strange spelling, though. He entered the building and was invited onto a stage surrounded by ropes.

Strange, he thought. But… okay.

Then they hit him. Over and over. He dropped his parcel. Blood sprayed everywhere.

When he came round, he asked them why? Why did you hit me?

It’s a boxing gym, they replied. It’s what we do.

But I only wanted my parcel boxed up, he croaked.

Ah, they said. You want Boxing Jim. He’s next door. Here’s your teeth.


  1. February 28, 2018 at 9:12 pm

    Poor guy — terrible mistake! Shame on me for laughing. 😉


    • February 28, 2018 at 10:08 pm

      I must admit to having had a little smile too 🙂


  2. February 28, 2018 at 9:14 pm

    *Boxing Jim*, groaning and laughing in equal measure 🙂


  3. February 28, 2018 at 9:20 pm

    Easy mistake to make.


    • February 28, 2018 at 10:09 pm

      Especially with all those misspelled signs all over the place.


  4. February 28, 2018 at 9:25 pm

    Smiling 🙂


  5. February 28, 2018 at 9:59 pm

    I think the customer was a little slow on the uptake and he paid for it.


    • February 28, 2018 at 10:09 pm

      He definitely didn’t seem to be paying much attention.

      Liked by 1 person

      • February 28, 2018 at 10:11 pm

        Yeah, although to be fair, a stranger walking into a Boxing gym probably wouldn’t get punched out first thing. He’d have to pay for lessons first.


      • March 1, 2018 at 3:06 pm

        There were a bit over-eager. Maybe their plan was “we knocked you out easy – you need boxing lessons”.

        Liked by 1 person

  6. February 28, 2018 at 10:13 pm

    ha-ha-ha! I like the punchline 😀


  7. Dale
    February 28, 2018 at 10:58 pm

    Oh lordy….


  8. March 1, 2018 at 12:22 am

    Ha! I think that gym is very dangerous to walk into!


  9. March 1, 2018 at 12:34 am

    Yeah. Not my favorite sport. Take two and try Fedex.


  10. Lyn
    March 1, 2018 at 7:26 am

    Oh dear… 🙄


  11. March 1, 2018 at 8:13 am

    On the bright side, now the Tooth Fairy will be able to pay for his postage…


  12. March 1, 2018 at 10:48 am

    Lucky he wasn’t carried out in a box. He He.


  13. March 1, 2018 at 10:56 am

    Lol!! Got a good laugh out of me with this. Does that make me a terrible person?!


  14. March 1, 2018 at 11:01 am

    Ha ha ha. A common enough mistake 🙂


    • March 1, 2018 at 3:23 pm

      Jim is constantly surprised at the number of beaten-up customers he gets in his shop 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  15. March 1, 2018 at 11:27 am

    Poor Freddy. Now he needs to go to the dentist even before getting his parcel boxed up. Humorous and good writing, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne


  16. March 1, 2018 at 1:35 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Here’s your teeth??? Oh my. I hope Dentist George is next door to Boxing Jim. I laughed out loud.




    • March 1, 2018 at 3:25 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      It’s a full service street. It would be a good location for an enterprising dentist. I’m glad you liked it!


  17. March 1, 2018 at 2:17 pm

    Poor guy! All he wanted was his parcel boxed up. LOL!


  18. March 1, 2018 at 3:43 pm

    ‘Here’s your teeth’ is knock-out punchline…


    • March 1, 2018 at 4:03 pm

      “Knock-out punchline” is even better 🙂


  19. March 1, 2018 at 6:35 pm

    Haha! Quite a dangerous little mixup 😀


  20. March 1, 2018 at 7:43 pm

    Well that’s a rather unfortunate misunderstanding! Funny funny 😀


    • March 2, 2018 at 6:03 pm

      It’s odd how innocent misunderstandings in my stories often lead to violence 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  21. March 2, 2018 at 3:31 am

    ha ha, at least, he got his teeth back. 🙂


  22. March 2, 2018 at 6:02 am

    Hahahaha. Sorry, I am not laughing at his plight, just couldn’t help myself with the mention of the teeth.
    Loved your story, Draliman.


    • March 2, 2018 at 6:05 pm

      It’s okay, it was supposed to be amusing! I had a little smile myself 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!


  23. March 2, 2018 at 3:06 pm

    Poor fellow! What a mistake. At least they gave him his teeth back. I’m sorry but I’m smiling a bit. Now he’ll have phobia of entering into old building like this one.


  24. March 2, 2018 at 5:15 pm

    Why is this so funny? Couldn’t REALLY happen, could it??


    • March 2, 2018 at 6:09 pm

      No, definitely not. Well, maybe. Yes, it could!
      I’m glad you liked it 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  25. March 2, 2018 at 9:10 pm

    I think there is a dentist somewhere close as well….


  26. March 2, 2018 at 10:59 pm

    Ali! This is a hoot! Thanks for a mid-afternoon chuckle.


    • March 3, 2018 at 5:18 am

      You’re welcome, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂


  27. March 3, 2018 at 3:17 pm

    Funny. Ouch, but funny!


  28. March 3, 2018 at 4:27 pm

    😂 A painful mistake to make! I hope the guy can find a dentist to fix his teeth without any similar mix-ups.


    • March 4, 2018 at 6:26 am

      Yes, one wonders what sort of mess will occur when he tries to find a dentist!

      Liked by 1 person

  29. March 3, 2018 at 11:43 pm

    Well it could be worse, he could of had my old dentist – his name was Dr Paine! Loved the last line – Here’s your teeth! 🙂


    • March 4, 2018 at 6:29 am

      Ha! I once went to a doctor called Doctor Proctor! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  30. March 4, 2018 at 9:39 am

    :). I hope there’s a dentist round the corner.


    • March 4, 2018 at 4:05 pm

      Me too. Right next door to a boxing gym would be a good place for a dentist to set up!


  31. March 4, 2018 at 1:01 pm

    LOL. So funny. Poor Freddy.


  32. March 4, 2018 at 4:16 pm

    Poor man – a simple case of walking into the wrong shop and bam! All boxed up. Nice tale, had us all chuckling


    • March 4, 2018 at 4:20 pm

      A lot of my tales seem to involve simple misunderstandings leading to unfortunate outcomes 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

      • March 5, 2018 at 9:31 am

        A good basis for so much comedy and drama! 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

  33. March 4, 2018 at 8:38 pm

    Oh, such an awful blunder. 🙂


    • March 5, 2018 at 6:59 am

      It’s a real shame about his teeth, the poor fellow 🙂


  34. March 5, 2018 at 1:16 am

    Oh my gawd…that’s terrible…made me LOL .;)


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