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One Last Job

It’s Friday Fictioneers time again, hosted by Rochelle! Today’s photo prompt, to which we attempt to write a 100 word story or poem or such, is provided by John Nixon. To view all the entries for this week click here – check back often as more are added through the week!

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Copyright John Nixon

The old man tottered into the shop and pointed his walking stick at the sales girl.

“This is a hold up. Hand over the wedding dress in the window!”

“That’s a walking stick, Sir,” said the girl, unimpressed.

“Is it? Wanna bet your life on that?”

A security guard joined the debate.

“Please lower your walking stick and leave the store, Sir.”

A moment later the old man left the shop, dress over one shoulder. Former master armourer to the notorious Gianni family, he blew a little smoke from the end of his stick and walked off down the street.

  1. September 18, 2013 at 9:12 pm

    Never judge a book by its cover, nor a walking stick, lol 🙂

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:24 am

      Well, he did warn them… 🙂

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  2. September 18, 2013 at 10:07 pm

    Ha!!

    janet

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  3. September 18, 2013 at 11:17 pm

    Way to go, old guy! You rock! Love it.

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:27 am

      He should have been wearing that t-shirt Garry was wearing in that photo a week or so ago, “Old guys rule” or whatever it was!

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  4. September 19, 2013 at 3:43 am

    LOL! So much for retirement….

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:29 am

      He’s just “keeping his hand in”, can’t let those skills go stale 🙂

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  5. Rishal
    September 19, 2013 at 4:39 am

    Old man’s a Rockstar! Ha Ha!

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:30 am

      I guess he really wanted that dress 🙂

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      • Rishal
        September 19, 2013 at 10:13 am

        Seems like it!

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  6. September 19, 2013 at 5:38 am

    Ooooo, love the old guy.

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:31 am

      He’s not ready for the retirement village just yet!

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  7. September 19, 2013 at 6:53 am

    Nice one!

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  8. September 19, 2013 at 4:50 pm

    OMGoodness! My friend Evil Squirrel recommended your story to me this morning and I love it!

    Bravo!

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:42 pm

      Thank you so much, I’m glad you liked it!
      And I shall have to head over to the Nest and thank ES 🙂

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  9. September 19, 2013 at 5:05 pm

    A loaded walking just like in the old days – I like it!!!!!

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    • September 19, 2013 at 6:45 pm

      An oldie but a goodie! The guy looked like he would appreciate a more traditional style of concealed weapon.

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  10. September 20, 2013 at 9:23 am

    Dear Draliman,

    Whoda thunk it? A loaded cane. My only question is, why did he want the wedding dress so badly? Good story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • September 20, 2013 at 9:53 am

      Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
      Funny you should ask about the wedding dress – I would also like to know the answer. I’m thinking he’s pulling one last job to finance his wedding 🙂
      I also hope he only fired the cane as a warning – he doesn’t look like a killer. That’s the thing about 100 word stories – the author often has as many questions as the readers!

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  11. September 20, 2013 at 12:47 pm

    Never judge a book by its cover, hmm?! Clever 🙂

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    • September 20, 2013 at 4:38 pm

      He was somewhat more dangerous than he looked, as was the walking stick 🙂

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  12. summerstommy2
    September 21, 2013 at 9:45 am

    Hey I like it sir, well done, you gotta love an old gangster.

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    • September 21, 2013 at 11:05 am

      Thanks!
      Yes, I’m guessing he lived by some “code”, which hopefully means he only fired his walking stick as a warning 🙂

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  13. September 21, 2013 at 11:42 am

    Dear Draliman,

    I liked your story. Should it be, ‘lower your cane instead of you cane? Well done and strangely plausible.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • September 22, 2013 at 5:15 am

      Thanks, Doug.
      Isn’t that amazing? No matter how many times I proof read and I missed that! I’ve updated the text, thanks for spotting that.

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  14. September 21, 2013 at 7:23 pm

    Wow, but he looks like a nice fellow! Unexpected and well done.

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    • September 22, 2013 at 5:19 am

      Thanks! It’s always the ones you least expect who turn out to have a gun in their walking stick 🙂

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  15. September 21, 2013 at 8:08 pm

    Oh my…

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  16. October 5, 2013 at 1:20 pm

    Thanks for letting me camp out in your blog for a little while today. I had a great time and tried to leave my campsite as good as when I arrived. I’ll be back!

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    • October 6, 2013 at 4:19 am

      Thank you for visiting – I’m glad you had a good time, and thanks for leaving the campsite in good order!

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