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One Last Job

It’s Friday Fictioneers time again, hosted by Rochelle! Today’s photo prompt, to which we attempt to write a 100 word story or poem or such, is provided by John Nixon. To view all the entries for this week click here – check back often as more are added through the week!


Copyright John Nixon

The old man tottered into the shop and pointed his walking stick at the sales girl.

“This is a hold up. Hand over the wedding dress in the window!”

“That’s a walking stick, Sir,” said the girl, unimpressed.

“Is it? Wanna bet your life on that?”

A security guard joined the debate.

“Please lower your walking stick and leave the store, Sir.”

A moment later the old man left the shop, dress over one shoulder. Former master armourer to the notorious Gianni family, he blew a little smoke from the end of his stick and walked off down the street.

  1. September 18, 2013 at 9:12 pm

    Never judge a book by its cover, nor a walking stick, lol 🙂


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:24 am

      Well, he did warn them… 🙂


  2. September 18, 2013 at 10:07 pm




  3. September 18, 2013 at 11:17 pm

    Way to go, old guy! You rock! Love it.


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:27 am

      He should have been wearing that t-shirt Garry was wearing in that photo a week or so ago, “Old guys rule” or whatever it was!


  4. September 19, 2013 at 3:43 am

    LOL! So much for retirement….


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:29 am

      He’s just “keeping his hand in”, can’t let those skills go stale 🙂


  5. Rishal
    September 19, 2013 at 4:39 am

    Old man’s a Rockstar! Ha Ha!


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:30 am

      I guess he really wanted that dress 🙂


      • Rishal
        September 19, 2013 at 10:13 am

        Seems like it!


  6. September 19, 2013 at 5:38 am

    Ooooo, love the old guy.


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:31 am

      He’s not ready for the retirement village just yet!


  7. September 19, 2013 at 6:53 am

    Nice one!


  8. September 19, 2013 at 4:50 pm

    OMGoodness! My friend Evil Squirrel recommended your story to me this morning and I love it!



    • September 19, 2013 at 6:42 pm

      Thank you so much, I’m glad you liked it!
      And I shall have to head over to the Nest and thank ES 🙂


  9. September 19, 2013 at 5:05 pm

    A loaded walking just like in the old days – I like it!!!!!


    • September 19, 2013 at 6:45 pm

      An oldie but a goodie! The guy looked like he would appreciate a more traditional style of concealed weapon.


  10. September 20, 2013 at 9:23 am

    Dear Draliman,

    Whoda thunk it? A loaded cane. My only question is, why did he want the wedding dress so badly? Good story.




    • September 20, 2013 at 9:53 am

      Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
      Funny you should ask about the wedding dress – I would also like to know the answer. I’m thinking he’s pulling one last job to finance his wedding 🙂
      I also hope he only fired the cane as a warning – he doesn’t look like a killer. That’s the thing about 100 word stories – the author often has as many questions as the readers!


  11. September 20, 2013 at 12:47 pm

    Never judge a book by its cover, hmm?! Clever 🙂


    • September 20, 2013 at 4:38 pm

      He was somewhat more dangerous than he looked, as was the walking stick 🙂


  12. summerstommy2
    September 21, 2013 at 9:45 am

    Hey I like it sir, well done, you gotta love an old gangster.


    • September 21, 2013 at 11:05 am

      Yes, I’m guessing he lived by some “code”, which hopefully means he only fired his walking stick as a warning 🙂


  13. September 21, 2013 at 11:42 am

    Dear Draliman,

    I liked your story. Should it be, ‘lower your cane instead of you cane? Well done and strangely plausible.




    • September 22, 2013 at 5:15 am

      Thanks, Doug.
      Isn’t that amazing? No matter how many times I proof read and I missed that! I’ve updated the text, thanks for spotting that.


  14. September 21, 2013 at 7:23 pm

    Wow, but he looks like a nice fellow! Unexpected and well done.


    • September 22, 2013 at 5:19 am

      Thanks! It’s always the ones you least expect who turn out to have a gun in their walking stick 🙂


  15. September 21, 2013 at 8:08 pm

    Oh my…


  16. October 5, 2013 at 1:20 pm

    Thanks for letting me camp out in your blog for a little while today. I had a great time and tried to leave my campsite as good as when I arrived. I’ll be back!


    • October 6, 2013 at 4:19 am

      Thank you for visiting – I’m glad you had a good time, and thanks for leaving the campsite in good order!


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