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CWG Week 5 Episode 5

It’s week 5 of Kerrie’s Chain Writing Game! This week sounded like a budding romance, but it didn’t take long for everything to go horribly wrong.

Catch up with the story by clicking on the little blue froggy. My contribution is below.

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He’s Behind You – episode 5

“What the hell is that?” screamed Kelly.

“I don’t know, it’s… it’s… I don’t know!” replied Ben, frantically pushing the button on the lift controls. “Come on, come on!”

“Push the button! Push the button!” screamed Kelly.

“I am pushing the button!” yelled Ben.

The creature came closer. It was dark in the lobby – only the emergency lights were glowing, but Ben was certain this creature was not human.

Finally Ben’s efforts came to fruition and the doors slid closed. The lift began to rise.

Somewhere below Ben heard a rending sound as the lift doors in the lobby were ripped open.

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  1. Al
    January 26, 2014 at 12:01 pm

    I got nothing at the moment. I have absolutely no thoughts tumbling around in my head 😦 I will have to wait for a couple more before I can join.

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    • January 26, 2014 at 4:16 pm

      That happens sometimes! And I hate it when it does, there seems to be no rhyme or reason for it 😦

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      • Al
        January 26, 2014 at 4:29 pm

        Yeah. I was hoping to do episodes two or three, but I don’t even have anything for my Sunday Photo Fiction or Friday Fictioneers.

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      • January 26, 2014 at 4:33 pm

        Everyone else seems to be burying bodies in both!

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      • Al
        January 26, 2014 at 4:38 pm

        Haha they do

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  2. January 26, 2014 at 3:21 pm

    Kool, I wanna know what happens next 🙂

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  3. January 26, 2014 at 3:33 pm

    Nice follow on!

    DJ

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    • January 26, 2014 at 4:23 pm

      Thanks! I wonder what will happen next? I’m hoping the building actually is on fire just to make it extra hard for our duo 🙂

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  4. January 26, 2014 at 5:16 pm

    I didn’t mention fire, but I did try to ratchet up the mystery and tension a bit. This seems to be taking a horror route. Great follow-on!

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    • January 26, 2014 at 5:41 pm

      I shall read it now! I was expecting this week’s to be some sort of slapstick stalker comedy but it didn’t take long for danger to rear its head 🙂

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  5. January 26, 2014 at 6:15 pm

    How can you tell the difference between going right and wrong? It just — is. That it still IS is good, right?

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    • January 26, 2014 at 7:38 pm

      Yep, it’s good that it still is!

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  6. January 26, 2014 at 7:05 pm

    Ooh, I love the way you built this up. Elevator doors and car engines never start up fast enough when a monster is approaching. Love the tension here.

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    • January 26, 2014 at 7:39 pm

      Very true. There’s always a misfire or the lift just keeps rising at its own languorous pace.

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  7. January 26, 2014 at 9:20 pm

    You added the right amount of drama. You got the adrenaline pumping.

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    • January 27, 2014 at 10:25 am

      Thanks, I was hoping to increase the tension a bit!

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