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Hunter and Prey

It’s Mondays Finish the Story time. Because its Monday!

This challenge is hosted by Barbara Beecham and involves writing 100 to 150 words in response to a photo. To help us along we also get the starting sentence (which is not part of the word count). Something a bit different this week from me. The supplied starting sentence is in bold in my story below.

To see this week’s other contributions, click on the little blue froggy.


She was unaware that she was being watched.

But everything and everyone is watched. All the time.

The worm, as it goes about its business, is unaware of the bird watching it hungrily, which in turn is oblivious to the hawk above.

The deer has not seen the wolf, stalking it on silent paws. The wolf, intent on its prey, has not seen the hunter staring through the sights of his rifle, already counting the money the wolf’s pelt will bring.

The snow turns red and the hunter claims his prize.

High above, secreted within his cloaked scout ship, Ka’N’Kath watches the hunter through his ship’s optical scanning matrix.

Designation Oltrix 427, local name “Earth”, primitive weapons, multiple natural resources, recommend conquest.

Ka’N’Kath sends the message to High Command, turning his ship towards home, a home he will never again see. For he, in his turn, is being watched.

There is always a bigger fish.

  1. January 26, 2015 at 8:06 pm

    Who watches the watchmen, lol. Great. 😀


    • January 26, 2015 at 8:07 pm

      Definitely someone somewhere, if my story is to be believed 🙂


  2. NotAPunkRocker
    January 26, 2015 at 8:19 pm

    Now I am paranoid that someone is watching me… 😀


  3. January 26, 2015 at 8:52 pm

    Wonderful Ali ~ Your imagination stretches as high as the celestial untouchable ~ 🙂


    • January 26, 2015 at 9:02 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! I’m looking forward to the next part of your saga, but since it’s nearly bedtime I shall catch up with it and the other stories tomorrow 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  4. January 26, 2015 at 9:23 pm

    Love it! We are all being watched! Great take! Thank you for participating this week! Stay tuned for next? 🙂 ^..^


    • January 27, 2015 at 7:43 am

      Glad you liked it! There are eyes everywhere…


  5. January 26, 2015 at 10:44 pm

    Great imagination. I suppose it is going to get worse (the watching). I’m paranoid too.


    • January 27, 2015 at 7:45 am

      Everybody is watching everybody else 😦
      Glad you liked my story!

      Liked by 1 person

  6. January 26, 2015 at 10:55 pm

    There always is and just when you think it is safe to go out at night. Enjoyed this story.


    • January 27, 2015 at 7:45 am

      Even when you think you’re top of the food chain. Thanks!


  7. January 27, 2015 at 2:17 am

    I loved the last line!


  8. January 27, 2015 at 4:19 am

    I loved how even the human-hunting alien was a just a small fry in the end.


    • January 27, 2015 at 7:46 am

      And little does he know…
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!


  9. January 27, 2015 at 8:36 am

    Ooh, very deep! Excellent story! 🙂


    • January 27, 2015 at 8:40 am

      Thanks! I’m glad the deeper meaning came across 🙂
      It was originally going to be all blood and guts but then I had a different idea.


  10. January 27, 2015 at 1:10 pm

    Enjoyed the esoteric take on this one.


    • January 27, 2015 at 3:01 pm

      Thanks, it’s a bit different to my usual writing, I’m glad you liked it.

      Liked by 1 person

  11. January 27, 2015 at 3:18 pm

    Very cool take on this. I like the idea that there’s always another link in the chain above and beyond. Great last line.


    • January 27, 2015 at 3:25 pm

      Thanks! There’s always someone/thing bigger.
      It was something a bit different for me this week so I’m glad you liked it 🙂


  12. January 27, 2015 at 3:25 pm

    Whoever is busy watching me is going to end up awfully disappointed…


    • January 27, 2015 at 3:27 pm

      That’s the way I always feel about me, too. “They’ll” soon get tired of watching me making cheese sandwiches and watching Star Trek.


  13. January 27, 2015 at 6:29 pm

    Reminds me of “The Sword in the Stone.” Merlin got it.


    • January 27, 2015 at 7:48 pm

      Wow, it’s been ages since I saw that film so I checked it out on Wikipedia. It sounds mad!


      • January 27, 2015 at 8:11 pm

        I just reread the book … It’s the first part of “The Once and Future King,” and it’s even better than I remember.


  14. January 27, 2015 at 6:32 pm

    What a great idea. It’s definitely enough to make you paranoid. 🙂


  15. January 27, 2015 at 7:44 pm

    Oh, what a cycle! Big Brother has his eyes on you.


  16. gentlestitches
    January 28, 2015 at 3:24 am

    chillingly entertaining. 😀


  17. January 28, 2015 at 4:44 am

    I love being a reader and seeing where a storyteller takes me.
    * waiting for the basement men.


  18. January 28, 2015 at 7:49 pm

    You have written this idea of watchers and the watched really well. it’s a creepy feeling that everything on Earth could be being watched by something else. Never ending . . . Great story!


  19. January 30, 2015 at 1:59 pm

    Great story, Ali. With the population of India what it is, I’m used to being watched. 🙂 The clue is to blend in. Everything is a shared experience. I liked the way everyone in your story was being watched. I’m curious now as to who was watching the alien. Well done and creative as usual. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • January 30, 2015 at 2:17 pm

      Thanks! There was a bigger alien watching the alien, but there was probably an even bigger one watching him too!


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