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MFTS – Hedge Attack!

Here is my contribution to Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. This week it is using my opening line!

We get around 150 words to finish the story based on an opening sentence (in bold in my story) and a photo.

To read the other stories, click on the blue froggy.

Hedge

Copyright BW Beacham

 

The barista shook his head. That hedge couldn’t have moved closer overnight. Could it?

The next day it was half-way to the door. The barista rubbed his eyes but said nothing, fearing that the madness that had inflicted his late grandfather was taking hold.

Two days later, they were in the shop! Now everybody noticed. The barista’s relief that his sanity was intact was short-lived, however, as the hedge slithered towards him.

“Wha… what do you want?” he screeched, trembling.

“How rude!” said one of the hedge-people.

“Whatever happened to ‘Good morning, may I take your order’?” muttered another.

“Cappuccinos all round!” said a third. The barista breathed a sigh of relief. “And one more thing…” (the barista’s heart thumped in his chest) “… a plate of blueberry muffins!” The barista smiled and filled their order. All that worry and panic over nothing.


At their table, the hedge-people were talking.

“Lovely coffee, that!”

“Lovely. Delicious muffins!”

“Delicious! Right, everyone finished? Good. Okay, let’s kill these hedge-trimming human bastards. Who’s got the Huge Ball of Destruction?”

 

  1. July 6, 2015 at 9:34 pm

    For a second I thought we would have a happy ending… A clever twist with the last line, though. 🙂

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:13 am

      Happy ending? What’s that then? 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  2. July 6, 2015 at 11:25 pm

    Must have cappuccinos first, then kill the humans. Those hedge-people have their priorities straight!! Great story!!!

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:13 am

      Definitely! Need to caffeine-up before getting down to work 🙂

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  3. July 7, 2015 at 12:33 am

    Haha! Instead of eat and run, they eat and kill. Great story Ali! Thanks for the prompt sentence this week.

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:14 am

      First things first. Those muffins looked too good to miss out on!

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      • July 7, 2015 at 9:46 am

        Yes, it is too bad they weren’t good enough to want to keep them alive so they can make them some more. 🙂 Great story!

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      • July 7, 2015 at 12:12 pm

        They can just move on to the next coffee shop 🙂

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      • July 7, 2015 at 2:08 pm

        Yes, they can.

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  4. July 7, 2015 at 12:47 am

    You just can’t relax for minute. You have to watch everything all the time. Geez.

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:15 am

      You certainly can’t trust human-shaped hedges.

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  5. July 7, 2015 at 1:11 am

    Love the turn around at the end! Well done Ali and thank you so much for helping with this week’s challenge! We had some fun, – neh? Thanks for another excellent contribution to the MFtS challenge, and be well… ^..^

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:16 am

      I’m glad you liked it! Despite having the photo and opening line for days it still took me until yesterday afternoon to decide on a story 🙂

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      • July 7, 2015 at 3:50 pm

        That happens. I choose the photo early in the week. Come up with an opening line. Change that a few times. Then I figure out what I am going to on Monday. I have had a hard time with one of the challenges… Thanks again Ali. You did a great job with that opening line! Be well… ^..^

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      • July 7, 2015 at 7:06 pm

        Thanks, you too!

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  6. July 7, 2015 at 1:52 am

    My goodness but that was a whole lot of niceness leading to destruction….militant hedge people….enjoyed your take….

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:16 am

      It doesn’t hurt to be polite before the violence!

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  7. July 7, 2015 at 1:54 am

    It took them, what, four days just to get inside the shop? I like the barista’s chances of outrunning these hedge people.

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:16 am

      That was them in “sneak mode”. I bet they can really move when their sap’s up!

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  8. July 7, 2015 at 4:36 am

    Reblogged this on On Writing…Writing On and commented:
    Rather than write my OWN Mondays Finish the Story this week, I’m-a-gunna reblog this fabulous little tidbit from Dramlian on Life. Laughing is good for you people!

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  9. July 7, 2015 at 4:37 am

    Had to reblog this ’cause it was too darn funny. And much easier than trying to come up with my own MFTS this week. 🙂 Thanks for the great bit of Flash.

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    • July 7, 2015 at 7:18 am

      I’m glad you liked it, and thanks for the reblog 🙂

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  10. July 7, 2015 at 7:14 am

    O boy.

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  11. July 7, 2015 at 2:52 pm

    ha ha.. nice one.. enjoyed reading it. i liked the twist. A proper blend of fiction and stroy well served by barista! 🙂

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    • July 7, 2015 at 3:46 pm

      I’m glad you enjoyed it!
      I always like a little twist at the end 🙂

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  12. July 7, 2015 at 3:22 pm

    Haha, omg, revenge of the hedges! This gave me such a laugh! Nice dialog.

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    • July 7, 2015 at 3:46 pm

      Thanks! We need to watch out next time we reach from the hedge trimmers…

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      • July 7, 2015 at 3:50 pm

        That’s the reason why I never trim my hedges. Yeh, that’s the reason :p

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      • July 7, 2015 at 7:07 pm

        🙂
        Now I just need to write a story about why it’s not a good idea to wash my car, do the gardening…

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  13. July 7, 2015 at 4:51 pm

    Reblogged this on momentarylapseofsanity.

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  14. July 8, 2015 at 3:29 am

    Truly fun! Hedge revenge, but only after coffee and muffins! They have their priorities straight! Good one, and congrats on a great photo and prompt!

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    • July 8, 2015 at 7:10 am

      You can’t go slaughtering humans on an empty stomach! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  15. July 8, 2015 at 4:27 am

    Congratulations on being chosen to supply the first line this week, Ali. What a sneaky twist at the end. Where are the hedge trimmers when you need them? I’m wondering what kind of destruction a hedge ball can wreak. Those people need to be trimmed at the knees. Nasty hedge people. 😦 Well done, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • July 8, 2015 at 7:11 am

      Maybe one of the customers is a landscape gardener. Though he’ll probably be the first victim!
      Coming up with an opening line isn’t as easy as I thought it would be 🙂

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  16. July 8, 2015 at 5:00 am

    Huge ball of destruction should have been checked at the door,

    Just sayin’.

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  17. July 8, 2015 at 1:34 pm

    A terrific finish that came out of the green ~ The unsheared hedges will control the topirarists ~ Blood and sap will flow and mingle ~

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    • July 8, 2015 at 1:37 pm

      topiarists ~ They are already controlling keyboards by cutting out letters ~ Have a great week Ali 🙂

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      • July 8, 2015 at 8:03 pm

        Darn those crazy “topirarists” 🙂
        You have a great week too!

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    • July 8, 2015 at 8:02 pm

      “out of the green” hee hee 🙂
      It’s war of the Hedgerows.

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  18. July 8, 2015 at 6:11 pm

    You tricked us into expecting a “happy ending” ….Good surprise at the end there. Also the descriptions of the barista’s various stages of feeling set the tone of the story excellently.

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    • July 8, 2015 at 8:06 pm

      Happy ending? Me? 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it, and the barista’s constantly changing state of mind!

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  19. July 9, 2015 at 8:11 am

    perhaps he really had fallen prey to Grandad’s dementia and he placed them in the shop himself? He might have a hard time convincing the authorities it was ‘the hedge people” wot killed everyone? 😀

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    • July 9, 2015 at 11:53 am

      That’s something I hadn’t considered, and entirely possible! Maybe too much coffee really has sent him over the edge 🙂

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  20. July 9, 2015 at 10:16 am

    political correctness these days eh? where will it end?? we have hedges demanding muffins for gods sake! :p

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  21. July 9, 2015 at 9:04 pm

    Love the twist at the end! Great story, Ali!

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