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MFTS – Second Chance

Here is my story for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get an opening sentence which this week was written by Martin Furman, and a photo courtesy of Barbara herself.

To read this week’s other stories click on the blue froggy. My story is a little longer than 150 words (sorry) but I did manage to get it down from nearly 200. The opening line (which isn’t part of the word count) is in bold in my story.

Copyright Barbara W Beacham

Copyright Barbara W Beacham

 

Delphine always wanted to pilot her father’s plane and when he forgot his keys on her tenth birthday, she knew that taking off would be easy.

Come to think of it, landing would also be easy. Dead easy. With an emphasis on dead. But Delphine didn’t come to think of it and now she was soaring through the air, staring at a bewildering array of controls.

“Come on,” she thought. “I’ve seen Daddy do this enough times.” Heart pounding, she eased the stick forward as the ground came closer, closer. “I’m going to do it!” she thought excitedly. “Daddy will be so proud of…”


Trephos, Angel-In-Charge of Juvenile Admissions climbed down off his cloud.

“Well,” he said, shaking his head. “Made a bit of a pig’s ear of that landing, didn’t we?”

Delphine nodded sadly.

“Let’s see,” he continued, reaching for a large ledger. “Wow! You’re our one trillionth customer! That means you get a second chance!”

Suddenly Delphine was back home, alive, staring at her Dad’s keys. She grabbed them and ran out the door.

“I think I know what I did wrong last time!” she thought excitedly as she ran towards the plane.

 

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    July 14, 2015 at 6:41 pm

    Oh dear, looks like she may be back sooner than Trephos had planned.

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    • July 14, 2015 at 6:47 pm

      I fear you may be right 😦
      But we may live in hope!

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  2. July 14, 2015 at 6:42 pm

    You know, there might just be a one-in-a-trillion chance that little Delphine might survive 🙂

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    • July 14, 2015 at 6:48 pm

      Let’s hope so! She seems confident enough that this time she’ll get it right 🙂

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  3. July 14, 2015 at 7:43 pm

    Hahaha! Seems Delphine has a thick skull. Hopefully, she makes the landing this time.

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:33 pm

      Me too, otherwise her skull won’t be think enough when she hits the ground 😦

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  4. July 14, 2015 at 7:58 pm

    Looks like she will never learn! Here’s for third chances!!! Great story!!

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  5. July 14, 2015 at 8:30 pm

    I’m hoping for a happy ending on this. It’s partly the dad’s fault for leaving his keys behind. Well done, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:34 pm

      I’m hoping for a happy ending too 🙂 You’d think she’d know better after the first time, though.

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  6. July 14, 2015 at 10:05 pm

    Love it, that’s a great wee story and I love the twist at the end. I’m going to have a go at this myself 🙂

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:35 pm

      I just read yours, it’s great 🙂
      I’m glad you liked mine!

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  7. July 15, 2015 at 12:51 am

    Some people only learn the hard way. Or maybe … she’ll get it right next time. It could happen, right?

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:35 pm

      It could, but I don’t think it will 🙂

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  8. July 15, 2015 at 2:20 am

    “If at first you don’t succeed, just continue getting yourself killed” – Buster Possum

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:35 pm

      Words to “live” by. Thanks, Buster!

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  9. Lyn
    July 15, 2015 at 2:28 am

    You have to admire her persistence. When I read this, I actually groaned and thought, “Oh boy, not again!” LOL great story Dman 🙂

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:36 pm

      I’m sure Trephos will wonder at her common sense when she turns up again after only five minutes 🙂

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  10. July 15, 2015 at 4:41 am

    Loved your twist! Do overs come for a reason!

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    • July 15, 2015 at 1:38 pm

      Something she hasn’t learned!
      Thanks 🙂

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  11. July 15, 2015 at 8:17 am

    Oh! boy someone needs a lesson on being careful.

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  12. July 15, 2015 at 10:51 am

    Most entertaining! 😀

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  13. July 15, 2015 at 1:31 pm

    Never look a gift horse in the mouth! Great story Ali! Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge, and be well… ^..^

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  14. July 15, 2015 at 2:08 pm

    Maybe she’ll have better luck this time – though I’m not holding out all that much hope… I think Trephos might be seeing her again rather sooner than he’d intended! Great story, Ali. 🙂

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    • July 15, 2015 at 6:52 pm

      She’ll be Trephos’ yo-yo customer. Though I doubt she’ll get a third chance. Hey, maybe she’ll land it this time with only a few broken bones!
      I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  15. July 15, 2015 at 3:31 pm

    lol Some people truly never learn.
    But if she does live through it, and keeps that attitude for the rest of her life, she’ll go far.
    Or die young.
    Either way, her live will never be boring.

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    • July 15, 2015 at 6:52 pm

      Very true. There’ll be no holding her back if she can only remember the landing procedure…

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  16. July 15, 2015 at 3:55 pm

    Misinterpretation of a “second chance”? Hope her bonus includes support…

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    • July 15, 2015 at 6:43 pm

      Yes, I think she heard “second chance at landing” rather than “second chance at life”. Well, she’s only ten 🙂

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  17. Lata Sunil
    July 16, 2015 at 4:19 am

    Oh wow.. Brilliant. I thought all hope was lost and felt sorry for Delphine. But the second chance was a brilliant twist. But again, there she goes again. Loved this rollercoaster.

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    • July 16, 2015 at 6:46 am

      I couldn’t leave a poor ten year old dead at the end! At least this way she has a chance. I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  18. July 16, 2015 at 6:17 am

    OMC…but forgive her, she’s only ten 😀 Pawkisses 🙂 ❤

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  19. July 17, 2015 at 4:43 am

    This is wonderful! Thanks

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