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Message in a Bottle

Daily Prompt: Weaving the Threads – Draft a post with three parts, each unrelated to the other, but create a common thread between them by including the same item — an object, a symbol, a place — in each part.

1907

The little girl carefully folds the note, written in her own childish hand, and pushes it into the bottle, sealing it with a cork her mother gave her.

“Hi my name is Emily and I’m 6 and I live in America and I like horses and I want to be your friend.”

She walks down to the shore, picking her way over the sand until she reaches the water’s edge. She watches the surf breaking on the beach for a few minutes and then, giving the bottle one last look, throws it into the ocean. Although she can’t throw it very far, the current takes it and soon it is lost from view.

1973

Picking through rock pools looking for crabs and other exciting things, a sudden flash of light catches the boy’s eye. On closer inspection he sees it is the sunlight glinting off a bottle, wedged between two rocks near the water line. He picks it up and sees a note inside. His eyes light up – this is the most exciting thing he has ever found! He works the cork out and reads the note. Who is Emily, from so far away! He replaces the note and the cork and shows his mother. She places the bottle on the windowsill, her son’s treasure.

2003

The woman stumbles into the living room, terror etched on her face. The man, drunk, charges in after her, his hand raised. It’s not the first time. He pushes her against the wall. Throwing out her arms to catch herself, her fingers wrap around the bottle they’d bought in the local car boot sale in happier times. She spins and swings the bottle, catching him across the temple, smashing both bone and bottle. He grunts and falls. Blood trickles over the broken shards and stains the old, browning slip of paper, written with love and hope so long ago.

  1. May 30, 2013 at 7:23 pm

    Your writing is tender and poignant and your interpretation of the prompt is remarkable. You’re such a gifted writer. Thank you for sharing. Peace and blessings, Michele

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    • May 30, 2013 at 7:37 pm

      Thank you so much, I can’t express how much comments like this mean to me.
      This is my second attempt to “weave a theme” (“Ripples” being the first).

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      • May 30, 2013 at 8:11 pm

        You’re most welcome, your post really touched me. Thanks for bringing Ripples to my attention, I look forward to reading more of your work. Blessings, Michele

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  2. May 31, 2013 at 9:48 am

    Really well written drali, wow!

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    • May 31, 2013 at 9:53 am

      Thanks! I found it quite interesting to write, once I’d worked out what the prompt wanted (or at least my interpretation of what it wanted!).

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      • May 31, 2013 at 9:56 am

        I must be honest in saying I was totally lost with this prompt. I love how you did it and I think that is what they wanted. 🙂

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  3. May 31, 2013 at 10:19 am

    This is great, very well crafted. The concluding sentence is especially poignant and really draws the piece together.

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    • May 31, 2013 at 10:55 am

      Thanks very much, and thanks for popping over!

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  4. June 1, 2013 at 12:50 am

    Absolutely Beautiful. Drali! Would make a nice short too. Very descriptive and engaging..

    What happens in 2005?

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    • June 1, 2013 at 10:49 am

      Thanks! As for 2005, maybe someone will glue the bottle back together and its adventure will continue…:-)

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