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The Hesitant Stonemason

I thought I’d have a go at “Friday Fictioneers”. This is hosted by Rochelle and is a photo prompt. The kicker – it has to be as close to 100 words as possible! I started writing and after the opening paragraph it was already over 50 words! Some rewriting was required.

I had to do something similar when I was at school. My mini-story made perfect sense – to me. And no-one else! So I’m having another go after all these years. The prompt this week is a beautiful picture of a church, supplied by Claire Fuller.

church_and_tree-claire-fuller

Copyright Claire Fuller

Edelric walked hesitantly up to the church’s door.  A stonemason, he appreciated the workmanship of the Norman invaders, even as he hated them for their recently enforced rule.

“Don’t go into the church! You’re evil, son! You’ll be struck down!” his Mother had said.

Was that true? He was mean when drunk, but every man beat his wife, didn’t he? He’d once enjoyed torturing the village cat, but surely that didn’t count?

His hand hovered over the latch. He began to sweat.

Edelric trusted his Mother. He turned and walked back to the village.

“Not today,” he decided. “Not today.”

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  1. August 23, 2013 at 10:04 am

    Dear Draliman,

    This mini-story made perfect sense to me…and, I’m sure…everyone else. Loved it as I love a pragmatic man.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • August 23, 2013 at 10:11 am

      I’m glad you liked it (and that it made sense!).
      Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

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  2. August 23, 2013 at 10:05 am

    Dear Draliman,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I assure you this one made perfect sense to me. I think there’s hope for Edelric yet. 😉

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 23, 2013 at 10:17 am

      Thanks for the welcome, and for hosting the Friday Fictioneers!
      I’m glad it made sense – it’s a lot harder than it looks to fit everything into 100 words. I look forward to participating again!

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  3. August 23, 2013 at 10:35 am

    Great writing, Dr Ali.

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  4. August 23, 2013 at 1:48 pm

    Great job, Drali!

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  5. August 23, 2013 at 3:41 pm

    Aw, bless! Evil Edelric; the type of guy only a mother could love hey? Good job Dr Ali. 🙂

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    • August 23, 2013 at 3:45 pm

      Ha, yes, that’s him exactly!
      Thanks 🙂

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  6. August 23, 2013 at 4:00 pm

    Well, his mum isn’t much good. Not surprising he behaved badly. But whatever happened to redemption and charity?
    Beautifully written but I didn’t grasp what the Normans’ rule is.

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    • August 23, 2013 at 4:10 pm

      Blame the parents!
      Regarding the Normans’ rule – I wanted to fix the historical period of the story so I chose an Anglo-Saxon name for the main character and implied the story took place shortly after the successful Norman (i.e. French) invasion of England in 1066.

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  7. August 23, 2013 at 5:50 pm

    Great little piece 🙂

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  8. August 23, 2013 at 6:46 pm

    Thank you for a delightful glimpse into the soul of a midaevil psychopath. I lack Norman cathedrals. Never have I missed them more.

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    • August 23, 2013 at 6:51 pm

      I guess he is a psychopath isn’t he? Now that could be a good story idea. I’m sure psychopaths aren’t purely a modern thing – we just have a label for them now.
      “Chronicles of a Mediaeval Psychopath” – has a ring to it 🙂

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  9. August 23, 2013 at 9:34 pm

    Great job!

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  10. August 25, 2013 at 9:18 pm

    Very nice & just a touch creepy lol 🙂

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    • August 26, 2013 at 4:36 am

      I wonder if he’ll go back another day and risk it…

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