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Off Mission

It’s time for Mondays Finish the Story! This challenge is hosted by Barbara Beacham and gives us 100-150 words to write a little story based on both a photograph and an opening sentence. The opening sentence does not count towards the word count!

This week’s picture features a helicopter. Is it on a rescue or scouting mission, or is it about to rain down fiery death on some unsuspecting person? What could it be? Read on to find out!

The supplied opening sentence is in bold in my story, which is called “Off Mission”.


Black Hawk


Silently as the people watched, the black hawk helicopter lifted into the air.

Its pilot Jonas’ orders were clear – guns free, select targets of opportunity. As he flew off, keeping low to avoid radar detection, he knew exactly where he would plant his missiles.

They say “the female of the species is more deadly than the male”, and his chosen target certainly lived up to that. She was vicious, unforgiving, intractable. She destroyed lives, ripped families asunder, ground people into the dirt. Evil had a face, and it was hers.

He began to sweat as his HUD counted down the range – five kilometres, four, three… and there it was, the blacked-out customised SUV containing his nemesis.

She’d even had the nerve, the temerity, to phone him up yesterday to demand – demand! – that he “get up off his fat lazy arse” and sign the papers finalising their divorce.

“Finalise this, bitch!” he screamed as his finger tightened on the trigger.

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    January 6, 2015 at 8:40 pm

    Yikes! Take her out while the life insurance still may have him as the beneficiary. Smart!


    • January 6, 2015 at 8:51 pm

      This is why you don’t upset someone who flies a million dollars worth of killing machine for a living 🙂


  2. January 6, 2015 at 8:56 pm

    Maybe it’s cheaper than divorce. It’s certainly faster and a permanent solution. Nonetheless, I hope it doesn’t become a trend. There would hardly be anyone left after a while 🙂 Our neighborhoods would be nothing but rubble.


    • January 6, 2015 at 9:05 pm

      Now I’ve got a mental image of hundreds of attack helicopters whizzing around with psychos at the stick 🙂


  3. January 6, 2015 at 10:19 pm

    Now that is one bad ass dude!



    • January 7, 2015 at 8:22 am

      He certainly is! And a bit psycho.


  4. January 6, 2015 at 10:46 pm

    I sense some built up aggression coming out here. Best stay on your good side. But you engaged me throughout so thank you.


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:22 am

      Glad you liked it. I think this has been building in Jonas for a long time!


  5. January 6, 2015 at 10:55 pm

    Bahahaha! beautiful… I was waiting on alien invasion or some such thing but this was better 😉


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:23 am

      Why bother with alien invasions when there’s so much “fun” to be had with real-life stuff? 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  6. January 6, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Maybe they should have just stayed friends and not gotten married. Hope she wasn’t home.


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:23 am

      I’m pretty sure she was in her car, though it would be just typical if she’d lent the SUV to someone else for the day.


  7. January 7, 2015 at 3:13 am

    Til death do us part…. how sweet! 🙂


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:24 am

      It’s a story of love, betrayal and guided missiles!


  8. gentlestitches
    January 7, 2015 at 5:57 am

    HaHa! Your commenters are pure gold. You packed a powerful punch in a few words! 😀


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:25 am

      And Jonas packed a powerful punch in a few missiles! Glad you liked it.


  9. January 7, 2015 at 7:29 am

    Ali, Well, you’ve just literarily (is that a word?) wiped another character off the map. Good story. This dark mood seems to come upon you every so often and death is in the script. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:26 am

      Yep, that’s another one gone :-). Glad you enjoyed it!


  10. January 7, 2015 at 11:44 am

    He’s clearly taking the whole thing really well…. 😉


    • January 7, 2015 at 11:53 am

      Yeah, he seems pretty laid back about the whole thing 🙂


  11. January 7, 2015 at 3:21 pm

    That’s one way to finalize a divorce! Good story! Thanks again for taking part! Stay tuned for next week’s challenge! It comes to us from outer space! 🙂


    • January 7, 2015 at 3:41 pm

      An option only available to those with a handy attack helicopter, though 🙂
      Ooh, ooh, outer space! I’ll have to get my sci-fi hat ready to go.


      • January 7, 2015 at 4:11 pm

        And, what an option to have! Next week could use a sci-fi hat! 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

  12. January 7, 2015 at 7:57 pm

    Whoa, that was a great story. Loved the manner in which he got up off his fat ass. Bravo!
    Seriously, there wasn’t one politically correct comment to your story.
    You’ve collected a blood thirsty crew.


    • January 7, 2015 at 8:24 pm

      He certainly did as he was bid 🙂
      Yeah, we all like a bit of mayhem. I think it’s what’s called a “quickie divorce”.

      I’m glad you enjoyed it!


  13. January 8, 2015 at 7:12 pm

    Tricky situation ~ Handled with sadistic anarchy ~ 🙂


    • January 9, 2015 at 8:04 am

      I think he’s lost the plot just a little bit 🙂


  14. January 11, 2015 at 10:00 pm

    I guess that’s what it comes to when the prenup is unclear …


    • January 12, 2015 at 10:55 am

      “Always get a lawyer to check your prenup to avoid unfortunate fiery death from the skies” I always say.


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