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It’s Friday Fictioneers time hosted by Rochelle, and the photo this week was contributed by Jan Wayne Fields. We need to write a 100-ish word story based on this photo.

I’ve pretty much written nothing but comedies for my challenges recently, but this photo made me feel a bit gloomy for some reason. I nearly renamed this “There in Spirit”. But that sounded a bit corny :-).

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dining-room

Copyright Jan Wayne Fields

 

Jared stared out of the window. The table behind him was set for four as it always was on this day, a memorial to the four friends who had sat here together every year to celebrate life.

Inseparable since childhood, three years ago death had intervened. A New Year’s party, several drinks too many, a car, a corner, a tree.

Jared’s heart felt heavy as he thought of the three companions he would never again share good times with, help through the bad times.

The door opened and the three friends sombrely entered. Jared took a last look and faded back into their memories.

  1. NotAPunkRocker
    January 14, 2015 at 8:30 pm

    Yikes, I am picturing my brother in this story.

    Very sad, but very well done.

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    • January 14, 2015 at 9:10 pm

      And here was me thinking it would be quite a rare name!
      Thanks. The photo just looked kinda sombre to me.

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  2. January 14, 2015 at 8:46 pm

    Aw, now you made me cry. Gee. You keep surprising me. Here’s to all the ones we remember and miss.

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    • January 14, 2015 at 9:12 pm

      Sorry 😦 The photo put me in that kind of mood, I guess.
      Here’s one indeed to those who are no longer with us.

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  3. January 14, 2015 at 9:20 pm

    Awesome story in 100 words. Nice job!!! I was expecting the other way… Three spirits one friend.

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:00 am

      So was I until I got half way through!
      Glad you liked it.

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  4. January 14, 2015 at 9:30 pm

    Photo put me into a funk also. As always….well done.

    DJ

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:01 am

      Yeah, I couldn’t get a comedy out of this one. Thanks!

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  5. January 14, 2015 at 11:07 pm

    Great story, Draliman. The twist at the end came with just the right touch of surprise. Nicely handled.

    MG

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:02 am

      Thanks. I was worried it would be a bit confusing but people seem to have got it!

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      • January 15, 2015 at 2:19 pm

        Not confusing at all, just understated enough to be pulled off in style. πŸ˜‰

        MG

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      • January 15, 2015 at 2:23 pm

        Cool, I definitely didn’t want to be too obvious, thanks πŸ™‚

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  6. January 14, 2015 at 11:34 pm

    Nice twist at the end there! Good job.

    janet

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:04 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  7. January 15, 2015 at 12:37 am

    Love the surprise ending. Great story!

    Chris

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  8. January 15, 2015 at 1:24 am

    That was a real tear jerker and should be High School required reading (among many other people).

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  9. January 15, 2015 at 2:55 am

    sad story. great twist at the end. totally unexpected.

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:06 am

      I don’t usually do sad but that’s what the photo said to me. Glad you liked it!

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  10. latasun
    January 15, 2015 at 5:29 am

    Wow.. nice twist at the end..

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  11. January 15, 2015 at 7:52 am

    That was pure beauty Mr Drailman. ❀

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  12. January 15, 2015 at 8:06 am

    Yes, but can he move a penny? Ditto! Great switch. πŸ™‚

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:08 am

      Maybe if he meets someone in the subway who can teach him…
      Glad you liked it!

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  13. January 15, 2015 at 9:43 am

    Great story, loved the twist at the end, very nicely done πŸ™‚

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    • January 15, 2015 at 11:50 am

      Thanks, turning it on its head was a late decision!

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  14. January 15, 2015 at 10:50 am

    Great twist. Vry nicely done

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  15. January 15, 2015 at 10:55 am

    how touching. could have easily been me this new years. life is brief… great story.

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    • January 15, 2015 at 11:51 am

      Life is brief, and can end so suddenly. I’m glad you enjoyed my story.

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  16. January 15, 2015 at 11:46 am

    Great twist.

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    • January 15, 2015 at 11:51 am

      Thanks! It wouldn’t be a DraliStory without a twist πŸ™‚

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  17. January 15, 2015 at 5:24 pm

    I also enjoyed the unexpected twist.

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:15 pm

      It seems to have been quite popular, thanks!

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  18. January 15, 2015 at 6:04 pm

    Wow! Great twist at the end. Thanks for the surprise. Alicia

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    • January 15, 2015 at 8:16 pm

      You’re welcome, I like an unexpected ending πŸ™‚

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  19. January 15, 2015 at 9:37 pm

    very good drali

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  20. January 15, 2015 at 10:31 pm

    Dear Ali,

    That little twist at the end gave me chills. Exquisite creepiness.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 16, 2015 at 8:05 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! I had the idea to turn it around about half way through.
      Ali

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  21. January 15, 2015 at 11:47 pm

    I think that your second sentence in para 2 is really good – tells the story in so few words. There in Spirit would work for me.

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    • January 16, 2015 at 8:07 am

      Thanks. A word limit does force us to be a little creative with the phrasing, and sometimes it works!
      The alternative title might have been better.

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  22. January 16, 2015 at 12:58 am

    Holy shit, that is a great story.

    Stomach still feeling it 5 minutes later.

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    • January 16, 2015 at 8:08 am

      I’m glad you liked it and felt it too.
      Thanks!

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  23. January 16, 2015 at 9:42 am

    Ooh spooky, I wasn’t expecting that ending. I had to read it a couple of times to be sure what had happened. Amazing atmosphere for such a short tale.

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    • January 16, 2015 at 11:48 am

      Glad you liked it! I wanted to be clear without being too obvious, it’s a tricky line to tread sometimes.

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  24. January 16, 2015 at 11:27 am

    Great and unexpected twist at the end, Ali. I also was expecting it to be the other way round. Well done! πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • January 16, 2015 at 11:48 am

      I was expecting the ending to be the other way round as well until I got to it! Glad you liked it πŸ™‚

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  25. January 16, 2015 at 2:38 pm

    Very touching, that’s how you work the twist.

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    • January 16, 2015 at 2:41 pm

      Thanks. Not my usual thing but it’s nice to try something different once in a while.

      Liked by 1 person

  26. January 16, 2015 at 6:20 pm

    Great story, though very sad. I love the twist at the end. πŸ™‚

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  27. January 16, 2015 at 6:36 pm

    Ouch, that hurt my heart. Great twist at the end of a very good story.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:45 am

      Thank you! I thought of the twist part-way through but I thought it added something to the story.

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  28. January 16, 2015 at 7:46 pm

    Nice! Kind of a Sixth Sense twist at the end…

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:45 am

      I didn’t think of that but it is, isn’t it?

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      • January 18, 2015 at 1:25 pm

        I see dead possums!

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      • January 18, 2015 at 5:00 pm

        Now stick that on a t-shirt with a picture of Buster and I’ll get me one.

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  29. January 16, 2015 at 7:55 pm

    Very tender and very clever – wonderful twist at the end.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:46 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. The twist has proved very popular πŸ™‚

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  30. January 16, 2015 at 8:11 pm

    This is a most excellent story.. the double perspective like magic with mirrors.. what is real and what happens elsewhere.. to me there is still two possibilities to what had happened.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 9:58 am

      Thanks. It can be seen from both sides – just before I hit publish I remember I was still a little unsure myself!

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  31. January 16, 2015 at 9:36 pm

    I love that he ‘faded into their memories’ – better than fading into the air, or the walls, or vanishing altogether. Sad story.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:47 am

      Thanks, I reworded that sentence a few times to get just the right “feeling”.

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  32. January 17, 2015 at 4:28 pm

    I love the way you have written this story, particularly the twist at the end. How sad that is and beautifully done.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:50 am

      Thank you. When I saw the photo it immediately said to me that whoever the places were laid for, they weren’t all going to show up. Then I decided to twist it at the end.

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  33. January 17, 2015 at 7:46 pm

    Clever. I always thinks the spirits stay with us for a while to make sure we’re okay. It is a sad prompt, and I just couldn’t go sad this week, but I enjoyed your take a lot.

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:51 am

      I’ve written nothing but comedies for weeks but this photo definitely said “sad” to me. I’m glad you liked it!

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  34. January 18, 2015 at 7:03 am

    So sad 😦 I’m glad they’re continuing the tradition and that he stopped by for a quick visit.
    Ellespeth

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    • January 18, 2015 at 7:51 am

      I think they’ll always congregate on this day together to remember.

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  35. January 18, 2015 at 4:38 pm

    Dear Draliman, Excellent story! I love “too many drinks .. a car, a corner, a tree.” What a wonderful sentence! WOW! Awesome writing as usual! Nan πŸ™‚

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    • January 18, 2015 at 5:03 pm

      Thanks! The word limit sure has us thinking hard about our writing, doesn’t it?

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  36. January 22, 2015 at 1:43 pm

    What a great twist! And at the last possible moment. Thanks.

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    • January 22, 2015 at 6:45 pm

      I like my last minute twists! Glad you liked it.

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  37. December 5, 2016 at 8:48 am

    Good twist!
    πŸ‘πŸ‘

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