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History Repeats

It’s Monday and that means it’s time for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get a photo prompt and an opening sentence plus 150 words to complete the story. For this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

The supplied sentence is in bold in my story.

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Copyright Barbara W. Beacham

 

The neighbours were not happy about my choice of yard art.

First they tries light hearted banter.

“Blimey, mate, what’s the ‘ell’s that? Not keeping it, are you?”

After a week they’re done mincin’ words.

“Listen, chum, I’m not meaning to be rude, but that’s an eyesore, ya know? You gonna move it or what?”

I ignore them, miserable gits.

Then it gets serious. I comes out in the mornin’ and find the Native American covered wi’ paint. Makes him look somehow diseased.

I says nothing. They says nothing. They know I know it were them.

Next day, someone’s shot holes in the bison with an air rifle. The day after that, the Native American has both his arms shot off. These neighbours come over from England couple a’ years previous. Settlers, you might say. Suddenly I got a diseased-looking Native American and a shot bison.

Funny how history repeats. Maybe tomorrow I’ll complete the cycle and scalp the bastards.

 

  1. April 13, 2015 at 7:25 pm

    Fun story, and your protagonist has the right solution.

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  2. April 13, 2015 at 8:00 pm

    Hee hee! Loved the last line! Thanks for writing for this challenge Ali! I truly appreciate you sticking with the MFtS and hope to see you again next week. Be well… ^..^

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:49 am

      I’m glad you liked it!
      Thanks for organising the challenge every week 🙂

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  3. April 13, 2015 at 9:21 pm

    I think you could call that … (ready?) A PLAN.

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:50 am

      It certainly is that. I’m not sure he’ll actually go through with it, though.

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  4. April 13, 2015 at 9:29 pm

    You nailed it with the title. Brilliant.

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:51 am

      Thanks! I sat there for a while trying to think of a decent title, I find it’s sometimes the hardest part.

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  5. April 13, 2015 at 9:56 pm

    Terrific story… You captured the essence perfectly with the touch of comic…

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:54 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂 I was aiming for a sort of history message with a slightly comic tone.

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  6. Lyn
    April 13, 2015 at 11:24 pm

    Touché! Palpable shot sir. Great take on the prompt D-man.

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:55 am

      Thanks! I’m glad it worked, I wasn’t entirely sure.

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  7. April 14, 2015 at 4:03 am

    you are gifted! 😀

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  8. Francesca Smith
    April 14, 2015 at 6:15 am

    You captured the voice of the protagonist very well and as usual, a great take on the prompt. Although I swerve towards the “people repeat history, for history is man-made” arena, I enjoyed this and I think the neighbours should definitely be wary.

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:57 am

      People are people, so mistakes made in the past are sure to be made again I reckon.
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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  9. April 14, 2015 at 6:33 am

    touche indeed.. very clever tale draliman, great work 🙂

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  10. April 14, 2015 at 8:34 am

    Heavy stuff. Well done. I’m waiting for your book…..

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    • April 14, 2015 at 12:03 pm

      I’m waiting for my book too 🙂
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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  11. April 14, 2015 at 9:06 am

    I can see those yobs cowering as you get ready to scalp them!

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    • April 14, 2015 at 12:03 pm

      I’m sharpening my scalping knife… 🙂

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  12. April 14, 2015 at 10:37 am

    Nice work. It’s funny on the surface but with a serious theme. I enjoyed the narrator’s voice 🙂

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    • April 14, 2015 at 12:04 pm

      I’m glad you saw both the humorous and serious sides of my story. Thanks!

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  13. April 14, 2015 at 10:49 am

    I loved it.

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  14. April 14, 2015 at 12:47 pm

    It is a great ending.

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  15. buddysmom13
    April 14, 2015 at 1:53 pm

    What a great take on the prompt and the title really works. Very clever, I am finding that I really like your style and look forward to seeing what you write each week.

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    • April 14, 2015 at 6:21 pm

      I’m glad you liked it and thank you for such a lovely comment!
      My stories tend to shift with my mood (comedy/dark/message), but I guess my overall style remains the same 🙂

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  16. April 14, 2015 at 4:05 pm

    Ha! Very Funny! 🙂

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  17. April 14, 2015 at 9:48 pm

    Funny and clever, all in one. I really like the idea of history repeating itself with the diseased-looking Indian and shot bison – and the last line finishes it off perfectly.

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  18. April 15, 2015 at 4:15 am

    Ali you are unique! This is a superb in depth double sided tale ~ The serious side surfaces with the last line ~ Brilliant 🙂

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    • April 15, 2015 at 10:25 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I was worried it wouldn’t work but evidently it did 🙂
      Thanks!

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  19. April 15, 2015 at 5:12 am

    We have lots of that going on over this side of the pond 😛 Yard art and all.
    Ellespeth

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    • April 15, 2015 at 10:26 am

      We’re more “gnomes” over here 🙂

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  20. April 15, 2015 at 1:25 pm

    I completely forgot about Mondays. I’ll have to get back a it.
    But tot you …
    Love it. I like the voice. Shows the mentality of these people.
    Then the punch line. I can just see him sharpening his knife.
    Phyllis

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    • April 15, 2015 at 2:44 pm

      I originally wrote it in “standard” English but then thought it would better with a bit of – whatever sort of English that is, with his thoughts in the present tense.
      I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  21. April 16, 2015 at 9:36 am

    Great story! I love the humour but with the underlying serious message. The final line is perfection. 🙂

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  22. April 16, 2015 at 7:04 pm

    I think you must write a book, Draliman. You’re great in this! Pawkisses 🙂 ❤

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    • April 16, 2015 at 7:38 pm

      I just need a great idea for a story. I’m better at mini-stories!
      Thanks 🙂

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  23. April 17, 2015 at 7:50 am

    That was great, Ali. History has indeed repeated itself. Hilarious and well done. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • April 17, 2015 at 8:18 am

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂

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  24. April 18, 2015 at 4:35 pm

    I enjoyed the dialogues. Liked his solution/thought in the last line. 🙂

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    • April 18, 2015 at 4:48 pm

      Thanks! I doubt he’ll go through with it but he’s pretty annoyed 🙂

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  25. April 18, 2015 at 10:09 pm

    This is brilliant! LOL! I loved how it went along as fiction and the end, it is true. Great job!

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  26. May 16, 2015 at 9:51 pm

    Great job!!! Loved the twist of history!

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    • May 17, 2015 at 6:20 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I was a little worried when I researched “scalping” – it appears that it was originally a European thing and ultimately in America everyone was at it – but I thought I’d run with it.

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