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MFTS – Rags to Riches

Here is my contribution for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get a photo, an opening sentence and then we have 100-150 words to finish the story.

I had a story all written, about a woman who’s had a terrible life and decides to drown herself, then changes her mind, swims back towards shore and gets eaten by a shark (ha ha ha) but you’ll be pleased to hear I changed my mind and wrote this one instead.

For this week’s other contributions, click on the little blue froggy. In my story, the supplied opening sentence is in bold.

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Copyright B.W. Beacham

 

Arriving at the beach, she reflected on her life. A tough childhood. Orphaned. In and out of trouble. Never fitting in, never belonging. She’d grown hard. Bitter. Always putting herself first. Because she had to. Because she needed to survive.

That was before David. Sweet David. Gentle David. David, who wouldn’t think twice before throwing himself under a bus to save a small furry animal in distress.

New husband David. Rich David. Gullible David. She couldn’t believe how easy it had been to talk him out of the pre-nup. “Davey, honey, love’s forever. We’re forever.”

She imagined tomorrow’s headlines. “Wealthy philanthropist David Gear dies in tragic boating accident while on honeymoon. New wife inconsolable.” She’d better work on inconsolable, she thought. The way he’d thrashed about as the sharks had ripped him apart made her smile. It had reminded her of the way he made love. Ineffectually.

She pinched herself to make her eyes water, then walked back to the hotel to face the Press.

 

  1. May 11, 2015 at 7:20 pm

    I love a happy ending. Well fed sharks, well-heeled widow. Doesn’t get better than that.

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    • May 11, 2015 at 7:43 pm

      Yeah, and that David sounded like a bit of a wet blanket anyway, so all’s well that ends well.

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  2. May 11, 2015 at 7:48 pm

    Eh, murder & mayhem. For money. Sharks, unless hungry or confused, aren’t going to go after humans, though. From what I know.

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    • May 12, 2015 at 6:39 am

      I guess it was hungry and smelled the blood. I’m sure there have been shark attacks on humans in the past, or so it implied in the excellent documentary film series “Jaws” 🙂

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  3. May 11, 2015 at 10:16 pm

    Wow…. Glad I never had a date with her!

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  4. May 12, 2015 at 12:11 am

    Got me with that one Ali! A black widow! Loved the tale! Thanks for writing again for this challenge and hope that you continue on…I appreciate you! Be well… ^..^

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    • May 12, 2015 at 6:41 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I only hope she now has enough money not to need to do this again with another poor chap 🙂

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      • May 12, 2015 at 2:35 pm

        The black widow stories are fun to write. Who knows if she will do it again. Maybe I have a photo to go with the black widow theme!

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      • May 12, 2015 at 3:43 pm

        Yeah! 🙂

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  5. buddysmom13
    May 12, 2015 at 1:47 am

    I really like your style and enjoyed this story. Well written – as usual 🙂

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    • May 12, 2015 at 6:41 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked my tale of dark betrayal 🙂

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  6. May 12, 2015 at 2:32 am

    Glad you decided to go with the happy ending story. 🙂

    DJ

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  7. May 12, 2015 at 6:55 am

    what a brilliant ending, content and photo…

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  8. May 12, 2015 at 8:23 am

    Hard-hearted indeed. I hope David’s ghost comes back to haunt her. Serves her right. Where is Sherlock Holmes when you need him? I see your dack muse took over, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • May 12, 2015 at 10:15 am

      Yeah, I went all dark this week 🙂
      Poor David, he seemed like such a nice guy. Maybe there will be a Sherlock Holmes type on the case who smells a rat…

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  9. May 12, 2015 at 8:24 am

    That’s supposed to be “dark” muse in the last sentence. 😦

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  10. May 12, 2015 at 10:34 am

    Pretty cold on that beach! Well done.

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    • May 12, 2015 at 11:39 am

      She’s a cold an calculating one, certainly. Thanks!

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  11. May 12, 2015 at 11:20 am

    She’s a nasty piece of work, it obviously doesn’t pay to be a nice guy.

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    • May 12, 2015 at 11:39 am

      He deserved a kindred spirit rather than this nasty piece of work.

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  12. May 12, 2015 at 3:28 pm

    This will provide plenty of good fodder for the tabloids for years to come. Especially once the trial of the century begins….

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    • May 12, 2015 at 3:44 pm

      Yeah, one of those high-profile ones with top lawyers, mud-slinging, bribes (allegedly) and all the trimmings!

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  13. May 12, 2015 at 5:20 pm

    To be taken for the ride of a lifetime ~ A very short lifetime indeed! ~ I grieve for the family and the poor lawyers when she is in court ~ Well done Ali 🙂

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    • May 12, 2015 at 5:41 pm

      She’s hoping to avoid charges, but I suspect she hasn’t been as clever as she thinks. Glad you liked it!

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  14. May 12, 2015 at 7:16 pm

    Wonderful story woven in a few words…kudos…you nailed the challenge.

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  15. May 12, 2015 at 8:46 pm

    You are exceedingly wicked. But you know that, don’t you? (Love it!)

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  16. May 12, 2015 at 9:12 pm

    All that for being ineffectual ? Wicked story of a remorseless black widow. Nicely done.

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    • May 13, 2015 at 7:02 am

      A woman’s gotta do what a woman’s gotta do 🙂
      Glad you liked it!

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  17. May 12, 2015 at 9:50 pm

    “The way he’d thrashed about as the sharks had ripped him apart made her smile. It had reminded her of the way he made love. Ineffectually.” That’s brutal – says so much about the character. There’s a lot of story in there. Excellent work!

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    • May 13, 2015 at 7:03 am

      She’s cold and dark through and through. No compassion there at all. I hope she enjoys the money!
      Glad you liked it.

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  18. May 12, 2015 at 11:44 pm

    Wickedly hilarious! Your commenters are always a good read too. Loved the first comment.
    HaHaHaHa! 😀

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    • May 13, 2015 at 7:04 am

      You’re a good bunch, my commenters 🙂
      Glad you liked it!

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  19. May 13, 2015 at 1:20 am

    OMG! What a cold-hearted witch. I love how you lead the reader through her tough life and then her David, from sweet to gullible. Loved the description of him fighting the sharks like he made love. Well done!

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    • May 13, 2015 at 7:06 am

      Thanks! Yes, she’s cold through and through. I think even if she’d had a happy childhood she’d still wouldn’t have been a very nice person.
      Glad you liked it!

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  20. May 13, 2015 at 2:37 pm

    I love the happy ending! Poor David, marrying such a cold woman. At least the sharks are well fed! Great story. 🙂

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    • May 13, 2015 at 3:39 pm

      I hope he gets justice, it depends on how clever she’s been…
      Glad you liked it!

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  21. May 13, 2015 at 5:20 pm

    Love it when a plan comes to together!! Now to see if she can keep up the lies. Wonderful story!

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    • May 13, 2015 at 5:54 pm

      I get the impression she’ll have no bother keeping the lies going. I’m glad you liked it!

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  22. May 14, 2015 at 3:56 am

    Can we have the eaten by the Sharks story next week? 😛 gotta love a femme fatale story, and this is a great example!

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    • May 14, 2015 at 6:53 am

      The original story was very sad for the poor woman 😦 This one was very sad for David, though 🙂

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      • May 17, 2015 at 12:11 pm

        I think I prefer this version :p

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  23. May 14, 2015 at 6:12 pm

    That’s what’s wrong with this world. All the good ones die. LOL

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  24. May 16, 2015 at 4:04 pm

    Sometimes too good is too bad just like too much sweet is harmful. Now she’ll have a pretty good life. I hope she sees the ghost. 🙂

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    • May 17, 2015 at 6:12 am

      Yes, I was trying to paint him as “too good” – I would imagine most people would get fed up with him after a while!

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  25. May 19, 2015 at 9:49 am

    Never trust a woman, huh?

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