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Full Speed Ahead!

Here is my contribution to this week’s Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. 100-150 words is the goal, and the supplied opening sentence is in bold in my story.

This week’s other stories can be found by clicking on the blue froggy. I couldn’t help thinking that the boat (if that’s what it is) in the picture looks like the slowest boat ever, so that’s the way I went in my rather nutty story this week. I had fun substituting the usual words associated with sleek and fast ocean-going vessels with the ones I used here :-).

Sorry about the ending, I’m already over the word count :-(.

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Copyright B.W. Beacham

 

The crew of the Angel Flame received orders to head out.

“Pleasure yacht ‘Schnitzel’ adrift – all craft assist!”

Derkin put to sea, his son Timmy standing excitedly at the prow. The Flame’s powerful twin engines pushed the craft to an impressive 1.5 miles per hour. Timmy shouted with glee!

They cut through the waves like a spork through a brick, eating up the inches, thundering at nearly no speed whatsoever towards the stricken yacht. Another rescue craft drew level and then shot ahead, its lone occupant pulling hard on the oars.

“Faster, Dad!” yelled Timmy.

Derkin gritted his teeth and engaged the afterburner, increasing speed to 1.75 miles per hour. Suddenly a three inch wave hit them full on, swamping the boat.

“We’re taking on water, we’ll have to turn back!” he yelled. “I hope we make it!”

Timmy gasped.

Derkin turned the Flame and stared in horror. The dock was already over thirty feet distant! Throttles open to the limit, they reached safety twenty minutes later and were home in time for tea.

 

  1. May 18, 2015 at 6:48 pm

    I love this phrase “like a spork through a brick.” Fun use of language that went really well with the ending – back in time for tea. 🙂

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    • May 18, 2015 at 7:44 pm

      I had a good time with the language in this one – it’s fun to use phrases you could never put in a “serious” story 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  2. May 18, 2015 at 7:19 pm

    Lovely and funny story. Good stuff!

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  3. May 18, 2015 at 7:52 pm

    The boat was racing at 1.75 miles per hour. LOL!! Great story!

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  4. May 18, 2015 at 7:59 pm

    I’m still laughing. And I’m SO glad they made it home in time for tea. Another tragedy averted!

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    • May 18, 2015 at 8:08 pm

      It was a pretty close thing for them there at the end! I’m glad it made you laugh, it was fun to write.

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  5. May 18, 2015 at 8:02 pm

    “like a spork through a brick” may be my new favorite simile.

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    • May 18, 2015 at 8:08 pm

      I think it describes the progress of that “boat” quite well 🙂

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  6. May 18, 2015 at 10:34 pm

    What an amazing display of derring-do! 🙂

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    • May 19, 2015 at 7:14 am

      Yes, they were pretty brave even setting foot on that boat, let alone setting sail 🙂

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  7. May 18, 2015 at 11:23 pm

    Had The Flame been dispatched to rescue the Titanic, it would have arrived yesterday…

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    • May 19, 2015 at 7:14 am

      I can imagine skeletal fingers still gripping the wheel…

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  8. May 18, 2015 at 11:32 pm

    Such a funny tale Ali! Powerful twin engines hitting top speed of 1.5 miles per hour – hysterical! Thanks for your contribution and be well! ^..^

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  9. buddysmom13
    May 19, 2015 at 12:42 am

    Ok, this is going to be repetitive but I think my new favorite sentence is, “like a spork through a brick” what an image! I also like “Derkin gritted his teeth,” I could feel him straining to go faster. Great story!

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    • May 19, 2015 at 7:20 am

      Ah, Derkin, bless him! That boat’s probably his pride and joy. I’m glad you liked it, it was fun writing some silly imagery 🙂

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  10. May 19, 2015 at 1:24 am

    Very nicely done. Great job of building tension and your character development was superb but your humor – well that took the day, didn’t it?
    Spork through a brick, brilliant!

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    • May 19, 2015 at 7:22 am

      I’m glad you liked it, I thought it was time for some humour. I had a laugh writing it 🙂

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  11. May 19, 2015 at 3:38 am

    What can I say, it’s all been said. Excellent!

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  12. May 19, 2015 at 8:25 am

    HaHaHaHa! Too funny! 😀

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  13. May 19, 2015 at 9:36 am

    30 feet from the coast and they made it, what an adventure! Thanks for the laugh, this was lovely, and hilarious.

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    • May 19, 2015 at 10:06 am

      It was a close thing. Live is dangerous on the (almost) open sea 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  14. May 19, 2015 at 12:32 pm

    I liked it – I enjoyed the bit of tension that lightens in the end.

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    • May 19, 2015 at 1:27 pm

      Glad you liked it! I like popping in a bit of tension, even if in this case it was a bit tongue-in-cheek!

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  15. May 19, 2015 at 12:43 pm

    Hilarious and well done, Ali. I loved the description “like a spork through a brick.” 😀 — Suzanne

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    • May 19, 2015 at 1:28 pm

      That seems to have been quite a popular phrase 🙂
      Thanks!

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  16. May 19, 2015 at 2:01 pm

    Absolutely wonderful! Glad they make it home for tea. 🙂

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    • May 19, 2015 at 3:15 pm

      That’s the main thing! A nice fish and chip supper after all the excitement 🙂

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      • May 19, 2015 at 5:50 pm

        Sounds wonderful. I used to live in Nova Scotia and New Brunswick (Canada). Fish and chips, and my favourite: fried clams — the real thing fresh from the sand bed.
        Now I’m hungry — hard to find good f&c here — use the wrong fish.

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      • May 20, 2015 at 6:55 am

        I’d be lost without proper fish and chips. Fortunately they’re everywhere here!

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  17. May 19, 2015 at 5:22 pm

    I’m still laughing…. the imagery is wonderful! I love the “spork through a brick” line…. too funny!!! Loved this!!!

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    • May 20, 2015 at 6:55 am

      I’m glad I made you laugh 🙂 The word “spork” by itself is funny!

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  18. May 19, 2015 at 5:56 pm

    I really loved your story, but i felt like you rushed through it. You could continue on this next week 🙂 Cheers!(i’m sure it’s from the word limit)

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    • May 20, 2015 at 6:58 am

      I had to pretty much cut it in half. It did leave me feeling a bit disappointed with the whole thing as it could have been so much more, hence the rather rushed ending :-(. I’m glad you liked what I managed to squeeze in, anyway!

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  19. May 20, 2015 at 7:41 pm

    A very amusing story that had me smiling then grinning ~ Nice work Ali ~

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  20. May 21, 2015 at 10:15 pm

    What a fun story! I love your language use throughout – though ‘like a spork through a brick’ has to be my favourite! Really well done. 🙂

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:03 am

      Lots of people liked that line 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it. It was lots of fun to write!

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  21. Opat Hebat
    May 22, 2015 at 2:06 am

    I love the ending which is very surprising and I can’t stop grinning.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:04 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it and it made you smile 🙂

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  22. May 22, 2015 at 3:02 am

    Lovely story. I also liked your use of words. Recently looked up “gamboling”, it’s so British that it took me time to find it. Or the internet dictionary to allow me to, insisted on gambling.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:06 am

      Thanks, it was a lot of fun to write, all the totally misplaced tension.
      Although “gambolling” is quite general in description, I’ve only ever seen it applied to lambs 🙂

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  23. May 23, 2015 at 1:56 am

    Haha loved it! One of your best Drali, very funny 🙂

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  24. May 23, 2015 at 12:45 pm

    Fun! 🙂

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  25. May 24, 2015 at 3:21 pm

    That was a father-son outing I could live without! Enjoyed the read!

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