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From Misery, Beauty

Here is my contribution to this week’s Friday Fictioneers, the weekly 100 word flash fiction challenge hosted by Rochelle at Addicted to Purple. This week’s photo comes to us courtesy of Santoshwriter.

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She cried for the pain she felt, for the helplessness. She cried for her lost childhood, her forgotten innocence. Her mother knew, had to know, and she cried that the one person who should have protected her had failed, had ignored what was happening.

She hefted the package the stranger had handed her. Squat, black, ugly, magazine fully loaded. A means to an end. She headed home, noticing in passing her tears glistening on the leaves in the early morning sunlight, reflecting rainbows of colour.

How can my misery create such beauty? she wondered, tucking the pistol into her waistband.

 

  1. May 20, 2015 at 8:42 pm

    Life is strange…creating beauty out of misery. Nicely done.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 12:19 am

      Very emotional story. Excellent! Nicely done – and the ending was intense.

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      • May 21, 2015 at 7:00 am

        Thanks! Something slightly different from me this week.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 6:57 am

      It is strange sometimes. Thanks!

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  2. May 20, 2015 at 8:55 pm

    This is very different for you Ali. I found it very touching.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 6:57 am

      It was a bit of a departure from my usual. I’m glad you liked it!

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  3. Francesca Smith
    May 20, 2015 at 9:42 pm

    Beauty can still be found in the bleakest of places. You just have to open your eyes.
    Great and poignant story!

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  4. May 20, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Let’s hope she contemplates that beauty and not use the gun.
    Well done.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 6:58 am

      I did think that maybe, having seen that, she might think twice about such a permanent solution.

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  5. May 20, 2015 at 11:11 pm

    Desperate measures for desperate times that are “Squat, black, ugly”. Who’s to say what any of us would do in a situation like this.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 6:59 am

      It’s a terrible situation and she’s obviously been pushed too far.

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  6. May 21, 2015 at 2:03 am

    an emotionally-packed story. i liked the use of long sentences to build up the protagonist’s point of view. well done.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 7:01 am

      I thought I’d go for a mixture of short and sharp, and long. I’m glad you liked it!

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  7. May 21, 2015 at 3:57 am

    How can my misery create such beauty? Lovely line.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 7:02 am

      Thanks! this piece took quite a lot of editing to get the “sound” right.

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  8. May 21, 2015 at 6:52 am

    This piece reminds me of Tate & Lyle’s treacle tins with a biblical reference to bees nesting in a dead lion “and out of the strong came forth sweetness”.

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  9. May 21, 2015 at 7:07 am

    I hope the beauty makes her feel strong enough to dump the gun AND the people it was intended for. ❤

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    • May 21, 2015 at 7:16 am

      Me too, that would be the best outcome for her.

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  10. May 21, 2015 at 8:27 am

    Oh Wow! That is an amazing piece of writing Draliman and a wonderful take on the prompt, you made me cry and it’s been a long time since that happened. Well done 🙂

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    • May 21, 2015 at 8:50 am

      Thank you for such a lovely comment! A bit of a departure from my usual stories. I’m so glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  11. May 21, 2015 at 9:08 am

    Dear Ali,

    I hope she’ll forget about the gun. Vivid piece

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • May 21, 2015 at 9:25 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I hope so to. Thanks!
      Ali

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  12. May 21, 2015 at 11:12 am

    There is a horror under this story that makes her actions understandable. I hope that her epiphany about beauty out of tears helps her to find alternative solutions to death, for herself or those who harmed her.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 1:16 pm

      I hope so too. Sometimes noticing these little things can cast things in a different light.

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  13. May 21, 2015 at 1:49 pm

    Enjoyable take on the prompt, chilling in its implications of what has, and is about to happen.

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    • May 21, 2015 at 2:17 pm

      Thanks.
      A terrible situation already and I’m glad I didn’t have to write the outcome to this tale.

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  14. May 21, 2015 at 5:15 pm

    I would hope she has a little list and the evil doers will pay their own tab.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:01 am

      She’ll be ticking them off as she works her way through.

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  15. May 21, 2015 at 5:16 pm

    That was neatly done, different from your usual but still as effective 🙂

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:01 am

      Thanks, not quite sure why I went there but I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  16. May 21, 2015 at 7:49 pm

    That was certainly different from your usual style, but the description was great, and there was biting reality about it. So well written, Ali. — Suzanne

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:02 am

      I’m glad you liked it, I rarely write anything quite so gritty.

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  17. May 21, 2015 at 11:38 pm

    Who ARE you and what have you done with Al?
    J/K…sorta..nice change up. Always good to stretch your writing legs.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:04 am

      It’s a subject I’ve never touched on before but that’s where the photo led me, for whatever reason.

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  18. May 22, 2015 at 2:44 am

    Yes.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:04 am

      Yes indeed. Time for her to take control.

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  19. May 22, 2015 at 9:00 am

    A very heartfelt story, Draliman, so good she saw the beauty in the end 🙂 Thank you for coming to my Pawty. It made my birthday just a little bit more special ❤ Extra Pawkisses for the weekend 😀 ❤

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  20. May 22, 2015 at 3:30 pm

    Ooh, this isn’t going to end well…

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  21. May 22, 2015 at 4:12 pm

    I’m not sure what’s happening with that gun, but I hope she doesn’t use it. I like the build up with the first paragraph, and especially the poignant moment with the tears. It reminded of those moments that just reach out and grab you in life, nicely caught here. Well done, Ali.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 6:12 pm

      There are three options – she doesn’t use it (having had second thoughts after seeing her tears glistening on the leaves), she shoots herself (unlikely) or she shoots the person abusing her.
      I’m glad you liked my story!

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  22. May 22, 2015 at 6:22 pm

    A wonderfully emotional and poignant story. I hope she decides not to use the gun on anyone, as much as she may feel they deserve it.

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    • May 22, 2015 at 7:39 pm

      I hope that too. Maybe the little glimpse of beauty will stay her hand.
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. May 23, 2015 at 4:26 am

    So different for you, doc – wonderfully so.

    Those dewdrops are beautiful – in this case tears. I hope she ponders her question during her walk home. A striking contrast to her anger, too.

    Ellespeth

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    • May 23, 2015 at 7:56 am

      Yes, quite a different piece this week. It’s good to try something new every once in a while.

      I hope she thinks things through, too. Maybe she’ll find another solution – it would be a shame if she threw her life away.

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  24. May 23, 2015 at 2:40 pm

    Hopefully she’ll reach out to someone and save the beauty, for as they say, “The flower that blooms in adversity is the most rare and beautiful of all.”
    Different than usual, and nicely done!

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    • May 24, 2015 at 5:25 am

      Thanks, it was quite a different piece from me this week. I hope she’ll reach out too, rather than turn destructive.
      I like that quote!

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      • May 24, 2015 at 2:47 pm

        It’s from Disney’s Mulan! 😀

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      • May 24, 2015 at 4:33 pm

        I haven’t heard of that one. Just looked it up on IMDB 🙂

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  25. May 23, 2015 at 10:44 pm

    Wow! There are soooo many optional endings that could intersect this story!

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  26. May 24, 2015 at 2:39 am

    Given no where to turn, she choses violence against violence and violation. I hope she does see beauty in nature, in herself, in others.
    I thought she was going to kill the mother, too. “Mother must have known.”
    I hope your story, which took me into her life, could have a happy ending. I fear not.

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    • May 24, 2015 at 5:33 am

      I also wondered if she’ll kill her mother, but I don’t know that she’ll go that far.
      There’s always the possibility that she’ll simply go home, gather her things and run away. Whatever she decides, it’s going to be pretty rough for her in the short term, I think.
      Thanks for your very thoughtful comment!

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      • May 24, 2015 at 5:43 am

        She has a lot of horrific memories — maybe she will run away and seek counselling and peer support groups. Much better than the other alternatives.

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      • May 24, 2015 at 8:21 am

        We’ll go with that. It’s the best choice for her at this point for sure.

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  27. May 24, 2015 at 9:22 am

    Whoa. Hope she doesn’t cross any horrible lines, here. “Go home.”

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    • May 24, 2015 at 4:28 pm

      I’m hoping she comes to her senses and thinks things through.

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  28. June 1, 2015 at 7:37 am

    Loved your take on the prompt. I felt the pain and the intensity of the moment.

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    • June 1, 2015 at 7:38 am

      Thanks. A bit of a different style for me for this one, I’m glad you liked it!

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