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MFTS – You Can Run, But…

Here is my contribution to Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. We get an opening sentence (in bold in my story) plus 150 words to write a story in response to a photo.

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Copyright B.W. Beacham


He thought he found the perfect hiding spot.

“This’ll do,” thought Drexel, Imp of the Realm of Embarrassing Incidents. “He’ll never find me here!”

Not only had Drexel snuck out of the Netherhells, shifted realities and travelled half way across the universe, but he’d also found a handy curtain to hide behind.

“Finally free!” he thought. “They may send the Hounds of the Netherhells after me to eat my flesh. They may send the Renders of Doom to tear me limb from limb. They may even send the Gatekeeper of the Hopeless Realms to eat my brains. But all for nought. They will never find me! My plan is faultless, bwahahaha…”

“I SEE YOU!” boomed a voice from the other side of the curtain.

“Shit.” It was GRaw’Que Gan, the hideous and evil Prince of the Demesne of Unfortunate Mishaps.


Drexel covered his eyes with his paws. “One, two, three…”


  1. July 28, 2015 at 6:53 pm

    I love it. Hide and seek with the demons of another dimension. Adds a certain something to the game 🙂


  2. July 28, 2015 at 7:30 pm

    Too funny, love all the demons, their names and talents, amazing work! This is a real jem!


    • July 29, 2015 at 6:59 am

      I’m glad you liked it! It’s fun thinking up silly demon jobs 🙂


  3. NotAPunkRocker
    July 28, 2015 at 7:47 pm

    OK, I am kind of freaked out by the picture still…


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:00 am

      It is a pretty freaky picture isn’t it? I was like “whoa, look at those eyes” 🙂


  4. July 28, 2015 at 8:13 pm

    Brilliant! An unusual Sci-Fi approach to the prompt ~ A classic tale of the other side ~ There is a hellofalotmore in the Netherhells ~ 🙂


  5. July 28, 2015 at 8:31 pm

    Brilliant! Sometimes, I wonder if cats are possessed by demons…


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:01 am

      I think the Egyptians thought they were. I wonder if they were right…
      I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

  6. July 28, 2015 at 8:48 pm

    Love the names of the characters and where they come from…..it makes this more than a fun hide-and-go-seek game. Excellent twist at the end too!


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:02 am

      Even residents of the Netherhells take time off for fun and games 🙂
      It’s always fun thinking up silly job titles for denizens of the lower realms!


  7. July 28, 2015 at 8:54 pm

    “Bwahahaha” had me laughing. That is a wonderfully constructed paragraph. Loved the story Ali! Nicely done. Until next time…. ^..^


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:05 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed my little hide and seek story!
      All the best villains say “bwahahaha” 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  8. Francesca Smith
    July 28, 2015 at 8:55 pm

    Great story which fits the picture very well indeed!


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:05 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I had to explain the glowing eyes somehow 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  9. July 28, 2015 at 9:40 pm

    What a cute funny story! I thought it was brilliant!


  10. July 28, 2015 at 10:49 pm

    How embarrassing, to be found through exposed paws. Let’s hope GRaw’Que Gan gives away his hiding place with an unfortunate mishap. 🙂 I love this, Alistair. Very clever take on the prompt. 😀


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:07 am

      After all the trouble he went to as well. Somehow I doubt GRaw’Que Gan will be any more successful 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

  11. gentlestitches
    July 29, 2015 at 12:04 am

    LOL! Hilarious story and great pic. ❤


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:16 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

      Liked by 1 person

      • gentlestitches
        July 29, 2015 at 11:27 pm

        Your stories are always fresh, interesting and entertaining.


  12. July 29, 2015 at 2:15 am

    Ali, you outdid yourself with this one. I wonder who’s hosting these otherworldly demons in their home. It’s very generous of them but more than a little weird. Hilarious and well written. Your imagination knows no bounds. 😀 — Suzanne


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:17 am

      I don’t think the owners know that they’re there! I bet they’d freak out if they saw them. I’m glad you enjoyed my story 🙂


  13. July 29, 2015 at 2:35 am

    Pull in the paws and turn off the eyes next time, netherhellion!


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:18 am

      Even if he’d remembered the paws, those eyes are definitely a big give-away! It’s hard to hide when you’re an Imp.


  14. Lata Sunil
    July 29, 2015 at 6:24 am

    So funny! ‘Shifted realities’ i loved.


  15. Lyn
    July 29, 2015 at 10:35 am

    LOL you never fail to entertain D-man 😀


  16. July 29, 2015 at 2:56 pm

    Wonderful!!! Nothing better than a game of hide and seek!!! Terrific story!!!!!


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:30 pm

      Even denizens of the Netherhells enjoy a good game 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

      Liked by 1 person

  17. July 29, 2015 at 3:29 pm

    Hehehe. Bwahahaha! great story.


  18. Susan Langer
    July 29, 2015 at 7:33 pm

    Funny. I’m still lauhing and trying to pronounce the demon names. 🙂


    • July 29, 2015 at 7:39 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! I had fun thinking up the demon names 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  19. July 31, 2015 at 6:42 am

    Ok I was one of “those” people on public transport who laugh at their phones.. Very funny Drali- this reminded me of terry pratchett, especially if something Rincewind the wizard would do/say 🙂


    • July 31, 2015 at 11:02 am

      I’m glad you liked it, and thanks for the comparison to Terry Pratchett! Rincewind is one of my favourite characters though, unlike Jed, he always managed to extricate himself from all his many scrapes 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      • July 31, 2015 at 11:38 am

        Well I suppose Rincewind did have the intellectually superior librarian around to save him. Ook!


        • July 31, 2015 at 12:26 pm

          Yes, the Librarian was quite the clever monkey (OOK OOK!) aargh, help, I didn’t mean “monkey”… 🙂

          Liked by 1 person

          • August 2, 2015 at 12:48 am

            Ah.. I feel like reading the old books again now!


  20. July 31, 2015 at 5:40 pm

    Another hilarious story! Hide and seek amongst the demons, hiding in places half way across the universe, sounds like great fun to me. And even demons need to let their hair down now and then. 🙂


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