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MFTS – The Origin of Hell on Earth

Here’s my story for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. It’s slightly over the word count but I’ve already chopped out 40 words!

The supplied sentence is in bold in my story, and you can see all the other contributions by clicking on the blue froggy.

Copyright B.W. Beacham

Copyright B.W. Beacham

 

The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode.

However, the Devil was away on business and the minions were having a party! There was jelly and ice cream, little sausages on sticks and, of course, unspeakable torments.

All the best demons had turned up. All the worst demons too. Chamblezook, Defiler of Small Animals, had accidentally marked the invite “public” on FaceScroll.

Chamblezook watched in horror as the demons… “tore up the joint”, he believed was the “in” term. He gasped as he looked out the window to see Grigglebarg, Corrupter of Kitty-Cats, taking a leak on the Master’s prize-winning geraniums.

Then he heard a voice. “He’s mine, she’s mine, missed him…” The Master was coming, reading the graveyard headstones. He would not be pleased.

He was not pleased. In his rage the Master created Hell on Earth. He later admitted he may have gone too far, but billions of humans would now be subjected to the worst torment ever devised.

And thus the Reality Show was born.

 

  1. August 31, 2015 at 6:56 pm

    My reality show would be rather boring. 😦

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    • September 1, 2015 at 6:54 am

      Mine too. Get up, go to work, come home, have tea, watch TV, go to bed. I’m sure plenty would still watch it 🙂

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  2. August 31, 2015 at 6:57 pm

    Ha! I love the names you came up. Very entertaining, Ali!

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    • September 1, 2015 at 6:54 am

      Thanks! I like inventing silly demon names 🙂

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      • September 1, 2015 at 3:58 pm

        Can you think up some for a sea monster? I need help! Thanks. I need something cool like Godzilla. 🙂

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      • September 1, 2015 at 6:03 pm

        Kerrashtarr. Rashnok. Graknar. Pete.

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      • September 1, 2015 at 6:07 pm

        Oh, great ones! Hmmm.. Thank you!

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      • September 1, 2015 at 6:21 pm

        I’d recommend not using “Pete” though 🙂

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      • September 2, 2015 at 3:09 am

        Yeah, not quite scary enough maybe. 🙂

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  3. August 31, 2015 at 7:11 pm

    Oh, yes. Oh definitely, yes. We actually have never made it through a single episode of any reality show. We did try, a couple of times, on the theory that we ought to at least know what the fuss was about … but it was too awful. Hell on earth indeed!

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    • September 1, 2015 at 6:55 am

      The only ones I’ve ever watched were stuff like X Factor and bits of Big Brother (my ex used to watch them). Urgh.

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  4. August 31, 2015 at 7:34 pm

    Oh this made me smile instantly it was dark but oddly cute too. Do you still make dralidoodles?

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    • September 1, 2015 at 6:56 am

      I’m glad you liked it!
      I still do the occasional DraliDoodle. The most recent major one was for ES’s last competition (which I won!). The link’s in the sidebar (Woodland Games).

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      • September 2, 2015 at 1:10 pm

        Oh yay!! Hopping over to it now!

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  5. August 31, 2015 at 7:57 pm

    Hahaha! Cute story Ali! Dark but cute. You wrote a great story!

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  6. August 31, 2015 at 8:19 pm

    Ooh, I love little sausages on sticks. 🙂

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:00 am

      Me too! A party without little sausages on sticks is no party at all.

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  7. August 31, 2015 at 8:30 pm

    Hilarious and engrossing. Wonderful take. Simply loved it. Was Voldemort in the party?

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:01 am

      I’m glad you liked it! Voldemort was definitely there, all the best baddies were 🙂

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  8. August 31, 2015 at 8:45 pm

    Yes I would describe the “reality shows” like that. 😀

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:11 am

      I guess someone must watch them. Though maybe they’ll think twice now their origin has been exposed 🙂

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  9. Graham Lawrence
    August 31, 2015 at 8:53 pm

    Those are some entertaining names indeed. Loved the story!

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:12 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked the story and the names!

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  10. August 31, 2015 at 9:18 pm

    Interesting story. I like their names very original.

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  11. NotAPunkRocker
    August 31, 2015 at 9:29 pm

    FaceScroll? Clever! 😀

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  12. Lyn
    August 31, 2015 at 10:22 pm

    You never disappoint with your kiicker at the end:). I have to agree, those reality TV shows are hell on earth. I avoid them like the plague…well, with the exception of the last twelve contestants on Masterchef. But The Bachelor, Big Brother, Survivor, not a hope in hell you’ll get me to watch them. I’d rather go to the dentist 😮

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:13 am

      Wow, you really hate them! Though I think I would too 🙂

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      • Lyn
        September 1, 2015 at 8:28 am

        LOL yup 🙂

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  13. August 31, 2015 at 11:53 pm

    Oh, so true, so true, horrid the shows they’ve put on. I watch reruns, or listen to music, and would cancel cable if not for hubby’s sports. But gosh, what a horrid, horrid idea! Great flash!

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:14 am

      The Devil has outdone himself this time. You know how bad these shows are when even the Devil is having second thoughts!

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  14. September 1, 2015 at 1:57 am

    I’m surprised Brad and Chad didn’t crash the party. You can’t have reality TV without them…

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:15 am

      I actually nearly put them in, but I’m trying not to use them too much in case they get “old”. They would make great Big Brother contestants!

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  15. September 1, 2015 at 2:08 am

    Loved the torment to millions at the end. Funny Ali! Love the choice of reality shows. 😀 Thanks for writing again for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. ^..^ Be well….

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  16. September 1, 2015 at 2:46 am

    It makes perfect sense! It’s so good to finally know 😉

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:16 am

      There have been rumours, but now the horrible truth is out 🙂

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  17. Lata Sunil
    September 1, 2015 at 4:59 am

    hahaha.. the reality shows are quite torturous .. suffering public humiliation and still appear to be happy .. I love the names in the story with their occupations. Good one.

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    • September 1, 2015 at 7:17 am

      I’ve never seen the appeal of these shows. I had fun thinking up the names and occupations 🙂

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  18. September 1, 2015 at 5:02 am

    I believe it is so! 😀

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  19. September 1, 2015 at 10:11 am

    Sounds more like non fiction to me.

    DJ

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    • September 1, 2015 at 2:41 pm

      Yep, this is exactly how it happened!

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  20. September 1, 2015 at 1:48 pm

    I knew there was a reason those vile shows were created! Great take on the prompt!!

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    • September 1, 2015 at 2:42 pm

      Thanks!
      Reality shows are one of the Devil’s greatest achievements.

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  21. September 1, 2015 at 2:01 pm

    People hate reality tv so much they love it!

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  22. September 1, 2015 at 9:23 pm

    Yes, the Reality Show has got to be the worst torment ever devised! Very funny story and excellent character names. 🙂

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    • September 2, 2015 at 2:03 pm

      I heard there’s a special circle of hell dedicated to reality shows. That’s what I heard 🙂

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      • September 2, 2015 at 2:10 pm

        I wouldn’t advise trying it out – not just yet, anyway. 🙂

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  23. September 2, 2015 at 1:08 am

    Corrupter of Kitty Cats is my favorite. And now I want to introduce a new sea monster to my world and name him Pete. Very funny story!

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    • September 2, 2015 at 2:05 pm

      Pete’s the sort of sea monster all the other sea monsters make fun of because of his name, but he ends up rescuing them all or some such 🙂
      There’s a specialised demon for everything!

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  24. September 2, 2015 at 9:33 am

    A very amusing story, Ali. 🙂 Reality shows are definitely Hell on Earth! I have to admit, I read the word ‘minions’ at the beginning and immediately pictured little yellow things…

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    • September 2, 2015 at 2:06 pm

      I thought that too! I originally typed “minions” with a capital “M” but realised that was even more like the film. They’ve ruined a perfectly good word 😦

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  25. September 2, 2015 at 11:09 pm

    Ah, that explains things… Also, I had a boss called Pete once – definitely a demonic name 😀

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    • September 3, 2015 at 5:45 am

      “They called him Pete, no second name, like Madonna. He worked in an office by day, but Pete had a dark secret, a secret no-one could ever learn…” 🙂

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  26. September 3, 2015 at 1:51 pm

    Wow, Ali. Now I know where that idea came from. I’m not a bit surprised though. I should have guessed. Hilarious. I laughed out loud at that story. Well done. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:40 pm

      The idea certainly must have come from some demonic source 🙂

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  27. September 3, 2015 at 5:42 pm

    haaa.. I really liked the last line! Amazingly done. You are very creative.

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    • September 3, 2015 at 7:13 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I like doing demon stories 🙂

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  28. September 6, 2015 at 4:17 am

    that sounds like some party – although you’d have to be pretty game to gatecrash a demon party! great work drali – a very entertaining read as usual, although why do I get the feeling that this was written in front of the telly?? :p

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    • September 6, 2015 at 6:08 am

      I write almost everything in front of the telly – but not a reality show 🙂
      Demons are like kids – they see there’s a random party on FaceScroll, off they go!

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      • September 6, 2015 at 11:06 am

        Id love to see what you write after watching Narcos on Netflix :p

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      • September 6, 2015 at 4:27 pm

        I’ve seen it pop up on the “recommended” list but haven’t bitten yet. There’s too much on there to watch!

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      • September 6, 2015 at 11:58 pm

        It’s addictive – so long as you don’t mind a bit of gratuitous violence 😁 and don’t require long term commitment as its only a mini series..

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      • September 8, 2015 at 6:47 am

        I might give it a go. I’m sure I can handle the gratuitous violence 🙂

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  29. September 6, 2015 at 4:20 am

    A brilliant last line~ Made me smile 🙂

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