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Friday Fictioneers – Flicker

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was also supplied by our hostess!

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Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 

Samson looked up at the lights in the window and reached for his walkie-talkie.

“They’re flickering, man.”

“But you can’t hear anything?”

“Nope. All quiet.”

“Good.”

“I’m coming down.”

He trudged down to the basement. “I told you we should’a used car batteries,” he grumbled.

“D’ya know how much they cost? It’s an old building. Dodgy electrics. It’ll be fine.” Mason walked over to the table and looked at the man strapped there.

“So, snitch, let’s try this again, shall we? Who’s your contact?”

He twisted a knob and the man screamed, his back arching. Upstairs, the lights flickered.

 

  1. September 3, 2015 at 10:49 am

    Oh boy, hope the buildings dodgy electrics doesn’t go up in …

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:36 pm

      “The fire was caused by a short-circuiting mob victim…”

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  2. September 3, 2015 at 10:57 am

    It’s a poor pass when you can’t even get the right infrastructure to do a bit of torture: whatever is the world coming to?

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:36 pm

      They ought to complain to the council…

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  3. Lyn
    September 3, 2015 at 11:18 am

    Their guest had better hope they haven’t paid their electricity bill 🙂

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  4. September 3, 2015 at 11:31 am

    Wow, Ali, that was dark. Either their electric wil go off or it’ll surge and kill the guy. Either could happen here. Our electric is off right now. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:37 pm

      Either is a possibility for sure! Maybe they should have chosen a more modern building.

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  5. September 3, 2015 at 12:10 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Electrifying ending. I’m sure the victim is hoping for a power outage. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:39 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      Thanks! With those electrics, the victim may be in luck.
      Ali

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  6. September 3, 2015 at 12:40 pm

    My spine tingles – really good.

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:39 pm

      Thanks! I’m sure they’re victim’s spine is tingling too 🙂

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  7. NotAPunkRocker
    September 3, 2015 at 1:59 pm

    Yowch!

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  8. September 3, 2015 at 2:31 pm

    Eee, this is dark. Let’s hope the circuit breaker (is that the right word?) breaks down. Great take!

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    • September 3, 2015 at 3:42 pm

      The circuit breaker is probably already shorted out with paper clips. But you never know, it might still blow!

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  9. September 3, 2015 at 4:44 pm

    Grim. Police stations nowadays! All those budget cuts.

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    • September 3, 2015 at 7:10 pm

      Ha, I wasn’t thinking police station (I guess you got that from “snitch”) – I wish I had, that’s even better than mobsters 🙂

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  10. September 3, 2015 at 5:38 pm

    Whoop! That was interesting! 🙂 Electrifying.. 😛

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  11. September 3, 2015 at 5:45 pm

    As long as the cable works, no one will notice. You have to know what’s important in this world.

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    • September 3, 2015 at 7:13 pm

      As long as the latest reality show keeps going…

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  12. September 3, 2015 at 8:23 pm

    Hope the lights go out, and the guy survives.
    Your story made me hold my breath.
    It was shocking (sorry, I really tried to avoid the pun, but it really DID shock me).
    Brilliant narration, as always.

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:01 pm

      There’s every chance the electrics will give out, I reckon.
      Getting more rare these days, but “Dark Ali” is still escaping on occasion for stories such as this 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  13. Francesca Smith
    September 3, 2015 at 9:21 pm

    This reminded me of the first electric chair and how long it took for the contraption to do its job. Very dark story!

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:05 pm

      If it’s William Kemmler you’re referring to, YEEKS! and urgh. (I just looked him up on the Google.)

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  14. September 3, 2015 at 10:06 pm

    Oh, I love it, another evil minded vision for Bay-Windows! I’m in good company! Poor guy, getting all lit up like that. Nasty, nasty torture. Excellent!

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:07 pm

      Mine’s almost tame compared to your wonderful story (though yours had a nice bit of humour mixed in!).
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  15. September 4, 2015 at 1:08 am

    Blimey, that gave me quite a shock! Great read.

    Rosey Pinkerton’s blog

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:08 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! It gave their victim quite a shock too 🙂

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  16. Lata Sunil
    September 4, 2015 at 4:24 am

    Ouch! that hurts.. what are they trying to do?

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:09 pm

      They’re trying to torture the name of his contact out of him 🙂

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  17. September 4, 2015 at 5:03 am

    A little shock therapy never hurt anyone…

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:09 pm

      I hear it can be quite therapeutic! Maybe you could get Buster to try it out…

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  18. September 4, 2015 at 6:17 am

    A very dark turn this week! Good dialogue, and you saved the “reveal” for the end–wicked satisfaction for the reader. Well done.

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:10 pm

      I don’t like to give the game away too early! I’m glad you liked my dark little tale.

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  19. September 4, 2015 at 6:42 am

    A poor workman blames his tools. Very dark indeed!

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:12 pm

      Indeed. I’m willing to bet neither is a qualified electrician 🙂

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  20. September 4, 2015 at 8:26 am

    Gahhhhh!! Will he tell?

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  21. September 4, 2015 at 3:06 pm

    Loved your ending, 🙂

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  22. September 4, 2015 at 3:43 pm

    I already mistrust flickering lights because of Weeping Angels…now I have to worry about torture too! But I wonder…who is on what side here? Good or bad?

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    • September 4, 2015 at 8:18 pm

      It’s a good job when I was a kid there weren’t any Weeping Angels – the Daleks scared me but they’re tame in comparison!

      I was thinking mobsters, but Mick Lively had a great theory – these guys could be bad cops in the basement of a police station, trying to get information by any means necessary…

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  23. September 4, 2015 at 4:37 pm

    Ouch!!

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  24. September 4, 2015 at 6:18 pm

    I wish he would just tell them already!

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  25. September 5, 2015 at 3:53 am

    Such a marvelous story for my return!
    I’m baaaaack! Missed your stories.

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    • September 5, 2015 at 4:28 am

      I also missed you!!

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      • September 5, 2015 at 5:02 am

        I missed you too 🙂

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    • September 5, 2015 at 5:02 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I wondered where you were, you’ve been gone ages. It’s good to see you back 🙂

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      • September 5, 2015 at 5:39 am

        you’ve my email. please use it next time. Appreciated.

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  26. September 5, 2015 at 4:14 am

    Oh, creepy! I don’t want to live in this building. The basement was a good place to stage this and another reason why I’m not going near this building.

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  27. September 5, 2015 at 8:05 pm

    I’m officially hoping the power goes out and these guys are caught when someone comes to fix it. 🙂

    janet

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    • September 6, 2015 at 6:02 am

      They’ll be caught red-handed trying to hotwire the fusebox 🙂

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  28. September 6, 2015 at 9:58 pm

    You should look up the Tucker Telephone sometime. It was a form of torture used in an Arkansas prison. Grisly tale, Ali.

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  29. September 8, 2015 at 5:48 pm

    What an incredibly dark story, Ali! I hope the electricity shorts out before they kill their victim.

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  30. September 21, 2015 at 11:27 pm

    Well done!

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