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MFTS – Prince Brian

Here is my story for Barbara Beacham’s Mondays Finish the Story. The photo was also taken by Barbara, and the supplied opening sentence is in bold in my story. On top of that we get roughly 150 words to finish the story!

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Copyright B.W. Beacham

Copyright B.W. Beacham

 

Few knew about the castle hidden inside the island.

Prince Brian, Lord of the Island Isles, Protector of the Weak, preferred it that way. But now he crouched, hidden within the castle, listening intently.

There it was again!

A faint voice, distant but getting closer. His arch-nemesis, Grayvon. She’d found him! He huddled deeper into the corner of his castle, fear creeping through his body. This was it. This was the end.

“Brian!” screamed the voice.

Grayvon was approaching! Brian, brave and strong though he may be, was no match for her. He closed his eyes and waited for the end. Suddenly he was bathed in light as the castle roof was ripped off! He gritted his teeth.

“Brian!” snapped Grayvon. “I’ve been shouting for hours! Your dinner’s ready. And when you’re done, put all these cushions and blankets back where you found them, please.”

“Yes, Mum,” muttered Prince Brian, Lord of the Island Isles, Protector of the Weak, as he shuffled off to wash his hands.

 

  1. October 5, 2015 at 7:26 pm

    Cute. 🙂

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  2. NotAPunkRocker
    October 5, 2015 at 8:13 pm

    Blanket forts are awesome.

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  3. Lyn
    October 5, 2015 at 9:11 pm

    LOL there’s nothing like the wrath of a mother to strike fear into the heart of any prince and Lord of the Island Isles. Loved it 🙂

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:45 am

      Indeed. Even lords and prices must yield to mummy!

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  4. October 5, 2015 at 10:00 pm

    Lovely story, I can imagine the scene.

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  5. October 5, 2015 at 10:00 pm

    Arch-nemesis, that sounds about right. Having fought (and won! haha!) another ‘noitnotbedtimeyet’ war tonight, I’m pretty sure the kiddo currently plots how to overthrow me in her sleep… Cute story 🙂

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:46 am

      Arch-nemesis, but in a a good way :-). And only at bedtime.
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  6. October 5, 2015 at 10:14 pm

    Oh that was so adorable! Eek, the Great Ghastly Grayvon is coming, quick, HIDE!

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:47 am

      I wonder if Mum knows she’s the monster in his tale? 🙂

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  7. October 5, 2015 at 10:51 pm

    So sweet, I can see a youngster hanging on every word, waiting for the end. Oh, that was me, LOL. Good one. 🙂

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:48 am

      A cautionary tale – no youngster is a match for mummy in a mood 🙂

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  8. October 5, 2015 at 11:32 pm

    ah so very well done. We are all princes in our heads every so often until mu says dinner is ready….enjoyed your take…

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:50 am

      Thanks! At dinner time reality comes crashing back.

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  9. October 6, 2015 at 2:17 am

    Makes you wonder who protects the Protector of the Weak…

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:51 am

      His baby sister Emma.

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      • October 6, 2015 at 12:22 pm

        Ugh! I pity him. As someone with way too many baby sisters, I know they are better at attacking than they are protecting…

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      • October 6, 2015 at 2:40 pm

        🙂

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  10. October 6, 2015 at 2:26 am

    Very cute Lord of the Island Isles. 🙂

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  11. October 6, 2015 at 2:35 am

    I loved this one 🙂

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  12. October 6, 2015 at 3:15 am

    Fun 🙂

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:52 am

      It won’t be so fun for Brian when he has to tidy up 🙂

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  13. October 6, 2015 at 4:55 am

    That was a great twist.

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  14. October 6, 2015 at 5:57 am

    Oh, this is so very beautiful. What a beautiful description!
    It reminds me of my own childhood when I used to live in my own world of imagination 🙂
    very well written piece of writing!!!

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    • October 6, 2015 at 11:55 am

      Thank you!
      It also reminded me of playing blanket forts with my little brother 🙂

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  15. October 6, 2015 at 11:13 am

    Ha! Love it 🙂

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  16. October 6, 2015 at 2:04 pm

    An arch-nemesis indeed!!! Well, he’ll fight another day! Great story!!!!!

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    • October 6, 2015 at 2:41 pm

      He’ll have to rebuilt the castle, though I guess that’s half the fun!

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  17. October 6, 2015 at 6:10 pm

    What a lovely story… You entered into the imagination of a kid and expressed his thoughts perfectly. You nailed the prompt. Kudos:)

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    • October 6, 2015 at 7:48 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! I (just about) remember the days of blanket forts and endless summers 🙂

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      • October 6, 2015 at 9:42 pm

        Yes… Very nostalgic:)

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  18. October 6, 2015 at 7:14 pm

    Imagination is such a wonderful thing. Great story. 🙂

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  19. October 6, 2015 at 7:37 pm

    Aw, Mom. Gee whiz … Right now? Gee whiz.

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    • October 6, 2015 at 7:49 pm

      Yes, right now! Honestly, Brian…

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  20. October 6, 2015 at 7:56 pm

    A wonderfully sweet story, Ali! I’m sure Prince Brian’s adventures will resume after he’s eaten his dinner. 🙂

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    • October 6, 2015 at 7:58 pm

      Indeed they will! Nothing can keep Prince Brian from his Princely duties. Until bed time, of course 🙂

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  21. October 6, 2015 at 8:06 pm

    Even though I saw it coming, I enjoyed (and admired) immensely the manner in which you told this charming story! Much fun! I loved this story. Trust mothers to spoil ALL the fun!

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    • October 7, 2015 at 7:18 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Mum’s job is to set the boundaries 🙂

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      • October 7, 2015 at 1:42 pm

        Yes, it’s always Mum’s job! We mums are terrible! My daughter is trying to find my boundaries, and bumping up against it in odd places, but thankfully, not in her imaginative play, of which she does QUITE a lot.

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  22. October 7, 2015 at 2:46 am

    Ah yes! The only thing higher than a black belt is Mum!

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  23. October 7, 2015 at 3:11 am

    This is great! A young child’s imagination! Love it!

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    • October 7, 2015 at 7:22 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I remember those days…

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      • October 7, 2015 at 10:58 am

        Yes, I can too and the hours upon hours we had fun with our imaginations!

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  24. October 7, 2015 at 6:09 am

    Really cute and funny, Ali. Those fortresses are great when you’re a child. Great twist at the end. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • October 7, 2015 at 7:22 am

      Yes, they’re great fun to build (until you have to put everything back!).

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  25. October 7, 2015 at 8:13 pm

    Excellent – and a lot of fun. I love the character of Brian, but he really does need to beef up a bit. 🙂

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    • October 7, 2015 at 8:14 pm

      But, to be fair – who stands a chance against their mum? 🙂

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      • October 7, 2015 at 8:17 pm

        Well, I won’t argue with that! 🙂

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      • October 8, 2015 at 6:14 pm

        🙂

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  26. October 8, 2015 at 2:13 am

    Love this one! My children use to play this type of game….little did I know at the time that I was the big, bad arch-nemesis!

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    • October 8, 2015 at 6:20 pm

      Heh heh 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  27. October 8, 2015 at 9:55 am

    Love it, you made me smile, thank you.

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  28. October 9, 2015 at 3:31 pm

    Sometimes mom’s are the arch-nemesis to a good story . Nicely done.

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    • October 10, 2015 at 5:15 am

      It’s sometimes nice to have an arch-nemesis in a story who isn’t actually evil or nasty 🙂

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  29. October 11, 2015 at 4:25 am

    I sewed my boys a blanket for over the table, your story took me back there. It had a mail slot, escape back door and a window for food.
    Thanks for the memories.

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    • October 11, 2015 at 6:55 am

      That sounds like a really cool blanket! I can imagine you posting sandwiches through the food window 🙂

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  30. October 11, 2015 at 5:01 am

    Fun piece thanks for the giggle at the end!

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