Over Exposure
I had trouble with Friday Fictioneers this week and I had trouble with this story too! Do you ever get weeks when the story just won’t come?
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“So, what do you think?”
“It’s rubbish. It’s set all wrong. I can see right through you. All I see is bones.”
“Perfect. The perfect diagnostic tool.”
“I wanted to see you in your underwear! This is no good.”
“Pig. Is that all you think about? This will help thousands in hospitals everywhere.”
“If you adjust it to see people naked, instead of selling it to a few hundred desperate hospitals you’ll sell it to three billion horny men.”
“I’m warning you…”
“Come on, Suzie…”
“Dr Chapman!”
“Whatever, come on, I wanna see you with no clothes on. Twiddle the settings.”
“Right, you sexist moron, that’s it…”
Two days later…
“… and as you can see, ladies and gentlemen, even without an autopsy my Diagnosticon (patent pending) allows you to see that a scalpel penetrated the kidney area, proving that he accidentally stabbed himself in the back while delivering sexist comments…”
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Hahahaha! He “accidentally stabbed himself in the back…” LOL! Sounds like Suzie made a good choice and has patented it as a Diagnosticon! (To heck with the horny men!) LOL! Great story Ali!
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Yes, she made the moral choice. There a lot of these unlikely accidents going round!
I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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I did! 🙂
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Funny story. And to answer your question: Yes, I get weeks when the story just won’t come. I usually view the picture and let it sit in my mind while I go do something else, then I come back and try to write. It used to be I wouldn’t participate if the story didn’t come, but recently I have tried pushing myself. I’ll try freewriting whatever comes to mind and then whittle it into something. Also, remember that the picture is just a jumping off point.
Hope that helps some.
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Thanks!
I try doing other things too. I usually view the picture when it arrives (I’ll be at work) and then let it simmer in the back of my mind in the hopes I’ll have something when I get home 🙂
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Well, I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to more 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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Sounds like suicide to me. Yep. Definitely suicide.
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That’s what I reckoned!
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Ali, do you mind if I ask you to keep your stories to PG and PG13? My blog is rated as PG. I would really appreciate it. I hope this doesn’t offend you.
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Oops, sorry. I didn’t realise I’d crossed the line (or that it was supposed to be PG-13, or even that this story isn’t). I’ve left the story up but have removed all mention of your blog and the linkup/tag from my story to try to disassociate it but I can’t remove it from the linkup – there is no little dustbin icon. Could you please remove it from there?
Hopefully I’ll try again next week 🙂
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You didn’t need to do that Ali. I just wanted to ask you for future stories. This story is a little riche’ but it doesn’t need to be deleted. I went along with it too in my comment.
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Please Ali, don’t take offense to it. I don’t mean for you to have to delete this wonderful story – I wouldn’t even think of it. I just wanted you to keep it in mind for future stories and I really do hope you continue to participate.
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It’s fine, thanks. For future reference I’m guessing it’s the sexism/implied nudity theme which did it rather than the death, as I’ve read stories this week with very dark themes and quite graphic deaths, so I’ll avoid that in future.
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Thank you Ali. I appreciate your understanding.
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I love it, Ali. He stabbed himself in the back. It could happen–especially when someone makes the wrong remarks. Hilarious. 😀 — Suzanne
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Yes, these unfortunate accidents can happen from time to time…
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LOL! Hilarious! 😀
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Thanks, glad you liked it 🙂
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It always annoys me when I get an X-ray to check for kidney stones, and they want me to pull down my pants on the table. Hey, can’t that machine see through anything? Fat lot of good X-ray technology is…
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Yeah, it’s weird that. Fortunately with the new Diagnosticon (patent pending) this will no longer be an issue!
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You made me laugh! Glad to see the woman winning this one!
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Yep! And she’s in the clear since her machine clearly shows it to be an “accident” 🙂
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Your sense of humor is special. 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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Nice and quirky. ❤
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Thanks 🙂
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LOL. Sometimes it does take a while to get the story just right, but the extra thinking produces excellent results. ;0)
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I’m glad you liked it! Sometimes it does take a little more thinking.
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Thinking is always good. ;0)
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Stabbing himself in the back whilst making sexist comments sounds about right. I’m sure no one will argue with that! A fun story, Ali. 🙂
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It’s an open and shut case 🙂
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Too much of a good thing? Nice job!
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Yep! Thanks!
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I think he just pushed her that bit too far. Ingenious method of death. At least you eventually came up with a fun story – perseverance is evidently the key. 🙂
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Yes, he pushed all the wrong buttons too many times 🙂
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Hehehe.
Serves him right … him and other horny friends.
Glad she stuck to her guns.
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Yeah, he was really asking for it 🙂
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LOL!
and yes…I sometimes can’t get a story either. Not only did you try – which I did not – but you did a very great job at this prompt 😛
Ellespeth
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Oh yeah, there are definitely days, weeks, even a month here and there like that, where I don’t feel really creative. I usually, like you, I suspect, force myself to do some writing and see what happens. I think you’ve come up with a funny flash story here, fwiw, and enjoyable besides.That’s really one of the main purposes of writing, I think, depending on your perspective: allowing your reader to escape his/her life into an imaginary one, if only for a few minutes. So, I say, good work!
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At the moment I’m okay starting stories but I’m having trouble working out an decent ending.
Thanks, I’m glad my story allowed you some escapism 🙂 That’s the reason I read too, and also the reason I always read fiction.
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