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FF – Night of Terror

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Madison Woods.

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Copyright Madison Woods

Copyright Madison Woods

 

“Hurry, they’re coming, string the barbed wire!”

(twang)

“Connect it to the generator and flip the switch!”

(crackle bzzzzzzz)

“I can see them now, freaks, horns, demons! They’ll take everything, nothing is safe, no-one is safe. Inside, quickly! Close the door, lock it. We have seconds, scant seconds! Turn out the light.”

(click)

“Behind the sofa, everyone. They mustn’t see us, they mustn’t see us… they’re here, oh God, they’re here… shhhhh…”

(clomp clomp clomp…)

“TRICK OR TREAT!”

 

  1. April 20, 2016 at 6:04 pm

    Haha … Trick or treat in April? Looks like their April fool’s spirit hasn’t died yet.
    Great narrative with a great twist 🙂

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    • April 20, 2016 at 7:59 pm

      Yeah, I was wishing it was October but I couldn’t sit on my story till then 🙂

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  2. April 20, 2016 at 6:37 pm

    Ha ha, this brought a smile to my face. Who hasn’t hidden from an unwelcome visitor?!

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  3. April 20, 2016 at 6:57 pm

    Nice twist

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  4. April 20, 2016 at 7:03 pm

    A treat to have you tricking me with your twist

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  5. April 20, 2016 at 7:25 pm

    Oh, the cackling laughter ensues! Loved it! So funny!

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  6. April 20, 2016 at 7:27 pm

    Haha!! You’re hilarious!

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  7. IfeomaO
    April 20, 2016 at 7:38 pm

    Can’t believe you got my heart racing for a halloween post lol cute ending.

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    • April 20, 2016 at 8:01 pm

      Yeah, not zombies or demons or anything like that I’m afraid 🙂

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  8. April 20, 2016 at 8:40 pm

    I’m not buying it. Sounds like demon trickery to me. It’s not Halloween. They were right to hide. Bad things are comin’ I tell ya. Bad things! 🙂

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    • April 21, 2016 at 7:36 am

      You could be right. They’d better stay quiet!

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      • April 21, 2016 at 1:19 pm

        Exactly! Plus, if there’s candy, they don’t have to share it. 🙂

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      • April 21, 2016 at 3:23 pm

        🙂

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  9. April 20, 2016 at 8:50 pm

    🙂 very funny and cute.

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  10. April 20, 2016 at 10:01 pm

    Great ending! Electrified wire might be a bit of an extreme reaction to trick-or-treaters but I wouldn’t mind having some to keep door to door salesman away!

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    • April 21, 2016 at 7:37 am

      They got past the wire anyway – very tricky, these trick or treaters!

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  11. April 20, 2016 at 11:10 pm

    Wonderful, Ali. 🙂 Trick or treaters are definitely to be defended against! A very amusing story.

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    • April 21, 2016 at 7:41 am

      Maybe a few machine gun turrets too (I’ve got Fallout 4 on the brain at the moment!) 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  12. Lyn
    April 20, 2016 at 11:30 pm

    “Behind the sofa, everyone.” hiding from trick or treaters. And here’s me expecting Daleks 🙂

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    • April 21, 2016 at 7:42 am

      One of them may be dressed up as a Dalek 🙂

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      • Lyn
        April 21, 2016 at 11:15 am

        LOL that’s a relief 😉

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  13. April 20, 2016 at 11:50 pm

    You are silly. LOL

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  14. April 21, 2016 at 12:33 am

    Ha Ha! Great punchline Ali, really enjoyed this one 🙂

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  15. April 21, 2016 at 12:33 am

    good one. very funny. 🙂

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  16. April 21, 2016 at 12:43 am

    Hahaha…. Loved the story!

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  17. April 21, 2016 at 12:56 am

    I can almost relate to this 🙂 Almost. Not quite.

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  18. April 21, 2016 at 5:36 am

    OMG! Literary adjustment. it takes a big woman to admit her wrong and I am not a big woman but I was WRONG! I was going to respond to your very entertaining story with “shh something wicked this way comes” and I was reading about my hero Ray Bradbury and it turns out it was a quote from MacBeth! However Mr B is still responsible for popularising the phase. We all must have heard that witchy\hag song many times!
    To save confusion and sorry to be so wordy, my comment is ‘that just might take on, and not only at Halloween. Bwa ha ha!”

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    • April 21, 2016 at 7:45 am

      Ah, so it was Shakespeare via Bradbury 🙂
      Yeah, these defences would be useful in all sorts of door-to-door situations!

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      • April 21, 2016 at 9:42 am

        I know! Sometimes I get a tiny bit annoyed about getting constantly interrupted. As my boy would say “ooh your life is sooo hard Mummy” 😀

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      • April 21, 2016 at 9:54 am

        🙂

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  19. April 21, 2016 at 8:25 am

    Very funny. Nice let down at the end.

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  20. April 21, 2016 at 9:09 am

    I knew someone who electrified his door handle! Loved the story

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  21. April 21, 2016 at 9:12 am

    Love it! Fantastic take on the prompt and made me laugh! Well Done ! Heidi 🙂

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    • April 21, 2016 at 9:54 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Shame it’s not October but what can you do? 🙂

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  22. April 21, 2016 at 10:00 am

    Haha! You had me! Totally thought – as you intended – that this was a post-apolcalyptic / Zombie-horror fest. A trick with a lovely treat at the end! Nice, breathless build up – well constructed 🙂

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    • April 21, 2016 at 3:22 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! I thought maybe people would think (it being me) that there would be carnage. Of course, I’m also known for a bit of a twist now and then 🙂

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      • April 21, 2016 at 4:59 pm

        A great twist! Took me totally one way, then another – had me smiling. Great work 🙂

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      • April 22, 2016 at 11:45 am

        Thanks 🙂

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  23. mickwynn2013
    April 21, 2016 at 10:55 am

    Laugh out loud stuff. Nicely done

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    • April 21, 2016 at 3:22 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad it made you laugh!

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  24. April 21, 2016 at 1:03 pm

    It sounds like they’re hiding because, horror of horrors. they ran out of candy, it’s late, and the bigger kids are coming. O_o Hilarious, Ali. I loved the sound effects. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • April 21, 2016 at 3:22 pm

      I’ve always had nightmares of running out of sweets on Halloween… 🙂
      I’m glad you liked the sound effects!

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  25. April 21, 2016 at 1:57 pm

    Ah, there I expected carnage and blood-shed and then the relief. Great fun. Thanks for the laugh.

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    • April 21, 2016 at 3:23 pm

      I would have expected carnage and bloodshed and then… the disappointment 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  26. April 21, 2016 at 5:19 pm

    LOL! The invasion of goblins and ghouls! Haha! Cute story!

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  27. April 22, 2016 at 12:06 am

    ha ha. Nice twist!

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  28. April 22, 2016 at 8:58 am

    This is the first time I’ve read one of your flash fiction stories where I knew exactly where it was going before it got to the twist ending. Ha! Couldn’t fool me this time! 😛

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    • April 22, 2016 at 11:47 am

      Even my twists are becoming predictable!
      Maybe a double twist… they open the door to hand out sweets only to get their throats ripped out because they’re actually demons after all…

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  29. April 22, 2016 at 12:55 pm

    Love the buildup and the anti-climax! A delightful story — brought a wicked grin to my face.

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  30. April 22, 2016 at 1:25 pm

    Dear Ali,

    Those trick or treaters can be terrifying. Fun story that put a smile on my face. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • April 22, 2016 at 2:18 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      It’s the scariest time of year! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
      Ali

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  31. April 22, 2016 at 2:45 pm

    Got my heart a-palpitating, I must admit… then I figured… wait a minute… this is FF, there will be some kind of twist. Sooo not what I was expecting! Fun stuff!

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    • April 22, 2016 at 3:40 pm

      The twist’s the thing (as Shakespeare should have said) 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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      • April 22, 2016 at 3:55 pm

        Indeed!!

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  32. April 22, 2016 at 3:54 pm

    loving the twist, although I was thinking it may have been the in-laws, lol 🙂

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    • April 23, 2016 at 7:43 am

      Ha, I wish I’d thought of that 🙂

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  33. April 23, 2016 at 7:43 pm

    Ha! This is a serious trick or treating scare. Very funny, Ali. For a second, I thought it was the zombies.

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    • April 24, 2016 at 4:37 pm

      It almost was! But zombies are so passé these days 🙂

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      • April 25, 2016 at 4:18 am

        They seem to be…but I liked Fear the Walking Dead. I just the first 6 episodes and liked it.

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      • April 25, 2016 at 7:47 am

        Me too!

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  34. April 23, 2016 at 11:29 pm

    Ha! Great suspense in this story.

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  35. April 24, 2016 at 6:11 am

    Funniest story this week!

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  36. April 24, 2016 at 10:07 pm

    Ha, ha, those little demons. At first I had visions of Night of the Living Dead. 🙂

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  37. April 26, 2016 at 5:33 pm

    Haha! This sounds just like something my husband would do! He’s a real ‘Bah Humbug’ at times. Carol Singers get the same treatment! Love the story!

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    • April 26, 2016 at 7:33 pm

      You can’t take too many precautions against such people 🙂

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  38. April 26, 2016 at 5:55 pm

    Kids in monster costumes and door to door sales people. Same kind of fear! 🙂

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    • April 26, 2016 at 7:37 pm

      Yeah, I’d rather face real zombies. You know where you are with zombies 🙂

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  39. May 22, 2016 at 4:25 pm

    Loved it! I would enjoy a good tangle with a zombie before I would trick-or-treating as well!

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