FF – The Importance of Specificity
Here is my post for this week’s Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. The photo, provided by Douglas M. MacIlroy, is another redo, but this time I was around for the original.
Therefore I have done a sort of a story. It’s a bit puerile. I remember I had no real ideas the first time around either, but my original story, “Punchline”, can be found here.
I’m a bit later this week as yesterday evening I had dinner with Louise (aka afairymind from The Story Teller’s Abode) and her mum (Millie Thom) and Dad. Within minutes we were chatting like old friends, they’re just as lovely in “the real life” as in the blogosphere!
To read this week’s other stories/reruns, click on the blue froggy.

Copyright Douglas M MacIlroy
“Go on!” yelled Fred excitedly. “Grab a bat and whack me! I’m invincible in this helmet, it’s indestructible! No more head trauma for me!”
Glee etched on her face, his little sister did as she was told, swinging the bat as hard as her seven-year-old arms would allow. She’d dreamed of this moment!
THWACK!
Inside the diver’s helmet, Fred’s eyes widened in shock. His mouth gaped open, and with a barely audible “ugh” he slumped to the ground, clutching his splattered groin.
The moral of this story? Say what you mean. Be specific. Because squashed nads hurt. Like, a lot.
Gonna need a bigger helmet!
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Maybe he becomes the inventor of the full-body helmet. He’ll have tons of time to work on it now he can’t have kids 🙂
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haha–oh no! Siblings are always there to teach us important life lessons!
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It’s their job! That and being annoying.
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Oh dear!
Poor boy.
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He has learned an important lesson 😦
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Oh man I saw where this was going and I still laughed so hard. Specifics sometimes are very important, lol.
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One little omission…
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That’s all it takes 😆
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And please, avoid the indefinite article “it.” So many painful misunderstanding are caused by “it.”
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Indeed so 🙂
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Hahaha… Another hilarious post… Made me smile😀
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I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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YIKES! That was … painful to imagine.
This is something of a departure.
Yes, specificity is crucial.
Vividly written. Too vividly written.
🙂
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Painful to experience as well, I should imagine 🙂
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Ha ha! Hilarious. At least for me, not for him of course! 🙂
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Feel free to laugh – he won’t notice!
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Lol! I love this story!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Looks like no nieces and nephews for little sister in the future…
What’s up with FF recycling pictures like they’re a finite resource? Take out the camera… press the button… voila, a brand new story prompt!
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Nope, his dreams of a large brood are sadly over 😦
I think since people are having holidays and whatnot at this time of year this gives busy people a chance to re-post a previous story.
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Oh the dilemma! Should I read this story first and your other one next or the other way around? I think as a “reader” I like to read the original last and see how much the latest was influenced by it. LOL! The first story made me laugh and the second made me wince! 😀
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I still haven’t thought up a punchline 🙂 I just thought, I could have continued this one from the last one but still not reached the end of the joke!
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Guffaw! This was definitely a laugh out loud followed by a cringe one!
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Having this happen to oneself is too horrible to contemplate 🙂
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! Ohhh, that SMARTS! Still laughing here.
She had the bat and he didn’t have the … you know the rest.
Five out of five Lorenas. For the sister, anyway.
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One helmet does not body armour make.
The sister did do good, she deserved her five Lorenas!
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good advice, but too late for fred. 😦
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Sadly way too late 😦
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I love it – but then again I’m a big fan of puerile 😀 You made me laugh out loud. Clever title too.
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I like to post a somewhat childish story now and again! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Oh my gosh, Ali!. You’ve maimed another character. I’m female and it even made me flinch. Humorous, though, in a flinching sort of way. 😀 — Suzanne
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It’s like I can’t help myself 🙂
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I’m cringing for him, poor lad.
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All around the world, bloggers are cringing in sympathy 🙂
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Hahahaha! She’s a bit short to be aiming for the head! LOL! I think it is lovely that you had dinner with Louise and Millie! Great story, Ali!
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Yes, he should really have taken her height into account 🙂
It was a lovely dinner and chat with Louise and her parents!
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Ouch..MOL 😀 Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend 🙂 ❤
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Ouch indeed!
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The first story sounds like me trying to tell a joke–I never get the punchline right.
The second one has me in stitches. He is lucky that these seven-year-old arms probably aren’t strong enough for lasting damage. I wonder why she’s waited for this for a long time though…
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That’s like my mum too – she gets part way through a joke and then has to ask my dad what happens next!
His sister’s very polite – she waited to be asked before whacking him with the bat. What a good girl 🙂
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Hahahahaha…this is the best one yet! The moral of the story is SO important. 😉
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Let’s just hope that Fred has learned something after this! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Oh my… a foregone conclusion as to what was going to happen, but even then you can’t help but LOL. Specificity is definitely not optional 😀
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Sometimes knowing what’s going to happen makes it funnier 🙂 Let’s hope he’s learned his lesson.
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Dear Ali,
Fred should definitely been more specific. Ouch! Yeah, I laughed.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Well, we can only hope he’s learned his lesson 🙂
Ali
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My favorite topic 🙂
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🙂
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Ouch… This was nuts you might say.. you made me cross my legs. How great to meat with real people from the blogosphere…
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I’m sure you were not the only one with the sympathetic leg-crossing!
It was great to meet bloggers in real life. I’ve always wanted to, this was the first time for me.
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Oh dear! I hope his little sister hasn’t caused too much damage! And it was wonderful for us to meet up with you, too. 🙂
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I’m sure he’ll recover. Or not. He didn’t really want kids anyway 🙂
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Funny. I think there must have been a bit of history between these two. Poor brother – splattered and squashed – yikes.
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I think she’s been waiting for this chance for ages 🙂
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LOL…that’s rich!
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🙂
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ha ha. No nephews and neices for this little sister when she grows up 🙂
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Sadly she’s ruined him in that department 🙂
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Be specific…nice moral of the story. 😉 I had a good laugh reading this. 🙂
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I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Yep, with kids, if you aren’t specific in your instructions, you’re in for trouble. And so much for the invincibility conferred by that helmet! 🙂
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Kids will twist things to suit themselves 🙂
Sadly only his head was invincible 😦
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Ugh, that sounds painful. But I love the helmet! Where did you get that?
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I’m guessing it was awfully painful. You’d have to ask Doug M. where he got the helmet, or took the photo 🙂
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