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FF – Dangerous Waters

Here is my almost duplicate post for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. It’s a rerun from September 2013 and the photo was contributed byย Jan Wayne Fields.

Originally I managed to write the word “beast” about 10 times so I’ve had a go at sorting that. I was going to write something about those massive giraffes on the horizon but Elder Scrolls Online won’t play itself. Well, actually it will, but without me ๐Ÿ˜ฆ And I’ve been horribly busy at work so the reruns have come at a good time. A few people who are still aroundย read it last time – feel free to reuse your comment!

To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

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Photo copyright Jan Wayne Fields

 

The little boat tossed on the choppy waters of the bay asย Jedrik demonstrated a simple reef knot to his grandson. The young lad watched entranced as the old manโ€™s gnarled fingers once again worked their magic.

Scant yards away the shark, lost and hungry after a long journey through unknown waters, tracked the large beast. It had broken such creaturesย before. Though hard and tasteless on the outside, it knew that they always contained tasty morsels of flesh within. It had only to break the shell.

The shark altered its course towards the boat and increased speed.

 

  1. July 20, 2016 at 5:49 pm

    I guess Jendrik and his grandson don’t make it…
    Great story!

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  2. July 20, 2016 at 8:24 pm

    Oh.. Poor grandson turned a morsel… But I guess even sharks need to feed.

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    • July 21, 2016 at 7:45 am

      It’s nature doing what nature does.

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  3. July 20, 2016 at 8:28 pm

    Oh dear!
    Now why did you have to make it a granddad and his grandson?
    Why not some persons whom I’ll refrain from naming.

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    • July 21, 2016 at 7:45 am

      Yeah, there’s been a few recently I could have put in that boat ๐Ÿ™‚

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  4. July 20, 2016 at 9:36 pm

    Cue the music! Great “morsel” descriptor there, Ali. Way to go!

    Five out of five Bigger Boats.

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    • July 21, 2016 at 7:46 am

      Thanks! Definitely a “Jaws” moment.

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  5. July 20, 2016 at 9:43 pm

    I do love a good shark tail. “Ready the harpoon mate.”

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  6. July 20, 2016 at 10:14 pm

    Oh no! Great contrast. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  7. July 20, 2016 at 11:00 pm

    The shark has leveled up ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    • July 21, 2016 at 7:47 am

      With an extra bonus ability against small fishing boats ๐Ÿ™‚

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  8. July 21, 2016 at 3:48 am

    I like the way you made me think in order to get the gist of the story. Thank you!

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    • July 21, 2016 at 7:48 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  9. July 21, 2016 at 5:21 am

    Mmmm mmmm! Crunchy seamen in a shell! Wait, that doesn’t sound right….

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  10. July 21, 2016 at 8:21 am

    Something nasty this way comes. And such a sweet scenario up to then.

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    • July 21, 2016 at 11:43 am

      Yes, it was all going quite well until the shark hove into view…

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  11. July 21, 2016 at 11:59 am

    Oooh nasty end to a lovely trip. I’ve the theme from jaws in my head!

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    • July 21, 2016 at 1:00 pm

      I should have recorded myself going “dum dum dum dum dumdidiDUMdumdum dum dum…” and added it to the story ๐Ÿ™‚

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  12. July 21, 2016 at 12:43 pm

    I can almost hear the ‘Jaws’ music playing as it approaches them! Nicely done, Ali. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • July 21, 2016 at 1:01 pm

      Here’s hoping they have a pistol and a pressurised container to chuck in its mouth ๐Ÿ™‚

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  13. July 21, 2016 at 1:22 pm

    I can hear the music to jaws. And I love the image of the giraffes at the horizon. Sharks want to eat, too.

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    • July 21, 2016 at 2:35 pm

      They do look so much like giraffes ๐Ÿ™‚
      It would be a shame to deprive the poor hungry shark of his meal.

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  14. July 21, 2016 at 2:18 pm

    Chilling! One of those edge of your seat stories!

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    • July 21, 2016 at 2:36 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! What will happen next? Is the shark about to bite off more than he can chew…?

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      • July 21, 2016 at 3:23 pm

        I hope not! LOL! I hope he swims on…

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  15. July 21, 2016 at 5:35 pm

    Think Jedrik is going to need a bit more than magic knots! ๐Ÿ˜€

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    • July 22, 2016 at 7:19 am

      Maybe a magic harpoon launcher ๐Ÿ™‚

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  16. July 21, 2016 at 6:29 pm

    I am trying to figure out if the art of knot-tying will do them any good…

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    • July 22, 2016 at 7:20 am

      Maybe if he can fashion some sort of lasso on the end of a really long stick…

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      • July 22, 2016 at 9:53 am

        Yes, and hope they catch a fish that would distract the shark… Isn’t it fun how a reader worries about fictional characters ๐Ÿ™‚ The written word is powerful ๐Ÿ™‚

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      • July 22, 2016 at 12:14 pm

        ๐Ÿ™‚

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  17. July 21, 2016 at 9:40 pm

    i guess the shark took the easy way out. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  18. July 21, 2016 at 9:47 pm

    Dear Ali,

    The tasty treat is in the eyes of eater. Nice morsel of fiction. I’m glad the reruns came at a good time for you.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • July 22, 2016 at 7:24 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      Thanks! Of course work’s always likely to be busy but it’s nice to have a little break ๐Ÿ™‚
      Ali

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  19. July 21, 2016 at 10:03 pm

    If I hadn’t already sworn off trips in small boats, I would after reading this story!

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  20. July 21, 2016 at 11:44 pm

    great shark story. ๐Ÿ˜€

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  21. July 22, 2016 at 4:40 am

    They’re going to need a bigger boat!

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  22. July 22, 2016 at 5:15 am

    Oh, no! I hope they have superpowers up their sleeve. Great suspense. I could see it all.

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    • July 22, 2016 at 7:28 am

      Me too, otherwise they’re in quite a bit of trouble ๐Ÿ™‚
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. July 22, 2016 at 9:13 am

    Very suspenseful! I’m glad you didn’t include the carnage that is to come….

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    • July 22, 2016 at 12:14 pm

      This way readers can imagine a level of carnage they’re comfortable with – or even a happy ending ๐Ÿ™‚

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  24. July 22, 2016 at 9:56 am

    That was tragic. As I wasn’t participating at that time, this was new to me. Clever twist using the shark’s point of view. Good writing, Ali. ๐Ÿ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • July 22, 2016 at 12:15 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Poor fisher folk ๐Ÿ˜ฆ

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  25. mickwynn2013
    July 22, 2016 at 3:18 pm

    Great take and I’m sure boats are just hard shells to sharks. Great POV

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  26. July 22, 2016 at 3:50 pm

    I love the shark’s perspective! Scary and mystical. I am really curious about those giant giraffes, though, and what their story might be. I hope someday, you’ll tell it–but I totally appreciate how other parts of life interfere!

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    • July 23, 2016 at 5:38 am

      Who knows what runs through the minds of such creatures? ๐Ÿ™‚
      I’m curious about the giant giraffe too!

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  27. July 22, 2016 at 8:58 pm

    I loved the altered hunter & hunted ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • July 23, 2016 at 5:39 am

      I’m glad you liked reading both points of view ๐Ÿ™‚

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  28. July 22, 2016 at 10:07 pm

    Haha, great.
    It had broken such creatures before. Though hard and tasteless on the outside, it knew that they always contained tasty morsels of flesh within. – great way to flip the script and tell the story from a sharks pov.

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    • July 23, 2016 at 5:40 am

      Thanks! I think it’s the only story I’ve written with 2 POVs in 100 words.

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      • July 23, 2016 at 2:52 pm

        Seriously? Where’s the multiple supporting characters? The back stories and sub plots? J/k!

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      • July 23, 2016 at 5:02 pm

        Baby steps ๐Ÿ™‚

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  29. July 23, 2016 at 1:00 pm

    Great story, I’m impressed with the 2 POVs in 100 words too! Looks a bit like the Statue of Liberty in the distance near the “giraffes” but I guess that’s no help to the hapless folk in the boat.

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    • July 23, 2016 at 5:02 pm

      The Statue of Liberty will make a wonderful final view at least, I guess!

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  30. July 25, 2016 at 7:42 am

    Oh no. I don’t want to know what’s coming next. Devilish twist.

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    • July 25, 2016 at 10:19 am

      Nothing good! I’m glad you liked it ๐Ÿ™‚

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  31. July 25, 2016 at 5:59 pm

    Aaahhhโ€ฆgood one!

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  32. July 27, 2016 at 2:15 pm

    hehe Shark candy! Hopefully Jedrik and grandson can speed away from Jaws!

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    • July 28, 2016 at 7:08 am

      They’d better fire up that motor…

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  33. July 30, 2016 at 10:42 am

    Ooh…my worst nightmare. Sharks! Hopefully it will be a tough little boat and break the shark’s big teeth when he attempts to bite though it. I didn’t see your first version with all the ‘beasts’ but this story is great – even though it gives me the shivers. ๐Ÿ™‚
    You can always write about the ‘giraffes’ next time you do a re-run. No sharks involved, though. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    • July 30, 2016 at 4:38 pm

      Maybe the giant giraffes would have been less scary ๐Ÿ™‚

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  34. August 4, 2016 at 1:19 pm

    Thank you so much for your visit Draliman. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  35. August 30, 2016 at 10:28 am

    I hope Gramps is packin’ more than just a slip knot and gnarled fingers! Enjoyed!

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    • August 30, 2016 at 7:24 pm

      Yeah, like a big pressurised canister to chuck in its mouth and gun to explode it with!

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