FF – Dangerous Waters
Here is my almost duplicate post for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. It’s a rerun from September 2013 and the photo was contributed by Jan Wayne Fields.
Originally I managed to write the word “beast” about 10 times so I’ve had a go at sorting that. I was going to write something about those massive giraffes on the horizon but Elder Scrolls Online won’t play itself. Well, actually it will, but without me 😦 And I’ve been horribly busy at work so the reruns have come at a good time. A few people who are still around read it last time – feel free to reuse your comment!
To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

Photo copyright Jan Wayne Fields
The little boat tossed on the choppy waters of the bay as Jedrik demonstrated a simple reef knot to his grandson. The young lad watched entranced as the old man’s gnarled fingers once again worked their magic.
Scant yards away the shark, lost and hungry after a long journey through unknown waters, tracked the large beast. It had broken such creatures before. Though hard and tasteless on the outside, it knew that they always contained tasty morsels of flesh within. It had only to break the shell.
The shark altered its course towards the boat and increased speed.
I guess Jendrik and his grandson don’t make it…
Great story!
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I guess not 😦
Thanks!
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Oh.. Poor grandson turned a morsel… But I guess even sharks need to feed.
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It’s nature doing what nature does.
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Oh dear!
Now why did you have to make it a granddad and his grandson?
Why not some persons whom I’ll refrain from naming.
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Yeah, there’s been a few recently I could have put in that boat 🙂
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Cue the music! Great “morsel” descriptor there, Ali. Way to go!
Five out of five Bigger Boats.
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Thanks! Definitely a “Jaws” moment.
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I do love a good shark tail. “Ready the harpoon mate.”
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If only they’d remembered to pack it 🙂
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Oh no! Great contrast. 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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The shark has leveled up 😉
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With an extra bonus ability against small fishing boats 🙂
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I like the way you made me think in order to get the gist of the story. Thank you!
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Mmmm mmmm! Crunchy seamen in a shell! Wait, that doesn’t sound right….
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Urgh 🙂
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Something nasty this way comes. And such a sweet scenario up to then.
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Yes, it was all going quite well until the shark hove into view…
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Oooh nasty end to a lovely trip. I’ve the theme from jaws in my head!
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I should have recorded myself going “dum dum dum dum dumdidiDUMdumdum dum dum…” and added it to the story 🙂
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You should. Try harder next week 😉
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🙂
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I can almost hear the ‘Jaws’ music playing as it approaches them! Nicely done, Ali. 🙂
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Here’s hoping they have a pistol and a pressurised container to chuck in its mouth 🙂
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I can hear the music to jaws. And I love the image of the giraffes at the horizon. Sharks want to eat, too.
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They do look so much like giraffes 🙂
It would be a shame to deprive the poor hungry shark of his meal.
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Chilling! One of those edge of your seat stories!
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I’m glad you liked it! What will happen next? Is the shark about to bite off more than he can chew…?
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I hope not! LOL! I hope he swims on…
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Think Jedrik is going to need a bit more than magic knots! 😀
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Maybe a magic harpoon launcher 🙂
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I am trying to figure out if the art of knot-tying will do them any good…
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Maybe if he can fashion some sort of lasso on the end of a really long stick…
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Yes, and hope they catch a fish that would distract the shark… Isn’t it fun how a reader worries about fictional characters 🙂 The written word is powerful 🙂
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🙂
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i guess the shark took the easy way out. 🙂
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🙂
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Dear Ali,
The tasty treat is in the eyes of eater. Nice morsel of fiction. I’m glad the reruns came at a good time for you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thanks! Of course work’s always likely to be busy but it’s nice to have a little break 🙂
Ali
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If I hadn’t already sworn off trips in small boats, I would after reading this story!
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They’re shark magnets!
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great shark story. 😀
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Thanks 🙂
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They’re going to need a bigger boat!
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Yep. And some shark repellent!
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Oh, no! I hope they have superpowers up their sleeve. Great suspense. I could see it all.
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Me too, otherwise they’re in quite a bit of trouble 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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Very suspenseful! I’m glad you didn’t include the carnage that is to come….
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This way readers can imagine a level of carnage they’re comfortable with – or even a happy ending 🙂
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That was tragic. As I wasn’t participating at that time, this was new to me. Clever twist using the shark’s point of view. Good writing, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Poor fisher folk 😦
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Great take and I’m sure boats are just hard shells to sharks. Great POV
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Thanks, that’s what this shark is hoping!
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I love the shark’s perspective! Scary and mystical. I am really curious about those giant giraffes, though, and what their story might be. I hope someday, you’ll tell it–but I totally appreciate how other parts of life interfere!
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Who knows what runs through the minds of such creatures? 🙂
I’m curious about the giant giraffe too!
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I loved the altered hunter & hunted 🙂
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I’m glad you liked reading both points of view 🙂
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Haha, great.
It had broken such creatures before. Though hard and tasteless on the outside, it knew that they always contained tasty morsels of flesh within. – great way to flip the script and tell the story from a sharks pov.
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Thanks! I think it’s the only story I’ve written with 2 POVs in 100 words.
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Seriously? Where’s the multiple supporting characters? The back stories and sub plots? J/k!
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Baby steps 🙂
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Great story, I’m impressed with the 2 POVs in 100 words too! Looks a bit like the Statue of Liberty in the distance near the “giraffes” but I guess that’s no help to the hapless folk in the boat.
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The Statue of Liberty will make a wonderful final view at least, I guess!
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Oh no. I don’t want to know what’s coming next. Devilish twist.
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Nothing good! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Aaahhh…good one!
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Thanks!
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hehe Shark candy! Hopefully Jedrik and grandson can speed away from Jaws!
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They’d better fire up that motor…
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Ooh…my worst nightmare. Sharks! Hopefully it will be a tough little boat and break the shark’s big teeth when he attempts to bite though it. I didn’t see your first version with all the ‘beasts’ but this story is great – even though it gives me the shivers. 🙂
You can always write about the ‘giraffes’ next time you do a re-run. No sharks involved, though. 🙂
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Maybe the giant giraffes would have been less scary 🙂
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Thank you so much for your visit Draliman. 🙂
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And you for yours 🙂
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I hope Gramps is packin’ more than just a slip knot and gnarled fingers! Enjoyed!
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Yeah, like a big pressurised canister to chuck in its mouth and gun to explode it with!
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