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FF – Everything Changes

Here is my post for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This one is a rerun from March 2014 with a photo supplied by Adam Ickes, requested by Sandra Crook. I was going to write a new story but I quite like the story I wrote last time so I’ll repost it (with a few changes).

To read this week’s other stories, click on the blue froggy.

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Copyright Adam Ickes

 

Taking a deep breath, Shelley gathered her courage and approached the little wooden bridge. The new varnish gleamed – she couldn’t even tell that it had been damaged.

Edging forward she looked into the gulley, a run-off for melting winter snow. A tear stung her eye as she cast her mind back to the week before when everything was all right, everything was normal – the buzzing of the little dirt bike, the laughter of her brother, his excitement as he tore onto the bridge.

A tiny miscalculation, and everything changed.

Forever.

She placed her flowers next to the bridge and walked away.

 

  1. August 10, 2016 at 7:57 pm

    This packs a strong emotional punch. Well done!

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:19 am

      Thanks, I was going straight for the heart here.

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  2. michael1148humphris
    August 10, 2016 at 8:09 pm

    Miscalculation, dreadful, but well told

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  3. August 10, 2016 at 8:23 pm

    Dear Ali

    I can’t say that I remember this one. At any rate I’m glad you shared it again. Tragic and goes straight for the heart. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:25 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      When I tracked it down and read it again, I thought it was worth a re-post, though I changed it a bit to (hopefully) improve the flow.
      I’m glad you liked it.
      Ali

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  4. August 10, 2016 at 8:39 pm

    That’s brilliant! So sad.

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  5. August 10, 2016 at 9:11 pm

    A tiny miscalculation and a life changes. Ain’t that the truth.

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  6. August 10, 2016 at 9:29 pm

    It only takes a moment for life to change irrevocably. So sad but, unfortunately, so true. A very moving story.

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:26 am

      Yes, everything so tragically different in an instant. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  7. August 11, 2016 at 12:21 am

    This tiny story packed a punch. Sad !

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:27 am

      I’m glad you liked it, sad though it is 🙂

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  8. August 11, 2016 at 3:20 am

    Sad, Ali. It seems every day there’s a road accident in the paper. Good writing. —- Suzanne

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:28 am

      Yes, more than one a day pretty much.
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  9. August 11, 2016 at 3:25 am

    Ah, all because of a tiny miscalculation.. Sigh.

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  10. August 11, 2016 at 4:01 am

    Such tiny actions can have such huge effects, indeed. Nicely tragic.

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    • August 11, 2016 at 8:28 am

      The smallest thing can change everything. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  11. August 11, 2016 at 4:49 am

    Honestly, it’s those little misses that seem to have the most damning effect.
    Great job.

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  12. August 11, 2016 at 5:51 am

    Beautifuly written. ❤

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  13. iainthekid
    August 11, 2016 at 8:20 am

    Such a sad tale, well written.

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  14. August 11, 2016 at 9:11 am

    So very sad. Nicely done.

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  15. August 11, 2016 at 1:56 pm

    Heart wrenching.

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  16. August 11, 2016 at 2:12 pm

    Oh how sad. Good story, tugs at the heartstrings.

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  17. August 11, 2016 at 2:30 pm

    Heart touching story!

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  18. August 11, 2016 at 4:18 pm

    You’ve created such emotional depth in this short story. It’s a powerful reminder of the fragility of life!

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    • August 12, 2016 at 9:26 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. Yes, it could be gone in an instant.

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  19. August 11, 2016 at 8:05 pm

    “a tiny miscalculation” Isn’t that what accidents are all about? You portrayed that brilliantly.

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  20. August 12, 2016 at 12:08 am

    To paraphrase a sports cliche…. life is a game of inches.

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    • August 12, 2016 at 9:28 am

      There’s rarely much wiggle room.

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  21. August 12, 2016 at 4:27 pm

    Although this is a departure from your typical story, it is magnificent, Ali. FWIW, I’d put it in a collection of your stories (were I the editor or compiler!). I’m glad you decided to re-run it. Coincidentally, I think this was the first or at least one of the first FF I participated in, so it’s a memorable one for me. I didn’t think I’d be able to do anything with the photograph, but the story just blossomed very quickly; reading it, it seems like yours was perhaps effortlessly ‘in the zone’ in that way, too.

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    • August 13, 2016 at 5:42 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I can remember the very first FF story I did too, back in 2013. I guess that first one is memorable as you take your first plunge into a pool of writers.
      I don’t remember much about when I first wrote it but I have a feeling it looked like a bike accident location pretty quickly!

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  22. August 12, 2016 at 10:48 pm

    sad. hopefully, she’d learn to move on.

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  23. August 13, 2016 at 4:59 am

    Such a powerful and terse tale of tragedy! I was moved. Well-done, my friend!

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    • August 13, 2016 at 5:50 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! A very sad scene.

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      • August 13, 2016 at 5:51 am

        You handled the whole scene perfectly.
        (And it’s so different from your snarky end-times scenarios in some stories, which I enjoy, as well.)

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      • August 14, 2016 at 7:37 am

        Thanks 🙂

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  24. August 13, 2016 at 7:12 am

    A beautifully and sensitively told tale. I liked it.

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    • August 14, 2016 at 7:38 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it. A bit different from my “usual”.

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  25. August 14, 2016 at 1:55 am

    Very sad and not at all where I was expecting it to go.

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    • August 14, 2016 at 7:38 am

      Very sad indeed. I wonder what sort of mood I was in when I wrote it back in 2014? 🙂

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  26. August 14, 2016 at 3:16 pm

    Sad story, Draliman, but very well written 🙂 Pawkisses for a Happy Sunday 🙂 ❤

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  27. August 15, 2016 at 4:29 pm

    So very sad
    So very touching
    So very real in some lives!

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    • August 16, 2016 at 6:44 am

      Yes, all too often one tiny mistake can lead to tragedy.

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  28. August 16, 2016 at 2:01 am

    Sad story.

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  29. August 16, 2016 at 12:47 pm

    This is very good Ali, and shows the range of your talent.

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  30. August 27, 2016 at 11:10 pm

    A painfully tragic story, Ali. Really well done.

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