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FF – Getting Your Kicks

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, the weekly 100 word challenge hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Jean L. Hays.

My story this week was “inspired” by the famous song “(Get Your Kicks on) Route 66” as I have no imagination (it’s written all over the photo!), and also because I was trying desperately not to write such a dark story as previous weeks.

To read the other stories for this week, click on the blue froggy.

Copyright Jean L. Hays

Copyright Jean L. Hays

 

When Freddy ran short of fuel he shouldn’t have stopped at a run-down bar and petrol station in Nowhereville, USA.

When Freddy parked up he shouldn’t have been so careless.

When Freddy saw the bike he’d hit knock down twenty others like dominoes he shouldn’t have gone in and announced it with a big grin on his face.

When Freddy saw twenty-one angry bikers rise from their seats he shouldn’t have said “Ooh, I’m scared, ooh…” in quite such a sarcastic tone of voice.

On a more positive note Freddy got plenty of kicks on Route 66.

 

  1. November 2, 2016 at 8:02 pm

    Humour, but dark humour

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  2. November 2, 2016 at 8:06 pm

    A good chuckle.

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  3. November 2, 2016 at 8:08 pm

    Love the clever humor! Well written 🙂

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  4. November 2, 2016 at 8:15 pm

    LOL Definitely what not to do in this situation! 🙂

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:28 am

      For sure. The silly fellow 🙂

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  5. November 2, 2016 at 8:50 pm

    Ha.. you could say that there are many things you shouldn’t do… hope he made it through the kicks,

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:29 am

      Yeah, at least he didn’t insult anyone’s mother.

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  6. November 2, 2016 at 8:51 pm

    Haha, good laugh. Freddy got what he deserved – not the brightest guy!

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:30 am

      No, he’s probably bumbling his way across America getting into all kinds of interesting scrapes!

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  7. November 2, 2016 at 10:10 pm

    HA! That’s funny, unless you’re Freddy. Then not so much. Perhaps he’ll think about what he says, and how he says it, the next time.

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:30 am

      He should, but I don’t think he has the good sense. A case of mouth engaged before brain 🙂

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  8. November 2, 2016 at 10:43 pm

    Hahahaha…Ali the master comedian has returned! Welcome back! 😁😁

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  9. November 2, 2016 at 10:55 pm

    Oh, poor Freddy…but this made me laugh! I love your use of repetition–definitely builds the humor. Great one–I needed this after your dark ones the past few weeks!

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:31 am

      A slightly dodgy ending for Freddy but definitely not as dark. I’m glad the repetition worked for you!

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  10. November 2, 2016 at 11:23 pm

    Some folks just have no sense of time and place. Poor Freddy is lucky he’s alive. Hope he has good medical coverage!

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    • November 3, 2016 at 8:33 am

      If not he’ll just have to stumble back to Blighty so he can get treated for free 🙂

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  11. Lata Sunil
    November 3, 2016 at 4:01 am

    Hehehe.. Freddy shouldn’t have really done all those things!!

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  12. November 3, 2016 at 5:43 am

    Quick, Freddy! Do the Pee Wee Herman “big shoe” dance on the bar! They’ll like you then!

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  13. November 3, 2016 at 8:51 am

    Hilarious, Ali. Freddy needs some duct tape over his mouth. Good writing. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • November 3, 2016 at 3:47 pm

      Many people could do with duct tape over the mouth! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  14. November 3, 2016 at 11:12 am

    Very funny! And Freddy deserves all he gets.

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    • November 3, 2016 at 3:48 pm

      Yeah, they’ve taught him the meaning of “sorry”!

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  15. November 3, 2016 at 12:44 pm

    Laughing. Good piece of writing.

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  16. November 3, 2016 at 2:28 pm

    Not the brightest light in the tree, our Freddy is, eh?
    Humour doesn’t always work, ‘parrently…

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    • November 3, 2016 at 4:00 pm

      Not in the face of 21 bikers with dented bikes 🙂

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      • November 3, 2016 at 4:06 pm

        That’s for sure! Like the movie “Wild Hogs” with John Travolta!

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      • November 3, 2016 at 4:15 pm

        I’ll have to watch that now 🙂

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      • November 3, 2016 at 4:16 pm

        Fun, no-brainer movie…

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  17. November 3, 2016 at 7:53 pm

    He should have burst into a nice show tune. It works on the family guy. 🙂

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:42 am

      They’d have been so confused he’d have had time to make good his escape!

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  18. November 3, 2016 at 9:11 pm

    Dear Ali,

    When common sense was handed out, Freddy was nowhere around. Nowhere USA…I like that. Very funny. I was thinking it reminded me of Wild Hogs, too. It’s hilarious.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:45 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked it! I’ll definitely have to track this film down now.
      Ali

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  19. November 3, 2016 at 10:44 pm

    Wonderful, made me laugh out loud. Poor freddy, he’s got the kicks but not the brains. Great to see the funny again, and it even rhymes in the end.

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:47 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! He certainly got the kicks. Unfortunately I can’t take credit for the end rhyming – that’s down to the song writer!

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  20. November 4, 2016 at 12:18 am

    Really great! Thanks!

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  21. November 4, 2016 at 1:09 am

    i guess it wasn’t the kind of kicks one would wish on anyone. hope he survived.

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:48 am

      No, not the kicks he anticipated when he started his road trip. He’s fine, though a little wiser!

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  22. November 4, 2016 at 6:15 am

    LOL! Now this is some funny 😛
    Ellespeth

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:49 am

      Back to the comedy, for this week anyway 🙂

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  23. November 4, 2016 at 11:42 am

    Brilliant! I love this. The last line is a knockout – no pun intended! 🙂

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  24. November 4, 2016 at 11:59 am

    Wonderful humor!

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  25. November 4, 2016 at 2:37 pm

    Funny 😀 I also liked the way you used ‘He shouldn’t…’ throughout the story. It makes an interesting read.

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  26. November 4, 2016 at 3:00 pm

    Now that I like! Thanks for the grin.

    My silly story!

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    • November 4, 2016 at 3:57 pm

      You’re welcome, glad you enjoyed it!

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  27. November 4, 2016 at 5:20 pm

    Good writing style.

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    • November 4, 2016 at 8:40 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it.

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  28. November 4, 2016 at 5:40 pm

    brilliant last line 😉

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  29. November 4, 2016 at 6:49 pm

    MOL…at least he got something… on route…MOL 😀 Pawkisses for a Peaceful Day 🙂 ❤

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  30. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover
    November 4, 2016 at 10:34 pm

    Nicely written and you made me laugh. What more could I want?

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    • November 5, 2016 at 5:46 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad I made you laugh 🙂

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  31. November 5, 2016 at 6:16 am

    LOL

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  32. November 5, 2016 at 12:49 pm

    He’s obviously not the brightest spark! At least he got his kicks, even they weren’t quite the type he was hoping for. 🙂 A fun story, Ali.

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    • November 5, 2016 at 5:48 pm

      I get the feeling this isn’t the first time he’s found himself in hot water 🙂

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  33. November 5, 2016 at 1:12 pm

    Yeah this really did it for me. Very funny and told so well I pictured it without having to try

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    • November 5, 2016 at 5:49 pm

      Thanks, I’m really glad you liked it!

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  34. November 5, 2016 at 7:18 pm

    ha!

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  35. michael1148humphris
    November 5, 2016 at 11:48 pm

    He is lucky to be around to tell the story.

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  36. November 6, 2016 at 8:54 am

    Oh that is so funny! As they say – don’t be like Freddy 🙂

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  37. November 6, 2016 at 2:43 pm

    Very neat and clever.

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  38. pennydanger
    November 6, 2016 at 3:37 pm

    I loved it. Too cute.

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  39. November 8, 2016 at 4:56 am

    Ha. What a kick! You had 66 likes, too, until I went and made it 67…Almost didn’t want to do that. But I loved it! 🙂

    On another note, it happened once that I was on a trip with my husband and the dominoes happened to us…only with cars! Yep, and it was our fault. Not good…

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    • November 8, 2016 at 8:01 am

      Ha, I didn’t notice the likes total 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
      Something similar happened to a friend of mine too. He spun his car after missing a tricky junction and bounced nose and tail off all the cars in a pub car park…

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  40. November 8, 2016 at 9:58 pm

    LOL, Freddy is not the sharpest tool in the shed. Loved it.

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  41. November 8, 2016 at 11:44 pm

    It looks like Freddie got what he deserved.

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  42. November 13, 2016 at 9:08 am

    Definitely well deserved kicks on Route 66. Freddie’s such a plonker! The repetition of ‘When Freddie…’ works really well and drives home the fact that Freddie has cotton wool between his ears.

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    • November 13, 2016 at 5:44 pm

      Yeah, he’s a real muppet. I’m glad you liked the repetition 🙂

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  43. June 28, 2017 at 1:07 pm

    really cool photos!

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    • June 28, 2017 at 3:36 pm

      Not mine, I’ve never been to America.

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