FF – Master and Student
Here is my post for Friday Fictioneers, the 100 word writing challenge hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo comes from Sandra Crook.
A bit of a silly story this week but once I got it in my head I couldn’t think of anything else. It looked to me like one of those elaborate things you set up in that game “Mousetrap”.
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Copyright Sandra Crook
“How does it work, Master?”
“Observe. He approaches. The door opens…”
Clunk
“… loosing the ball bearing to roll down the plank, triggering the mechanism…”
Rumble
“… the cog turns…”
Griiiind
“… releasing the flour above…”
Cough cough
“… thus blocking out the light…”
Huh?
“… our target lights a match…”
Scrape
“… igniting the flour particles…”
Whoomp!
“… blowing him to pieces.”
Aaaarggggh!
“Couldn’t we have just blown his brains out with a sawn-off shotgun, Sensei?”
“Finesse, young Padawan. Beauty, elegance. That is why I am the Master, and you, the student. Now, go upstairs and scrape him off the carpet.”
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draliman on life 
Your stories are always fun.
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I’m glad you enjoy them 🙂
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““Finesse, young Padawan. Beauty, elegance.” Love a classy assassin!
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Class is the difference between “assassin” and “murderer”!
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Yep!
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What a mess, I wouldn’t want to do it. 🙂
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Me neither. Guts are so hard to get out. So I’ve heard 🙂
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I’d hate to be the mailman in that neighborhood….
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Makes a change from yappy dogs…
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You may have a point…
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Ha.. finesse still means the same thing… scraping the carpet. Personally I would have used a poison that would make him wane and disappear
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Less messy but not so dramatic either.
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Now that’s an assassin Terry Pratchett would have been proud of inventing
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High praise, thanks!
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Dear Ali,
Ah..Mousetrap! I loved that game. This was just fun to read. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
It was always fun to play. I’m glad you enjoyed my story!
Ali
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You are the Master of finesse! Great story! 🙂
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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LOL this is so you Ali 😀
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Hee! It’s my “thing” 🙂
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Ha, a nice take on the prompt, very amusing 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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What a hoot. It’s like all those villains who feel obliged to make a long, complex explanation of their motives and plan before killing the hero … thereby giving the hero plenty of time to make a leisurely escape. But you have to admire the ART of the thing. There’s no ART in blowing off someone’s head with a shotgun.
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This master assassin knows his stuff. Every job a work of art 🙂
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sensei is a real connoisseur. young padawan, better watch out!
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He’ll never even see it coming if he ever becomes a target…
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Hahahahaha! I loved it! Nice silly story and very entertaining. Way to go, Ali!
Five out of five flatbreads.
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
Mmm, yummy flatbreads…
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You always have something different to offer. Loved this construction.
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My brain works in mysterious ways…
I’m glad you liked it!
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LOL! Cute story!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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The student gets all the dirty work. Amusing story!
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Of course – the Master needs someone around to do all the “scut work” 🙂
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When something gets in a writers head it has to out: And this one came out with a bang.
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I couldn’t imagine another story once I got Mousetrap in my head. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Finesse is having someone else to scrape the victim off the carpet!
I loved Mousetrap as a child so I enjoyed this more grown up take on it, right down to the clunks and coughs
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And he pulls it off so well! I’m glad you enjoyed my story 🙂
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Death by Martha White’s All-Purpose Enriched Bleached Flour! To what fell purpose it was put to use but at least it wasn’t through their baking skills (or lack thereof!)
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I’m sure if they’d wanted to doctor the flour and bake deadly cupcakes they could have pulled it off 🙂
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Where is this monastery?
So I know where not to traipse in the woods.
Randy
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It is everywhere and nowhere. It is where you least expect it…
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“It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition, and it lies between the pit of man’s fears and the summit of his knowledge. This is the dimension of imagination. It is an area which we call the Twilight Zone.”
do-do-do-do
do-do-do-do
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🙂
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Funny fun. I got a chuckle out of this. And now that you made me think of the mousetrap game, I can’t get it out of my head.
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Get yourself one off Amazon. You know you want to… 🙂
I’m glad you liked my story!
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This is delightful – in a horrific sort of way. So very well done.
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Thanks! “Horrifically delightful” 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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What a fun take! Mousetrap, indeed… a tad messier than I remember it…
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Yes, I remember it involving more plastic and less arterial spray 🙂
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A wonderfully fun story, Ali. I get the feeling that it’s the more elaborate the better with this assassin!
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No swift knife to the back for this guy, he’s a true connoisseur! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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oh, that was hilarious! You have done well, Padawan, very well indeed! 🙂
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Thank you, Master 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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I love your stories so much!
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Hee, I’m glad 🙂
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Great story, Ali. This time, I didn’t expect it to turn murderous, but there it did. Good on you for surprising me (I think the padawan and sensei terminolgies fooled me into thinking there would be a peaceful or philosophical ending that was bloodless)!
I also loved the mousetrap game, although I never had it, it was around and in my consciousness. I also loved those wooden planks and squares you could build to send the marbles ’round it. Ah, toys. Who wants to grow up when we have toys, games, and puzzles to enjoy? 🙂
On another note, aren’t you nice doing all that baking for your family. When are you going to open your own bakery? The baking writer? The writing baker? The baking, writing physicist? I’ll join you for an ice cream and/or muffin/pastry anyday! 🙂 [well, if I ever find myself in Blighty, which I hope to do someday]
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Imagine, me writing a murderous story 🙂
I actually never had Mousetrap either, though I did play it at a friend’s house.
I thought my family deserved a Christmas “treat” 🙂 When you come over here I’ll treat you to a muffin. We have a great shop in town which does muffins. It’s called “Starbucks” 🙂 I am actually thinking of getting some big cases so I can try making choc chip muffins.
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Starbucks!? Starbucks!? You traitor! 😉 The best Starbuck will always be the original (BSG)! Although I suspect many dudes will disagree with me there. Anyway, there’s the consolation that you didn’t suggest McDonalds. 🙂 Pleasant week to you, mate!
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Okay, not Starbucks then 🙂
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What a great little bit of wonderful story telling. More please.
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I’m here every Wednesday evening 🙂
I’m glad you liked it!
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LOL
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🙂
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You like your gore, don’t you? Such dark humour (not complaining ;-)).
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I do, I do 🙂
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Very well penned. 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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My cat is named Sensei. He’s half Siamese and not as diabolical. Well, not quite as diabolical.
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All cats are a little bit diabolical 🙂
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Only you could have come up with this one! It’s great fun, and the last two lines are perfect – despite the gooey bit on the carpet at the end. 🙂
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I’m glad you liked it! It was fun to write, with all the “sound effects” 🙂
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