FF – The Greatest Loss
Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo comes courtesy of Danny Bowman.
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Copyright Danny Bowman
Agony. Terror.
These are not words which immediately spring to mind when exposed to such an idyllic scene. Endless, rolling hills, sky tinged red with the sunset, the gentle chirruping of insects…
Mind-chilling horror. Guts aflame, like a burning knife thrust deep in your innards. Brain melting as all you knew is ripped away…
These are not phrases one would associate with such a tranquil setting. Yet for one young man, not yet fourteen, it is something he must now face.
“Dad, something’s wrong! My Facebook’s not loading.”
“There’s no phone coverage out here, son.”
“BY ALL THAT’S HOLY, NOOOooooooo!”
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Ha! Suffer you young whelp. 😀
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Bwahahaha 🙂
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Ouch… and here I was expecting something timid like flesh eating slugs and you leave me with this nightmare…
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I cunningly led you to believe it was a normal run-of-the-mill slaughter before unleashing the full horror.
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I understand. Oh, the horror!
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How will he ever cope?
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Ha, who needs to be a teenager to feel that way? 🙂
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Hee 🙂
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A perfect nightmare!
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I’m shuddering just thinking about it…
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Lol poor lad, how will he survive the horror!
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He probably won’t. Very sad 😦 Or at least if he doesn’t check in every 10 minutes his friends will assume he’s dead and move on…
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Geez that’s harsh ffs, they could at least have waited for 15 lol
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That’s, like, forever in teenage time 🙂
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I can imagine the day when phone and internet will be available even where there aren’t any people–just in case anyone goes there.
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As it should be 😉 I’d be happy to get any sort of phone signal in my house, to be honest.
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Haha. First world problems.
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For sure. Kid hasn’t a clue…
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Excellent tale, Ali. Why am I not surprised to see you come up with this? 😄
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I’m a gadget-boy 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Surely a horror like this can only be fiction! 😀
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I hope so, I really do 😉
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Ha, loved it. A similar reaction when it’s time to post for Friday Fictioneers and there’s no signal 🙂
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Ooh, weird. Two comments from you, both sent to spam…
Yes, you get everything ready, hit the button and it all falls flat. NOOOooooo.
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Thanks for letting me know and finding the comments. Fingers crossed my comments seem to be appearing normally again today. Your piece felt very apt yesterday as all my comments disappeared into thin air! 🙂
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Glad it’s all back to normal!
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Quick please tell me were this place is, for I need to be there.🙂🙂
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Where I live for a start. 2G is not enough to load the Facebook 🙂
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Hahaha… what a nightmare for the lad!
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We should start a crowd-funding campaign for the poor wee soul, maybe 🙂
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Hahaha. What a fun twist! Brilliant. 🙂
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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This one really cracked me up. I know a lot of people who haven’t been 14 for ages who would have the same reaction! Me? Sign me up…
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Yeah, I’ve never seen the allure of constantly social media-ing everything…
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It’s like an attention drug: once you get those “likes” you just want more and more, so you post every thought in your head, hoping for another hit.
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Parts of Asia have detox clinics specifically for web addiction…
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I can see why!
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My epilogue:
“NOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!”
What can I say? I enjoy seeing the lad suffer some more….
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As if having to spend his holidays in the Great Outdoors wasn’t bad enough for the poor wee thing. No sympathy from the Nest, then 🙂
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Never! Let him suffer a 21st century fate worse than death…
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Bwahaha.
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Gee that’s tough! Someone should get in touch with Child Protection. 🙂
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The kid tried himself but he’s got no signal…
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LOL poor little darling. There’s an ad on TV where this young couple stop by a fruit stall in the country. There’s an honesty box to put money in. The girl takes a piece of fruit. The boyfriend holds his phone over the of the box…nothing. He picks it up and says, pointing to the chain, “Well, it’s plugged in.” There’s a chirping sound as he moves it to the side of the box…”Was that a beep?” he asks. Girl shakes her head, “No, I think it was a bird.” Clever boy keeps trying to pay with his phone on the honesty box. Ahhh, the young and their technology 😀
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That pretty much describes things today 🙂
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Hahaha! This was delightfully cunning in its denouement. If I were the father, I would have camped out with the runt for months until his ‘internet’ de-tox is complete. 😛
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Thanks! I think you have the right idea – the kid clearly needs some time away from the web… 🙂
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Haha – excellent take on the prompt. 😀
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!
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Oh the agony! You nailed it. Sometimes the only way to lure my teenager out of his room is to switch off his internet.
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Haha, what a cunning plan! I’m glad you enjoyed my story 🙂
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That would feel like the end of the world to a teenager! LOL! Cute story!
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You’ve gotta feel for the poor kid. Or not 🙂
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Yes, a little. LOL!
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Not only teens…How about someone like me in Florida with a hurricane coming this way? If the power goes out it means no tele, computer, and eventually no phone. Nooooooo. Thanks for the reminder–cute story!!
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Sounds like candles and a board game for you. I hope everything goes okay where you are.
I’m glad you liked my story!
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What is the world coming to? A brilliant take and a tale of our times.
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Gone are the days when you’d hop on your bike and cycle round to your friend’s house to see if they were coming out to play – because nobody even had a landline 😦
I’m glad you liked my story!
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Not the ending I was expecting. The first part lends itself so well to what people in the impact zone of Irma are feeling, but then, you twist it. Great Story!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked the little twist 🙂
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Brilliant. One of my two would be beside himself to not be able to play on-line games… the other? He was born in the wrong time. He barely knows how to turn on a computer!
As for the parent stuck with the sure-to-be moping teen…. good luck to him!
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I expect dad was hoping for some father-son bonding 🙂
At least one of your sons could think up some fun non-digital stuff for your other son to do!
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I’m sure he was.
And there would be a good chance the one would find something to do…and maybe include the other!
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i was anticipating for the usual blood and gore. what a wonderful twist. 🙂
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Thanks! This is infinitely worse for the poor lad than blood and gore 🙂
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Dear Ali,
I won’t tell you about the anxiety attacks I have when the internet goes out. It isn’t pretty. Love your story…so true to life.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
I always think yeeks, no internet, I know, I’ll watch Netflix while I’m waiting. No, wait…
I’m glad you liked it!
Ali
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Loved it! You caught me with that one – I was thinking ALIENS!
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! At least aliens would probably have some sort of internet access to MarsNet or something…
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this is so great concept and different approach with good message…
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Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Ha, ha. Yes, faced with brutal reality. Dad seems to have believed he needed toughening up. Good writing, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne
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And the best way to toughen up the modern child is to remove their internet 🙂
I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Reblogged this on Musings on Life & Experience and commented:
Faced with brutal reality.
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Thank you for the reblog 🙂
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Hilarious. Poor kid, the suffering, no one can really understand what he goes through. 😀
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I certainly never will 🙂
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Love. A kid old enough to know better walked smack into me at the store yesterday because he was completely focused on his phone. Worst/best invention in the history of man 🙂
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Like most inventions, a modicum of common sense is required. I’m glad you liked it!
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Ha, this was great fun. I was steeling myself for some unspoken horror and had a great laugh at your twist.
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For a teenager, this is a worse horror than anything else which could have happened! I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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Brilliant! A true story 🙂
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Thanks, yep 🙂
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Wah, true horror of the millennials indeed. Loved the humour.
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Thanks! It doesn’t bear thinking about, the poor, poor lad 🙂
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Wow! That’s bordering on child abuse, I am guessing Family Services might have to be involved. And how will the boy eat? After all food tastes better with Instagram.
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Yep, I’m sure Social Services are rushing out there right now to bring him back to civilisation 🙂 It’s not even worth eating if you can’t post a photo of it.
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LOL….scary stuff!
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The horror 🙂
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Horror of horrors. Next year the kid’ll be deciding where to go on holiday. 🙂
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Ha, yes 🙂 The poor wee lamb.
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lol I love the way you led up to this revelation. Very good! 🙂
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Thought I’d set the scene for the real horror 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!
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