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FF – After He’s Gone

Here is my little story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields herself!

 

“The house seems so… empty without him.”

Her husband nodded and opened the cupboard.

“Look,” she sobbed. “All the stuff he used to play with. The old clock. He… he… loved that clock.”

He kissed her forehead. “He did. Such happy memories.”

“Gone so fast. I miss him so.”

The doorbell rang. He peeked out the window. “Shit! He’s back! And he’s brought laundry! I told you that college just down the road was too close. Close the curtains!”

“And switch off the lights! Too late. He’s seen us… Hi dear! How are you? Dirty washing, how lovely…”

 

  1. November 22, 2017 at 8:45 pm

    Ha…this gave me a good chuckle. Separations have both benefits and pains.

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:46 am

      True. I’m glad you liked it!

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  2. November 22, 2017 at 8:55 pm

    Oh that was such good fun! Thank you for making me laugh.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:48 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it and that I made you laugh 🙂

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  3. November 22, 2017 at 8:57 pm

    Haha, be careful what you wish for. We love them so much, and yet they can be really annoying sometimes 🙂

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:49 am

      Especially when they don’t seem to be able to work a washing machine 🙂

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  4. November 22, 2017 at 9:09 pm

    Miss them when they’re gone. Avoid them when they come around. 😉

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  5. November 22, 2017 at 9:26 pm

    This made me LOL! 😀 No doubt he will be raiding the fridge as well! 🙂

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:49 am

      You didn’t expect him to do his own shopping, did you? 🙂

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  6. November 22, 2017 at 10:59 pm

    Dear Ali,

    You made me laugh out loud. What a brilliant misdirect. When our youngest left home (the second time) we missed him dreadfully and feared all the while he’d move back in.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:52 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      Ha!
      This was one of those stories where I was stumped all day, then I saw the title “Grief” in my inbox (J Hardy Carroll’s story) and the whole thing instantly wrote itself 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!
      Ali

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  7. November 23, 2017 at 12:01 am

    I hope to one day experience an empty nest some day. Good story!

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:53 am

      That day will come 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. November 23, 2017 at 3:56 am

    It reminds me of the days gone when my son was in college. He brought home his laundry on weekends.

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:53 am

      I was too far away, otherwise I’m sure I would have too!

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  9. November 23, 2017 at 4:46 am

    😂😂😂😂😂😂
    The aspirations and the nightmares of parenting. The paradox of parenthood – missing absence and dreading return. Would we ever be free? Once a parent always a parent, till death do us part!

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    • November 23, 2017 at 7:55 am

      It’s a strange one! Small measures of each is probably the best way.

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  10. November 23, 2017 at 8:58 am

    You turned this beautifully. And comically. 🙂

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    • November 23, 2017 at 12:43 pm

      Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  11. November 23, 2017 at 9:10 am

    Hahahaha.
    This was wonderful…. as always. 🙂🙂

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    • November 23, 2017 at 12:43 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  12. November 23, 2017 at 10:52 am

    Haha! Nice story. I hope there’s enough beer in the fridge…

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    • November 23, 2017 at 12:44 pm

      He’s a student. There’s never enough beer in the fridge… 🙂

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  13. November 23, 2017 at 1:37 pm

    It seems they spoke too soon. They’ll probably see a “lot” more of him. Hilarious, Ali.:D — Suzanne

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  14. November 23, 2017 at 2:31 pm

    Hhaha- loved this take on the prompt 😀

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    • November 28, 2017 at 12:48 pm

      Sorry, I must have missed your comment until now 😦
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  15. November 23, 2017 at 2:42 pm

    Hahaha, this was amazing!

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    • November 28, 2017 at 12:49 pm

      Sorry for the late reply, I appear to have missed a couple of comments recently. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  16. November 23, 2017 at 4:26 pm

    I know so well how this couple feel… This happens even when the uni is many hours’ drive away, too! A fun scene that fits the prompt so well. 😀

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    • November 23, 2017 at 5:12 pm

      As you know I don’t have kids but I can imagine my Mum when I used to come back from Surrey with a bag full of laundry 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  17. Lavanya
    November 23, 2017 at 5:43 pm

    Hahaha. Hilarious. Now I wonder whether you are writing of my ma and pa…. hmmmm

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:01 am

      Haha! Don’t forget to raid the fridge while your mum’s doing your laundry 🙂

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  18. November 23, 2017 at 6:21 pm

    I had boomerang kids too. Great twist, love it!

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:01 am

      It’s a common phenomenon! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  19. November 23, 2017 at 6:28 pm

    Aw, he might be back for 18 more years of wonderful memory making! Lucky parents…

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:02 am

      What more could tired and ageing parents ask for?

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  20. November 23, 2017 at 8:34 pm

    Ali, you are such a rogue. Thanks for making me chuckle. One of my sons actually come home from uni yesterday to do a Duke of Edinburgh presentation for his Gold award and didn’t bring us any laundry. He did try to eat us out of house and home, though. And he was only home an evening and the next morning.

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:03 am

      When you’re a student you’ve gotta take it while you can, as I well remember! No fridge or buffet is safe.
      I’m glad you enjoyed it, and well done on your son for doing DofE!

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  21. November 23, 2017 at 9:38 pm

    What a fun story! So believable. 😉

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:04 am

      Many parents have had this experience I imagine (mine did) 🙂

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      • November 24, 2017 at 8:29 am

        I still use my parents’ washing machine when I visit them. 😊

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      • November 24, 2017 at 8:31 am

        Hee 🙂

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  22. November 23, 2017 at 10:33 pm

    Hilarious. I love your sense of humor.

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  23. November 23, 2017 at 11:23 pm

    Buahahahahahaha!
    I so love this! I just recently re-watched “Failure to Launch” with Matthew McConnaughey and Sarah Jessica Parker where the parents hire her to get him to finally leave the house (he is in his 30’s…)

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    • November 24, 2017 at 8:09 am

      That sounds like a fun film. Even the title is funny! They have it on Amazon Video, maybe I’ll have a look.
      I’m glad you enjoyed my story 🙂

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      • November 24, 2017 at 12:12 pm

        I did enjoy it. As for the film, it is a light rom-com – which are fun to watch now and again.

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      • November 24, 2017 at 12:48 pm

        I must admit to watching the occasional Sandra Bullock 🙂

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      • November 24, 2017 at 3:22 pm

        I knew there was a softie in there…

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      • November 24, 2017 at 4:52 pm

        Shh, don’t tell 😉

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      • November 24, 2017 at 5:11 pm

        Wouldn’t dream of it. 🙄

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      • November 25, 2017 at 10:19 am

        🙂

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  24. Lyn
    November 24, 2017 at 9:46 am

    I think it’s time for Mum and Dad to install a force field or at least an early warning system 😀

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  25. November 24, 2017 at 10:35 am

    Just when you think they’ve flown the nest….! Delightful.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    • November 24, 2017 at 12:47 pm

      There’s just no getting rid of them! I’m glad you liked it.

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  26. November 24, 2017 at 8:27 pm

    Fun and totally believable. My mother-in-law would have been crushed if my husband hadn’t taken his dirty laundry home with him from college 🙂

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  27. November 24, 2017 at 10:50 pm

    Wonderful change from missing him to wishing he’d stay away. Of course, they brought him up well so he will know how to use the washing machine, and he’ll be offering to cook dinner for them as recompense. 😉

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    • November 25, 2017 at 10:20 am

      Yes, that’s definitely what’s going to happen 😉

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  28. November 27, 2017 at 5:17 pm

    Love how you cast this poignant tale of loss and then have us laughing two seconds later. Well done, as always.

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    • November 27, 2017 at 8:24 pm

      A little bit of misdirection 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  29. November 28, 2017 at 10:19 am

    This made me laugh. My sister and I were just talking about this type of scenario the other day – my nephew is off to uni next year and we’re expecting him to be reappearing with his laundry at regular intervals!

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    • November 28, 2017 at 12:50 pm

      Your mum also commented and I got the impression you guys often wandered back unexpectedly 🙂 We all did it!

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  30. November 29, 2017 at 3:41 am

    LOL…good one!

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  31. November 29, 2017 at 9:43 am

    Hahahahaha!This sounds like a real life story.
    Loved it.

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    • November 29, 2017 at 12:29 pm

      It is real life for many parents! I’m glad you liked it.

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  32. December 9, 2017 at 8:16 pm

    Harsh reality 🙂 Priceless 🙂

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    • December 10, 2017 at 6:33 am

      This is real life for many. Including my parents, once upon a time 🙂

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