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Pegman – Lost Souls

Here is my story for What Pegman Saw, which takes us to Buckhorn, Iowa. It is the one year anniversary, though I haven’t been doing it for that long, and this is where it started!

I’m quite late this week with my story. I have a nasty cold – chesty cough, headache, the full shebang, and my brain refused to come up with a story. I finally got there, so here it is πŸ™‚ Hope it reads okay, I had to edit out 60-odd words.

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The bus drew up and the children disembarked. The graveyard seemed to stretch on forever.

β€œThis is the Graveyard of Lost Souls,” explained Miss Tembleton. β€œCan anyone tell me why it’s called that?”

A small boy raised his hand. β€œBecause no-one knows where the souls went, Miss.”

β€œThat’s correct. During the early days of the Soul Wars, we didn’t know how to help those affected. Their bodies died but their life essence lingered.”

The children shuddered. β€œSo where are they, Miss?”

β€œWe don’t know. Floating around the place, maybe? I’m joking, of course. Now, back on the bus.”

She felt a coldness seep into her body, heard the Voice in her mind.

Well done, Tembleton. Continue to bring us vessels and your own children will remain safe.

Shivering, she looked around. Two of the children had strange looks on their faces, their eyes seeming far too old for their eight-year-old bodies.

 

  1. December 19, 2017 at 7:55 am

    Wow, that’s creepy Ali. That would make a great short story or novel. That teacher is in big trouble. O_o — Suzanne

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    • December 19, 2017 at 8:13 am

      She’s stuck between a rock and a hard place and can’t see a way out. I’m glad you liked it πŸ™‚

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  2. December 19, 2017 at 10:04 am

    Dear Ali,

    So sorry about your cold, there’s a lot of that going around. Hope you’re better soon. However, you did a great job despite clogged nasal passages. Creepy story…well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • December 19, 2017 at 11:16 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      Yes, everyone seems to have something at the moment. Still, this is my last day off so being back at work will take my mind off it.
      I’m glad you enjoyed my creepy story!
      Ali

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  3. Lyn
    December 19, 2017 at 10:45 am

    Not a good time of year to come down with a cold – especially in your neck of the woods.Hope you’re soon back to full strength. That was a great story, Ali, and worthy of Pegman and The Twilight Zone. How long before their parents notice all is not as it should be?

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    • December 19, 2017 at 11:18 am

      There are a lot of colds going round at the moment. It always seems to be Christmas with me. At least the weather’s not too bad here. We still haven’t had a day/night below freezing this winter.
      I’m glad you enjoyed the story! It’s probably better for their parents’ health if they never find out there is something badly amiss…

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  4. December 19, 2017 at 11:55 am

    Beautifully creepy. Get well soon.

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  5. December 19, 2017 at 12:09 pm

    Great story. Well done.
    Did you read that “they” have now discovered that Man Flu is real!

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:31 am

      Yeah, I saw it on “Have I Got News For You”. Real research with a tongue-in-cheek conclusion, apparently πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you liked the story!

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  6. December 19, 2017 at 12:11 pm

    Love this concept and the haunting telling of it. Sorry you’re sick but it isn’t doing your storytelling ability any harm. I want the whole book that goes with this snippet!

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:32 am

      I’m glad you enjoyed it! Maybe I could get a “Netflix Original” out of it πŸ™‚

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  7. December 19, 2017 at 12:47 pm

    This definitely has the fever dream quality. Well done.

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:32 am

      I wrote it in a flu-induced trace πŸ™‚ I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. December 19, 2017 at 3:49 pm

    I’m sorry you aren’t feeling well! It hasn’t affected your story-writing; nice and creepy! Sending healing energy! πŸ™‚

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:33 am

      I’ll take all the healing energy I can get right now, especially as I’m now back at work! I’m glad you liked my story πŸ™‚

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  9. December 19, 2017 at 4:11 pm

    Yeouch – soulless soul snatchers. I wonder where the children’s souls went? Not as humorous as your usual fare, Ali, but enjoyable nonetheless.

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:34 am

      I tried to do a humorous Voodoo-related story and got stuck on it which is why I’m a bit later this week. I’m glad you enjoyed it! I was going to do something with the children’s souls but sadly had no words left.

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      • December 20, 2017 at 9:00 am

        You’ll have to do a follow up. I for one would gladly read it.

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      • December 20, 2017 at 2:11 pm

        Thanks, maybe I will!

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  10. December 19, 2017 at 8:03 pm

    Poor Miss Tembleton…what a horrible predicament. You did a good job creeping me out. Hope you make a full recovery soon!

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:39 am

      She is in a terrible situation, I’m glad you liked it! Thanks for your well-wishes πŸ™‚

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  11. December 19, 2017 at 10:37 pm

    Wow! One of your best, Ali!! πŸ™‚ ❀

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:40 am

      Thanks! It’s been a while since I wrote a non-comedy πŸ™‚

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  12. December 20, 2017 at 12:44 am

    This is great. More please.

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    • December 20, 2017 at 8:40 am

      I’m glad you liked it! I’ll have to try to do more creepy ones πŸ™‚

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  13. December 20, 2017 at 4:58 am

    So creepy!

    Hope you feel better soon!

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  14. December 20, 2017 at 2:13 pm

    I thought it was weird when my class was taken on a school field trip to a funeral home. A field trip to a graveyard…. I’m surprised the parental permission slips even got filled out.

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    • December 20, 2017 at 5:04 pm

      Wow, your school picked all the best venues!

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      • December 20, 2017 at 5:14 pm

        We also got a tour of the county jail (On a different trip, not the same one). It was much more fun than the art museum…

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      • December 20, 2017 at 7:35 pm

        I guess that was intended to “scare you straight”.

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  15. December 22, 2017 at 8:23 am

    Hope you feel better and how cool that Pegman is one year 0- woo hoo
    and like your piece – succinct and could feel the chill – and maybe even the tension of losing innocence – the youngens being scared.
    also – recently saw an old version of xmas carol (Dickens) and the piece you wrote here felt like the part when the window opens and it shows the souls wandering

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    • December 22, 2017 at 8:28 am

      Thanks!
      I’m glad you liked the story. I don’t remember that bit in A Christmas Carol, but I’ve never seen older versions of it.

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  16. December 23, 2017 at 3:19 pm

    Ooh, this is is bit creepy. Soul snatchers aren’t nice to know – at least I don’t think they are, but I’ve never met one, personally. Let’s hope Tembledon’s ‘deal’ with them backfires on her before too long. A well written story and engaging story, especially as you’ve had that awful bug that everyone seems to have had recently. It hit Nick and I big time. Hope it all clears up before Christmas. It’s a very persistent thing!

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    • December 23, 2017 at 5:15 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Hopefully her own children won’t suffer for her mistakes, though.
      I think I’m finally on the mend today, fingers crossed πŸ™‚

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  17. December 26, 2017 at 9:33 pm

    Wow, that was a perfect horror story.

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  18. January 3, 2018 at 1:57 pm

    Oh, that’s chilling! Poor children!

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    • January 3, 2018 at 4:02 pm

      Sacrifices for some other-worldly power 😦

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