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FF – A Fun Day Out

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by J Hardy Carroll.

Copyright J Hardy Carroll

 

“I still don’t understand why they call it an ‘amusement park’. I’m not very amused.”

“Oh, stop being such a grump.”

“Half an hour to park and twenty minutes queuing to get in. I treated myself to an ice cream which a small child knocked out of my hand.”

“Oh God.”

“Then we queue forever for the ‘Terrific Twister’ only to find I’m half an inch too short.”

“Ughhhh, ‘forever’. It was ten minutes. Cheer up!”

“Fine. If you love it here so much let’s go on the ‘Rocky Rollercoaster’. I can feel yesterday’s curry churning. You can sit behind me.”

“Let’s go home.”

 

  1. January 17, 2018 at 8:33 pm

    At least they quit before yesterday’s curry came back up.

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  2. January 17, 2018 at 9:36 pm

    I could not stop laughing! 😀 Grumpy extraordinaire!

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  3. January 17, 2018 at 9:51 pm

    A real glass half empty trip to the fair!

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  4. January 17, 2018 at 10:17 pm

    Ha ha – I’ve been to fairs with grumpy chops too! 🙂

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • January 18, 2018 at 7:57 am

      Ha! I hope they didn’t threaten you with yesterday’s curry too 🙂

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  5. Dale
    January 17, 2018 at 11:14 pm

    Definitely the opposite of my guy! Some just cannot be pleased…

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  6. January 18, 2018 at 3:19 am

    i guess he knows his limit. 🙂

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  7. January 18, 2018 at 3:43 am

    Yikers! I would not want to be behind yesterday’s curry. I’d go home too.

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  8. January 18, 2018 at 5:11 am

    Never take a grumpy guy for a joy ride .. and all that curry churning is mmmm. But, frankly, I am not a fan of these amusement parks.

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    • January 18, 2018 at 7:58 am

      I’m not either. Though I’d never make such an awful threat 🙂

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  9. January 18, 2018 at 6:40 am

    I’ve never been much of a fan myself.

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    • January 18, 2018 at 7:59 am

      Me neither. I’d be happy just to watch, if I really had to go.

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  10. January 18, 2018 at 7:13 am

    I am that grumpy guy at such places usually 🙂

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    • January 18, 2018 at 7:59 am

      Me too, though I’ve managed to avoid fairgrounds for many decades now 🙂

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  11. January 18, 2018 at 10:50 am

    He’s determined to enjoy himself, isn’t he? Perhaps he’d be better suited with a trip to a museum.

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:14 pm

      I fear even a museum could be too exciting for him!

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  12. January 18, 2018 at 1:22 pm

    If the one guy wants to oops on people below, they must be teens. Either that or he never grew up. I’d want to sit behind him too, way behind. Good writing, Ail. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:15 pm

      I’m not sure anywhere is far enough behind 🙂

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  13. January 18, 2018 at 2:07 pm

    She should have parked him in front of a booth and let him try throwing darts at balloons. A game of skill might be more his speed. Though genders are unstated here. Why do we assume it’s the man who’s complaining? 😉

    I’ve a question for a British writer/reader: Is the tag-on expression “don’t you know?” still as common as it was in the old novels? Like: “We can’t be late for the luncheon. Lady Snootwich insists on punctuality, don’t you know.”

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    • January 18, 2018 at 3:02 pm

      ‘Don’t you know’ is rarely heard outside Buckingham Palace these days Christine!

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:18 pm

      In my mind it was the man. It always seems to be the men who are the grumpy ones 🙂

      As Keith said, it’s not used. Only if we’re taking the Mickey, then we’d (I anyway) pronounce it “don’t’cha know”, in the kind of posh British accent you hear on certain TV programmes (like Jane Austin dramatisations) which I have also never heard in real life. Sorry 😦

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      • January 19, 2018 at 4:03 am

        Thank you. Working on a book written by a fellow from Rawenstall, and I need to know if that would have been used back in 1960s.

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      • January 19, 2018 at 12:50 pm

        Probably not in general use but maybe in upper class circles. I don’t have any first-hand experience of the 60s, though. I was waaaay too young!

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  14. January 18, 2018 at 2:50 pm

    Haha! The dark side of amusement park 😀

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  15. January 18, 2018 at 3:00 pm

    A wise decision methinks! Excellent

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  16. January 18, 2018 at 3:01 pm

    If he’s suffering the after effects of yesterday’s curry, I’m not surprised he’s grumpy!

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  17. January 18, 2018 at 3:18 pm

    Hahahahaha! Too cute!

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  18. January 18, 2018 at 4:46 pm

    Short? I once went on a roller coaster while pregnant only to see the “don’t ride this if” sign afterward. Come to think of it, no wonder my son is wild.

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:21 pm

      Quite the pre-birth experience for him!

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  19. January 18, 2018 at 4:54 pm

    That’s one way to escape the park! Amusement parks–I think you love ’em or you hate ’em.

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:22 pm

      For sure. I hate ’em 🙂 Too many people, too much noise and too much risk of dying horribly in a freak accident.

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  20. January 18, 2018 at 6:08 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I certainly wouldn’t be amused spending the day with him. She should leave him home next time and find a friend to enjoy it with. Believable dialogue. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 18, 2018 at 6:23 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      He’s bringing the whole day down, for sure. He can stay home and watch the footie next time. I’m glad you liked it!
      Ali

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  21. January 18, 2018 at 6:14 pm

    Good stuff. Glad I stopped by!

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  22. January 18, 2018 at 6:53 pm

    There’s an amusing quality in this character’s unamusing tone and bent. Great work, Ali.

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    • January 19, 2018 at 12:44 pm

      He has a dry sort of humour. I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. January 18, 2018 at 8:48 pm

    Being 4′ 11′ I totally understand the height restrictions. Last time I went to King’s Island in Cincinnati, the only ride I could ride was the carousel, and even there, they wouldn’t let me on a horse because on that ride only, I was a 1/2 inch too tall. It was a total waste of $60+ dollars admission. I spent the day following hubs around and watching HIM enjoy the rides.

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  24. January 19, 2018 at 12:08 am

    Ha! This is super fun. When I read the title, I thought, Oh Goody! A fun day, and was treated to the exact opposite. Kudos.

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    • January 19, 2018 at 12:46 pm

      Never let it be said that I do the expected 🙂

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  25. Lyn
    January 19, 2018 at 1:23 am

    Great dialogue, Ali. Some grumble bum (in more ways than one) will always spoil an outing like that. I haven’t been to an amusement park for at least forty-five years (did I really just admit to that? 😮 )

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    • January 19, 2018 at 12:46 pm

      I haven’t been to one for around 35-40! Not a fan.

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      • January 19, 2018 at 5:16 pm

        And here I pictured you being in your early 30s, but then 35 years would take you back a l-o-n-g way!.

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      • January 20, 2018 at 5:40 pm

        Sadly my 30s are long behind me 😦 My profile pic was taken in my early 40s, when I started my blog 🙂

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  26. January 19, 2018 at 1:28 am

    I second the “great dialogue”! What a grumpity-grump. Just goes to show, be careful who you choose to go to the fair with — having someone with the same attitude makes ALL the difference!

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    • January 19, 2018 at 12:48 pm

      Yes, he really brought the whole day down. She needs to go with a friend next time, he can go down the pub and depress his mates instead. “Uh, this beer has a funny taste, the crisps are stale…”

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      • January 19, 2018 at 1:35 pm

        Sounds like a better plan. I’ve had the same experience myself — going to the fair with a grumpster can bring even *me* down. At the fair! 🙂

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      • January 19, 2018 at 4:03 pm

        It’s just not right!

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  27. January 19, 2018 at 10:37 am

    Very amusing. He has the voice of people I know (to remain nameless). Hehe

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  28. January 19, 2018 at 12:32 pm

    When the ride warns that passengers may get wet, I’m pretty sure they weren’t referring to yesterday’s curry…

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  29. January 19, 2018 at 1:16 pm

    Hahahaha. Lovely story, Draliman.
    I could relate to it .🙂🙂

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    • January 19, 2018 at 4:03 pm

      Oh dear. Were you the fun-lover or the grump? 😉

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      • January 19, 2018 at 4:40 pm

        Not much of a fun- lover when it comes to roller coasters and such.😀😀
        I really liked your story’s title too.

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      • January 19, 2018 at 4:42 pm

        Thanks!
        I’m not a fan of the fair full stop. I’d be my grumpy character 🙂

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  30. January 19, 2018 at 9:28 pm

    Just when you thought the curry was behind you it comes back for yet a visit….

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    • January 20, 2018 at 5:40 pm

      And then visits the person behind you on the roller coaster 🙂

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  31. January 19, 2018 at 10:02 pm

    Love the dialogue! I get the feeling that Mr. Grumpy Pants complains everywhere they go. 😉

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  32. January 20, 2018 at 11:02 am

    When one thing goes wrong…MOL 😀 Pawkisses for a Happy Weekend 🙂 ❤

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  33. January 20, 2018 at 12:51 pm

    Haha good timing on leaving, last thing you or anyone else for that matter is getting sick on a ride

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    • January 21, 2018 at 6:36 am

      Yeah, it’ll go everywhere. Yuck!

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  34. January 20, 2018 at 2:23 pm

    Never take a grumpy guy to an amuse…meant park. 😉

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  35. January 21, 2018 at 12:52 pm

    What a grump! And didn’t he know how to curb his enthusiasm! Sounds like someone I know too well 🙂

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    • January 21, 2018 at 7:38 pm

      From the comments, many people know someone just like him 🙂

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  36. January 21, 2018 at 2:43 pm

    The threat of yesterday’s curry would be a motivator. My guess is that the grump does not get invited out to much. Well told.

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    • January 21, 2018 at 7:39 pm

      He’s certainly not getting invited to the fairground again!

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  37. January 22, 2018 at 9:19 am
  38. January 22, 2018 at 5:03 pm

    Like the dialogue only style – worked really well for this story. Nicely done

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  39. January 23, 2018 at 6:04 pm

    LOL…I’m not much for amusement parks either but I don’t think I have ever threatened to vomit on someone.

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    • January 24, 2018 at 8:10 am

      But have you ever actually vomited on someone? 😉

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  40. January 23, 2018 at 9:23 pm

    My kids when the fair is in town: ‘Yay, great fun, loads of rides, get candyfloss and win a teddy’
    Me when the fair is in town: ‘Noisy, horrible rides that cost a small fortune, kids covered in candyfloss and me paying €3 each so they can win a teddy I could have bought for €2’
    I’m definitely in the grumpy camp!

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    • January 24, 2018 at 8:12 am

      Ha, me too! Fortunately I have avoided fairs for many many years 🙂

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  41. February 8, 2018 at 9:43 am

    Great pic. And what’s great about your story is we’ve all been there … in the one role or the other 🙂

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    • February 8, 2018 at 12:59 pm

      I think one of the other participants reckoned the picture was taken in Guatemala.
      We’ve all stayed somewhere which was… less than expected!

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