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FF – Something Stirred

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. She also provided the photo.

I was completely stumped (hahaha, that’s the only funny you get this week from me) by this photo. So I bashed something out late in the day.

 

Danny looked around him. Everywhere he looked the forest had been transformed into a barren field. He lay down his chainsaw and opened his rucksack. Pulling out his water bottle, he took a long draw and sighed contentedly.

They said we had to preserve the trees. They said they were a valuable habitat. They said they converted ‘cardom diproxide’ to air, or something. He didn’t really listen and didn’t care.

Sometimes he thought, when he cut into a tree, he could hear it scream. So what if it did? It was only a tree.

Deep within the Earth, something stirred.

 

  1. January 31, 2018 at 9:03 pm

    What have we unleashed this time? That’ll teach us (again).

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    • February 1, 2018 at 8:11 am

      I think the whole planet is out to get us this time. I really have to stop ending the world.

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      • February 1, 2018 at 9:59 am

        I’ve ended it a few times too, it never ends well!

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      • February 1, 2018 at 10:10 am

        🙂

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  2. January 31, 2018 at 9:10 pm

    Another story reminding me of the Gaia hypothesis, the interconnectedness of all planetary life.

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    • February 1, 2018 at 8:11 am

      I wouldn’t be surprised if it’s correct, to a certain extent.

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      • February 1, 2018 at 2:36 pm

        Scientifically, it appears to have little merit, but perhaps spiritually…

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  3. January 31, 2018 at 10:03 pm

    beautiful – the something stirred at the end whispered if the lifeline

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  4. January 31, 2018 at 10:04 pm

    and I try not to read the entires until I write my own….
    but glad I found yours cos now I know the prompt is out and I am going to start pondering my approach – but I am not stumped or anything – just want to let the ideas phloem (I mean flow)

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    • February 1, 2018 at 8:14 am

      I get the prompt in my inbox early Wednesday, open the picture and ponder it during the day at work. This one though, I couldn’t get an ending for any story. In the end I just gave up, wrote this within the space of one song I was listening to and emailed it to myself to publish when I got home 🙂

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      • February 4, 2018 at 7:31 pm

        ahhh – I love hearing how people approach the prompt – and sometimes fast is good – and other times even with time you might need to juts make something happen – which it sounds like is what you did .
        I also love to chew on the photo for a day or two – but sometimes don’t need to at all…

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  5. January 31, 2018 at 10:15 pm

    Oh I hope he gets what he deserves! Great story!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • February 1, 2018 at 8:15 am

      I fear we’re all going to get what he deserves. I’m glad you liked it!

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  6. January 31, 2018 at 10:38 pm

    And I hope the earth swallows him up and turns him into compost. 🙂

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  7. February 1, 2018 at 1:58 am

    Don’t like ths sounds of things to come.

    DJ

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  8. February 1, 2018 at 2:14 am

    I wish they would just leave the trees alone. 😦

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  9. Lyn
    February 1, 2018 at 2:42 am

    Uh oh 😯

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  10. February 1, 2018 at 8:04 am

    Good one. Here is mine: https://balconysunrise.wordpress.com/2018/02/01/waiting/

    They echo the same sentiment.

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  11. February 1, 2018 at 8:54 am

    We all know it and yet we do them harm. Poor trees.
    Great story.

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    • February 1, 2018 at 9:03 am

      Very true.
      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  12. February 1, 2018 at 9:24 am

    Just think of all the trees it takes to make all of our toilet paper. Leaves are much more eco-friendly and sustainable… we really need to switch.

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    • February 1, 2018 at 10:09 am

      Yeah, if only they didn’t block the toilet. We need to plant more trees and leave the existing forests alone.

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  13. February 1, 2018 at 9:26 am

    Ah, the Earth is going to bite him on the backside! Love your callous, willfully ignorant character – sadly, so true to life. Well told

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  14. February 1, 2018 at 11:08 am

    Chillingly good.

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  15. February 1, 2018 at 11:42 am

    What you sow is what you reap… She’s coming for us! Cool!

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  16. February 1, 2018 at 1:08 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I think Danny’s about to learn a terrible lesson from Mother Earth. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • February 1, 2018 at 1:18 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I think you’re right. And possibly not just Danny. I’m glad you liked it!
      Ali

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  17. February 1, 2018 at 1:49 pm

    Nice, this one gave me a chill! Now I’m dying to know what ‘something’ is and how it’s going to protect the trees from the slaughter.

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:45 am

      The very essence of the Earth, perhaps. Gaia, some might say…
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  18. February 1, 2018 at 2:14 pm

    I’m sure glad Danny was only cutting down one tree. I shudder to think how your Earth would react to a forest fire. So far nature has been very forgiving, but…

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:46 am

      I think he’s probably cut down a load of trees. Regardless, it’s the last straw and now he’s screwed 🙂

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  19. February 1, 2018 at 3:17 pm

    I like how you highlighted the environmental and political double-speak.

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  20. February 1, 2018 at 4:57 pm

    Well done, writing such a relevant story in response to the prompt. We all need to tread more lightly on the planet – and cherish our trees!

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:48 am

      We do. At least we’re finally growing more in an attempt to be sustainable, but we’re never going to be able to fix all the rain forests.

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  21. February 1, 2018 at 6:58 pm

    Poor Danny, too stoopid to no (Danny’s spelling, not mine!). Great thought-provoking story.

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:48 am

      Thanks! You’ve captured Danny well 🙂

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  22. February 1, 2018 at 11:38 pm

    He should have ended up gasping for breath. Wait. I guess then he still wouldn’t learn his lesson.

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:49 am

      I did toy with ideas like that but I figured a nameless personification of the Earth would be a more fitting end 🙂

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  23. February 2, 2018 at 3:43 am

    Wonderful ending. “Deep within the earth something stirred.” I like that.

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  24. February 2, 2018 at 4:25 am

    nature will heal itself and exact retribution when it can’t handle the abuse anymore.

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    • February 2, 2018 at 8:50 am

      It will. Even if it’s just us struggling to breathe for all the CO2 in the air.

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  25. February 2, 2018 at 9:10 am

    We’ll never learn, and then Mother Nature will have to take things into her own hands.

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  26. February 2, 2018 at 1:04 pm

    The start of a horror story. He needs to get out of there fast!

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  27. February 2, 2018 at 1:32 pm

    Why do humans think they have the right to destroy nature? Great story.

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    • February 2, 2018 at 1:36 pm

      ‘Cos of money 😦
      I’m glad you liked the story!

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  28. February 2, 2018 at 1:48 pm

    And through ignorance and arrogance, great destruction is wrought.

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  29. February 2, 2018 at 4:01 pm

    Uh-oh. Another “Nature gets even” type of tale. Scary.

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  30. February 2, 2018 at 5:10 pm

    I enjoyed your story, the phrase “deep within the earth, something stirred’ made me shiver. There’s balance, but we humans are out of balance how much we take from the earth and I think someday there will be a price to pay. Anyway, just my thought. Good job!! =)

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    • February 2, 2018 at 9:19 pm

      Your thoughts echo my thoughts 😦
      I’m glad you liked my story 🙂

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  31. February 3, 2018 at 1:02 pm

    Omg! something stirred…! He should make a run now. But he is deaf I guess. He couldn’t hear the trees scream and now he can’t hear the earth’s grumble. Nicely done!

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    • February 3, 2018 at 5:20 pm

      Thanks! I don’t know about deaf but he’s definitely screwed 🙂

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  32. February 3, 2018 at 2:37 pm

    You’ve certainly stirred the imagination!

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    • February 3, 2018 at 5:21 pm

      What could it be down there? 🙂

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  33. February 4, 2018 at 8:25 am

    The trees are busy building new shoots and roots to trip him and then strangle him 😀

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  34. February 4, 2018 at 9:34 am

    Purrfect story, Draliman! We can hear that too. It’s really sad 😦 good of Mother Earth to wake us! Extra Pawkisses 🙂 ❤

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  35. February 4, 2018 at 1:31 pm

    Uh, oh. I see where this is going. He’s awakened a sleeping monster with all that hacking. Later, there’ll probably be a monstrous mudslide with no tree roots to stop it. He’s in trou-u-ble now. Did his parents not own a TV where he could watch these horrors taking place in the news and plentiful disaster movies scaring the wits out of him and giving him nightmares like other kids.This deprived childhood has now led to his present horrible situation. Good writing with a cliffhanger, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • February 4, 2018 at 7:10 pm

      Who knew lack of a TV could lead to the pickle he now finds himself him? 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  36. February 4, 2018 at 3:59 pm

    I know that the roots will come up and snare him… pull him six feet under… may he be a good fertilizer…

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  37. February 4, 2018 at 5:00 pm

    Uh-oh … he’s made Mother Nature very angry!

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  38. February 5, 2018 at 9:42 pm

    I think we all need to pay attention to what’s stirring… before it’s too late. Great story!

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  39. February 6, 2018 at 3:14 pm

    Unfortunately there are actually people who think like that! Great ending. 🙂

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