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FF – Misplaced Sympathy

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by JS Brand.

Copyright JS Brand

 

Five scuba gear-clad heads appeared above the glassy ocean.

“There’s the target, lads. We can’t mess this up. Danny ‘Drug Man’ Davis is responsible for hundreds of deaths. Check your explosives.”

“Wait a sec. He’s staying there? What a dump!”

“Yeah, it looks like someone picked up a load of houses and stacked them on top of one another.”

“From high class casinos and Lamborghinis to this pathetic shambles?”

“How the mighty have fallen. Poor bastard.”

“He’s suffered enough. Do we abandon the mission?”

“Nope.”

“Is he even in there?”

“Who cares? That shameful excuse for a hotel’s gotta go.”

 

  1. February 7, 2018 at 9:05 pm

    I’m pretty sure I stayed there … or some place just like it!

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  2. February 7, 2018 at 9:33 pm

    Good one. This is a sorry looking structure, indeed. I’ve been in worse.

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:14 am

      Yoinks, worse? Good job that special forces team wasn’t in the area at the time!

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  3. Dale
    February 7, 2018 at 9:37 pm

    Maybe they’re judging the exterior too quickly…. and Drug Man is responsible for hundreds of deaths – no pity for him! Bang!

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:16 am

      The front of the hotel could be just a… front 🙂
      Yeah, blow him up!

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      • Dale
        February 8, 2018 at 12:15 pm

        Ha ha!!

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  4. February 7, 2018 at 9:44 pm

    “Who cares? Collateral damage. Whatever.”

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:16 am

      These guys aren’t messing about. Hopefully there’s no-one but Drug Man inside.

      Liked by 1 person

  5. February 7, 2018 at 10:11 pm

    Waterfront renovation and cleaning up the drug streets in one go. Bonus.

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  6. February 7, 2018 at 10:15 pm

    I agree with Dale-no mercy!

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  7. February 7, 2018 at 10:51 pm

    What a tough, uncompromising bunch! I enjoyed reading your take on the photo prompt.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:18 am

      They are! I’m glad you like it 🙂

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  8. February 7, 2018 at 10:57 pm

    Haha! There’s always a reason to blow something up 🙂

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  9. February 7, 2018 at 11:09 pm

    from the way it looks, it’s good cover for somebody who wants to keep a low profile. he might as well be there.

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:19 am

      Far better than a high class hotel. But they found him anyway!

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  10. February 8, 2018 at 1:25 am

    Eeek! Has anyone suggested to these guys that it’s rather hypocritical to kill hundreds of people to get a guy who’s responsible for hundreds of deaths? Just saying…

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:19 am

      I’m thinking they pull the fire alarm, shoot Drug Man when he exits, then blow up the hotel. ‘Cos the hotel’s gotta go.

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  11. February 8, 2018 at 4:36 am

    Yoiks! I’d blow up that place, too. Well if I were inclined to buy explosives. Fun story.

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    • February 8, 2018 at 8:20 am

      It looks in desperate need of demolishing 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  12. February 8, 2018 at 11:25 am

    I’ve stayed in worse!

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  13. February 8, 2018 at 1:03 pm

    That place is a mess but might be just a front. There might be a tunnel leading somewhere grander. The danger is they might overdo it and blow up a city block. They don’t sound like the kind of men I’d hire. They sound like the Marx Brothers. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • February 8, 2018 at 4:14 pm

      You could be right about the building. And those chaps do sounds a bit like loose cannons 🙂

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  14. February 8, 2018 at 4:28 pm

    Tsk…such an eyesore!!

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  15. February 8, 2018 at 4:46 pm

    Sometimes bad things are more than good…hope there was no fishie involved though….MOL 😀 Pawkisses for a Happy Ending 😀 ❤

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    • February 8, 2018 at 4:50 pm

      Hopefully the fishies are safe underwater 🙂

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  16. February 8, 2018 at 4:47 pm

    What about the other guests? I don’t like this gang much!

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    • February 8, 2018 at 4:50 pm

      Orders is orders! Hopefully not many people are staying there…

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  17. February 8, 2018 at 4:57 pm

    Ah, but will Danny Davis know they’re coming? He didn’t become a drug lord for nothing – must have some smarts. Nice tale

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    • February 8, 2018 at 6:46 pm

      He’s probably halfway down the escape tunnel by now. I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  18. February 8, 2018 at 4:58 pm

    PS Loved that title

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  19. February 8, 2018 at 5:13 pm

    Fun last line and i loved your description of the hotel 🙂
    A wonderful read, Draliman.

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    • February 8, 2018 at 6:47 pm

      Thanks, that’s just how it looked like to me 🙂
      I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  20. February 8, 2018 at 8:14 pm

    Loved your take on the picture. Stories with great descriptions always pull me in, thank you.

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    • February 9, 2018 at 8:37 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  21. February 8, 2018 at 8:17 pm

    Reminds me of the hotel I was forced to stay at on my game show trip. Does it also charge $400 per night for one of its shitty rooms?

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    • February 9, 2018 at 8:38 am

      At least that. And you can walk around for hours and not find any fried chicken either.

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  22. February 8, 2018 at 10:02 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I’d say the five divers are wasting their pity. I suspect Danny has something up his sleeve. Blow him to Kingdom Come. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • February 9, 2018 at 8:38 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I think he has too. They’ll have to be quick to catch him!
      Ali

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  23. February 9, 2018 at 2:34 am

    Man. I was almost feeling sorry for Danny Drug Man for a minute there.

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    • February 9, 2018 at 8:39 am

      Me too, poor chap, forced to live in such squalor. Wait though… he’s a nasty guy!

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  24. February 9, 2018 at 5:15 am

    Ha! Love the demolish even if he’s not there feeling.

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  25. February 9, 2018 at 12:10 pm

    Sounds like they are going soft! Blow him and it up NOW!

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  26. February 9, 2018 at 4:36 pm

    you really grabbed what many of us felt with seeing this place- the layers and the run down feel.
    hope all goes well with the demo – ha

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    • February 9, 2018 at 4:57 pm

      It does look like a bit of a dive 🙂

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      • February 9, 2018 at 4:58 pm

        yes – and this is also because we are so used to the glam and bling these days –

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  27. February 10, 2018 at 2:30 pm

    Love the voices in and their commitment(?) to their cause.

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  28. February 10, 2018 at 9:45 pm

    I doubt the Drug Man is in there, but at least the hideous structure will be gone! Hope there are no guests in there …

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    • February 11, 2018 at 8:50 am

      I can’t believe there are many people staying in that dump 🙂

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  29. February 11, 2018 at 4:49 pm

    I hope that they only get the drug czar… but somehow I have a feeling that the info is flawed.

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    • February 11, 2018 at 5:36 pm

      Maybe it came from a developer hoping for a free hotel demolishing…

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  30. February 12, 2018 at 5:07 pm

    Let her blow!

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  31. February 13, 2018 at 3:18 pm

    Maybe he’s there only to exit through a tunnel down somewhere. As it is the place needs no mercy at the moment…only an excuse will be sufficient. Loved the glassy ocean. Made me think of the movies like Jaws. 😀

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    • February 13, 2018 at 4:40 pm

      Whenever there’s a “glassy ocean” you can be sure that something lurks underneath! I expect he has gone down a tunnel now, while they were floating there talking. I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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