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FF – Flawed and Forgotten

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Gah Learner.

Is that the moon in the photo? Is it though?

Copyright Gah Learner

 

“Inexhaustible energy” was the claim. “Draw our energy directly from the source. We could do anything, colonise the universe! Ultimate power, unstoppable!”

Decades of work had seen “solar extractors” positioned in orbit around the sun. Pure energy, dragged from the sun’s gravitational pull and transmitted to Earth.

But you can’t mess with Nature. There’s a delicate balance, an order to things.

The sun darkened and died as its nuclear furnace burned the last of its fuel, a billion years before its time.

And Mankind, which months ago had fancied itself gods, drifted into frozen obscurity, just another flawed, forgotten mistake.

 

  1. September 5, 2018 at 7:29 pm

    Excellent cautionary tale!

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    • September 6, 2018 at 6:36 am

      I hope the folks at “Sun-Suck-O-Matic Ltd” are reading this 🙂

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  2. September 5, 2018 at 8:00 pm

    I think we might fade long before we do that… hopefully not taking the solar system with us

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    • September 6, 2018 at 6:37 am

      We’re getting pretty good at destroying everything at once.

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  3. September 5, 2018 at 8:12 pm

    I hope that’s not a prediction!! Nicely done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  4. September 5, 2018 at 9:12 pm

    The same expertise that gave the world the Titanic has reached new heights of unstoppable.
    And it’s started already. There was frost on my windshield this morning. 😉

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    • September 6, 2018 at 6:38 am

      I knew that recent solar probe they launched was up to no good 🙂

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  5. September 5, 2018 at 10:11 pm

    Definitely a case of “Be careful what you wish for!”

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    • September 6, 2018 at 6:38 am

      We should stick to pedal power when all the coal is gone.

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  6. September 6, 2018 at 12:18 am

    i hope it comes after my time. 🙂

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  7. September 6, 2018 at 7:01 am

    Ooo..well done!! 🙂

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  8. September 6, 2018 at 7:44 am

    Oh my goodness, it’s the neighbours fault they just wouldn’t listen – they’ve ruined us all.
    A dystopian vision of the future indeed – although impossible I should think.

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    • September 6, 2018 at 12:14 pm

      Impossible with today’s technology, maybe… nah, you’re right, probably impossible full stop!

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  9. September 6, 2018 at 8:12 am

    We are on our way to that doomsday even without the ‘help’ of that sun.

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  10. September 6, 2018 at 8:47 am

    This sounds like a great idea on a hot summer day! Let’s get to work turning the sun into our own personal thermostat….

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    • September 6, 2018 at 12:15 pm

      Oh, the arguments which would ensue. We already have “differences of opinion” over the office air-con…

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  11. September 6, 2018 at 9:09 am

    Great original take on the prompt! I love how you emphasise that the mistake is not what we did, but why we did it. It is mankind that is the flawed, forgotten mistake.

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    • September 6, 2018 at 12:16 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you got that! I almost put a warning at the top that I was going to be a bit “down” on the whole of humanity today 🙂

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  12. Abhijit Ray
    September 6, 2018 at 9:17 am

    Sun was made to go energy less after mankind started drawing from Sun’s core? What did man do with so much energy? Nice thought provoking story.

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    • September 6, 2018 at 12:16 pm

      I dread to think. Nothing good, I expect. I’m glad you liked it!

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      • Abhijit Ray
        September 6, 2018 at 12:47 pm

        It is a novel technology. May be we shall be there soon. In our insatiable greed to grab, we may deplete sun of its energy.

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      • September 6, 2018 at 1:00 pm

        Not too soon I hope.

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  13. September 6, 2018 at 12:08 pm

    Dear Ali,

    This is quite the chiller. Well done. But…oh dear.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • September 6, 2018 at 12:17 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      Let’s hope no-one with loads of money to burn reads this and gets any ideas 🙂
      Ali

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  14. September 6, 2018 at 12:30 pm

    And then the earth couldn’t store all that drawn energy any more, blew up and became a new sun, making Pluto the paradise it is today. Or so my grandfather Grmlsuvah tells me.
    Needless to say that I love your story. 🙂

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    • September 6, 2018 at 1:00 pm

      Ha, I like that! All the Plutonians coming out of their melting igloos and sitting on sun loungers 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  15. September 6, 2018 at 1:16 pm

    That’s scary. It reminds me of the latest “Time Machine” movie where too much is done to the moon and part of it breaks away and falls away changing mankind forever more. O_o — Suzanne

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    • September 7, 2018 at 6:41 am

      Yeeks. I’ll have to look out for that film!

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  16. September 6, 2018 at 2:56 pm

    Your story describes, to me, our worst fears. The ending reminds us of our lack of significance in the great scheme of things. The last line -‘just another flawed, forgotten mistake’ is very powerful.

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    • September 7, 2018 at 6:42 am

      Thanks, I’m glad all of that came through. I edited it a few times to try to get that across 🙂

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  17. September 6, 2018 at 3:18 pm

    Typical humans. Take, take, take… till there is no more. At their own expense…
    Well done, sir!

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    • September 7, 2018 at 6:42 am

      We do it everywhere, it can only end with the sun. I’m glad you liked it!

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  18. September 6, 2018 at 3:59 pm

    Morbid, nice job!

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  19. September 7, 2018 at 8:59 am

    Well, that’s it then. We’re doomed!

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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    • September 7, 2018 at 11:42 am

      Yep. Might as well pack up, go home and wait for the end 🙂

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  20. September 7, 2018 at 12:18 pm

    I very much enjoyed this, one of my favorites you’ve written. So true … “But you can’t mess with Nature. There’s a delicate balance, an order to things.”

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    • September 7, 2018 at 12:21 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it! I was quite pleased with that line 🙂

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  21. September 7, 2018 at 12:59 pm

    Wouldn’t surprise me, we have a way with nature. A wrong one.

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  22. September 7, 2018 at 5:46 pm

    I’m glad I don’t live in your world. I like mine better. ;0)

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  23. September 7, 2018 at 9:49 pm

    Wow. Beautifully written. So much in so few words.

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    • September 8, 2018 at 5:22 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it! This one took a lot of editing to get it just right 🙂

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  24. September 8, 2018 at 3:34 am

    I hope I’m gone before we become like the dinosaurs! Great piece.

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    • September 8, 2018 at 5:23 am

      Thanks! Me too. This tech sounds quite far away from us for the moment, thank goodness.

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  25. September 8, 2018 at 3:12 pm

    Well there’s a cheery tale, but I have to say it serves Mankind right. I’m sure there’s a rule of thermodynamics that covers this one and should have flagged it up as a catastrophic idea.

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    • September 8, 2018 at 4:31 pm

      I was never any good at thermodynamics – too many differential equations – so I’d’ve just gone ahead and hoped for the best!

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  26. michael1148humphris
    September 8, 2018 at 5:31 pm

    Such a sad ending for planet earth, frozen in time, until a alien race arrives to remove the harness from around the sun.

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    • September 9, 2018 at 4:56 am

      I’m guessing that would be a while.

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  27. September 9, 2018 at 3:35 am

    “drifted into frozen obscurity” …my favorite line!

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    • September 9, 2018 at 4:56 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! I reworded that sentence many times.

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  28. September 9, 2018 at 5:03 am

    Leave it to Mankind to muck up everything. Nicely done.

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  29. September 9, 2018 at 10:18 am

    Be sure selfishness and stupidity will bring horrible consequences. A chilling tale.

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    • September 9, 2018 at 4:59 pm

      We’ll bring it on ourselves…

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  30. September 9, 2018 at 4:35 pm

    A dreadful prospect. I think I prefer your comedic side. 🙂

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    • September 9, 2018 at 5:06 pm

      Dreadful indeed. There has to be dark so we can appreciate the comedy 🙂

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  31. September 10, 2018 at 9:17 am

    The human race has this talent for “improvements” which do anything but improve.
    nicely told

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    • September 10, 2018 at 3:49 pm

      My Dad was moaning about Microsoft’s constant Windows 10 “improvements” only yesterday. I’m glad you liked it!

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  32. September 10, 2018 at 12:20 pm

    A dark tale this week… nice! Frozen, forgotten and flawed. Forgotten by what/whom? (A rhetorical question)

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    • September 10, 2018 at 3:51 pm

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked my little foray into the dark side 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  33. September 15, 2018 at 4:41 pm

    I hope we won’t be seeing this happen, Draliman, and just be a star in the Universe *folds paws*. Another Pawkiss 😀 ❤

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  34. September 18, 2018 at 6:22 pm

    Tough luck. Let’s hope it won’t be tomorrow.

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  35. September 24, 2018 at 5:41 pm

    Chilling. Well done.

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