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FF – Inner Voice

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Dale Rogerson.

Warning: there are a couple of slightly rude words in my story for comic effect.

Copyright Dale Rogerson

 

“Great, isn’t it?”

“Beautiful.” No.

“We’ll be the talk of the neighbourhood!”

“We certainly will be.” … a laughing stock.

“Just wait till everyone comes round later!”

“It’ll be simply marvellous!” I feel a headache coming on.

“So, are you happy?”

“Deliriously, my love.” Shoot me now.

“What do you think, Benny?”

“It’s crap, Dad. Why can’t we have a proper Christmas tree instead of bits of sticky tape… shit, did I say that out loud? I meant, it’s amazing, father!”

“Thank you, Benny. A little more practice on your inner voice, please.”

“Of course, Father.” Piss off.

“Much better.”

 

  1. January 16, 2019 at 8:07 pm

    Ha ha ha! Love this! And there are definitely those who would benefit from using their inner voice…

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    • January 16, 2019 at 8:18 pm

      Ha, you’re not wrong 🙂
      It’s so cool that your repair job looks like a Christmas tree!

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  2. January 16, 2019 at 8:26 pm

    Hilarious!! I love the inner voice, sounds like mine from time to time.

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:49 pm

      It’s a good job no-one can hear what we’re really thinking sometimes 🙂

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  3. January 16, 2019 at 8:26 pm

    This tree reminds me of my Dad – the grandkids are always confused and disappointed with his minimal Christmas decorations!

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:50 pm

      Ha, mine are also minimal but mainly because by the time I’ve gone up to the attic to get the tree and decorations I can’t be bothered to spend any more time on it!

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  4. January 16, 2019 at 8:46 pm

    hehehe More people need to get in touch with their inner voice! 😀

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  5. January 16, 2019 at 9:40 pm

    Ha! Ha! Love this. Made me laugh!

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:51 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  6. January 16, 2019 at 11:59 pm

    LOVE this. I was thinking about writing about a Christmas tree but didn’t and am so glad. You did a smashing job of it. L-o-n-g ago when I was in college and came home for Christmas, my parents “presented” a tissue paper tree ~ blue and green tissue paper poked into wire, purchased from a friend. I should have applauded their artsie strangeness but didn’t.

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:51 pm

      I hear tissue paper Christmas trees are all the rage 🙂 I’m glad you liked my story!

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  7. January 17, 2019 at 3:05 am

    Just like “A Christmas Story.” Minus the dogs, the Chinese restaurant, the lights and the snow 😀

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:52 pm

      It’s a shame this prompt didn’t come out last month 🙂

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  8. January 17, 2019 at 5:47 am

    Love it! Very unexpected!

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:52 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  9. January 17, 2019 at 8:51 am

    That was a simply wonderful story! What kind of shit is this?

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:52 pm

      Inner voice, Squirrel, inner voice!

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  10. January 17, 2019 at 10:48 am

    Great story – thanks for surprising me with your original take on the photo prompt! 🙂

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • January 17, 2019 at 12:53 pm

      I’m glad you liked it! The moment I saw the shape of the tape I got fixated on a Christmas tree and ended up having to shoe-horn a story around it 🙂

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  11. January 17, 2019 at 2:16 pm

    I need to get in touch with my inner voice too it seems. Hilarious!

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    • January 17, 2019 at 7:41 pm

      As long as it stays “inner” so you don’t get into trouble like Benny 🙂

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  12. January 17, 2019 at 2:25 pm

    Too funny. The inner voice is a hoot.

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  13. January 17, 2019 at 4:14 pm

    That inner voice… my parents managed to silence mine quite effectively.

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    • January 17, 2019 at 7:46 pm

      Benny’s parents aren’t being nearly as successful.

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  14. January 17, 2019 at 8:17 pm

    sounds like a great dad who encourage his kids to speak their minds. 🙂

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  15. January 18, 2019 at 1:10 am

    Inner voices must be getting very tired in that family! 🙂

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  16. January 18, 2019 at 5:00 am

    Haha! Loved how this ended!

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    • January 18, 2019 at 12:44 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! A decent ending is always the hardest part. And thinking of an idea, that’s the hardest part too. And… 🙂

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  17. January 18, 2019 at 12:32 pm

    This is brilliant! Well done.

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  18. January 18, 2019 at 3:47 pm

    Great fun. I expect the father does a lot of unappreciated DIY

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    • January 18, 2019 at 4:22 pm

      So much goes on behind the scenes that families never see 🙂

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  19. January 18, 2019 at 7:22 pm

    Loved their inner thoughts. Great humorous take on the prompt!

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  20. January 18, 2019 at 11:00 pm

    Very clever. A fun read.

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  21. January 19, 2019 at 1:25 am

    Dear Ali,

    It’s probably a good thing that Father isn’t a mind reader. Cleverly done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • January 19, 2019 at 5:49 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      Yes, he’d have a rude awakening if he was! I’m glad you liked it.
      Ali

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  22. Frankie Perussault
    January 19, 2019 at 8:39 pm

    Great take, I like the way you used the prompt … inner voice: shit Frankie you’re being bloody hypocritical, stop this immediately 🙂 (from threefoldtwenty dotcom)

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    • January 20, 2019 at 7:09 am

      Hey, you wrote that out loud 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. January 19, 2019 at 11:45 pm

    Oh yes – those inner voices that are sometimes so difficult to restrain. Love your story.

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    • January 20, 2019 at 7:11 am

      Sometimes you’ve just gotta let it out 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  24. January 20, 2019 at 2:36 am

    This one made me laugh. Loved it!

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    • January 20, 2019 at 7:11 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  25. Lyn
    January 20, 2019 at 6:21 am

    Good one Ali. I needed a laugh this afternoon. No cricket on TV until tonight 😉

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    • January 20, 2019 at 7:12 am

      Oh no, a cricket-less day! I’m glad you liked my story 🙂

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  26. January 20, 2019 at 4:38 pm

    I didn’t even notice the Christmas tree pattern (oops)! At least Dad was trying to be festive. Or maybe Benny would’ve preferred him to be a Scrooge? 😉

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  27. January 20, 2019 at 9:14 pm

    Ha.. me thinks they will be the laughingstock… at least buy green duct tape if you intend to do a tree.

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  28. January 22, 2019 at 11:58 am

    such an imaginative take on the prompt. wonderfully done story. I like the calm and patient Father. 🙂

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    • January 22, 2019 at 12:55 pm

      He’s a rock! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  29. January 22, 2019 at 4:38 pm

    LOL…well I didn’t see that!
    Great eye, Ali. And a funny one.

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    • January 22, 2019 at 7:43 pm

      It’s the first thing I saw and I ended up fixating on it to the exclusion of all else 🙂

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  30. January 22, 2019 at 6:19 pm

    If only everyone around me worked more on their inner voice… 😀 Great story

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  31. January 23, 2019 at 9:44 pm

    MOL…great story😂😹Pawkiss🐾😙😻

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  32. January 26, 2019 at 7:40 pm

    Still practicing on my inner voice 😉

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