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FF – Safety First!

Here is my contribution to Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by C.E. Ayr.

 

The creature looked across the swimming pool to the people beyond. It could almost taste their flesh, sweet, succulent. A family enjoying an evening picnic – little did they know they would soon fill its belly! It crept forward slowly, carefully, then sped towards them, tripped, fell in the swimming pool and drowned…

What?

Wait a minute!

This won’t do. Where’s the grisly ending?

Who puts an unlit, unguarded swimming pool in the middle of a caravan park?

Let’s try again…

The creature, high from its success at swimming class, looked across the large, yet perfectly safe, puddle to the people beyond…

 

  1. January 8, 2020 at 8:38 pm

    It’s like Star Wars. Why are there all those open pits with no guardrails in spaceships and space stations? Who are the engineers in this galaxy far, far away? They could build hyperdrives, but floors were… What? …beneath them? Apparently, not.

    I like your rewind and restart. There’s always a way to get to the gruesome ending, even if it’s swimming lessons.

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:37 am

      There was a Twitter account once pretending to be conversations with the Death Star architect, it was quite funny.
      The creature will go to any lengths!

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      • January 10, 2020 at 12:50 am

        Really? I would have enjoyed that.

        Except walking around the pool.

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  2. January 8, 2020 at 8:52 pm

    Not fair – you can’t make it that easy for the creature surely!? 🙂

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:40 am

      He’ll probably get impaled on some inappropriately-placed railings at some point… 🙂

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  3. January 8, 2020 at 10:52 pm

    Poor creature!

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:46 am

      All the hoops he has to jump through just for a tasty meal…

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  4. January 9, 2020 at 12:28 am

    Now the creature has a qualification, I’m sure it’ll fit in as a model camper

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:46 am

      Came for a meal, pitched a tent, never left.

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  5. January 9, 2020 at 2:57 am

    Creature from the safe puddle lagoon?

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:47 am

      Doesn’t really have that “horror film” ring to it, does it?!

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  6. January 9, 2020 at 3:25 am

    Will the creature know enough to watch out for those hot dog skewers? He may find himself getting grilled. Bwahaha…

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    • January 9, 2020 at 7:49 am

      Mmm, grilled creature. Tastes like chicken!

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  7. January 9, 2020 at 8:56 am

    Poor creature needs to eat in style!

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    • January 9, 2020 at 1:07 pm

      If only it could get to the “food” without any nasty accidents 🙂

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  8. January 9, 2020 at 10:20 am

    Your starting my FF year with a giggle.

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    • January 9, 2020 at 10:21 am

      I can’t beiee I did that, – “You’re” :0

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      • January 9, 2020 at 1:08 pm

        I’m glad you liked it! And don’t you just wish sometimes that you could edit your own comments… 🙂

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  9. January 9, 2020 at 3:09 pm

    hehehehe! Mermaid-approved! 😀

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    • January 11, 2020 at 7:56 am

      🙂
      I bet you wouldn’t have had any issues with the pool!

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  10. January 9, 2020 at 3:11 pm

    Coincidentally, Buster’s had similar adventures like this just trying to get a meal out of a trash (rubbish) can….

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    • January 11, 2020 at 7:57 am

      Maybe “the creature” is Buster’s less agreeable cousin…

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  11. January 9, 2020 at 4:25 pm

    Even puddles can prove problematic! Nice one.

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    • January 11, 2020 at 7:58 am

      He’s one of those vicious killing monstrosities who doesn’t like getting his paws wet!

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  12. January 9, 2020 at 5:17 pm

    Subverting the genre – like it! Great take on the prompt, Ali

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    • January 11, 2020 at 7:58 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it!

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  13. January 9, 2020 at 5:20 pm

    would take 2 be a charm? we’d have to wait and see. 🙂

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    • January 11, 2020 at 7:59 am

      I’m sure some other random thing will get in his way 🙂

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  14. GHLearner
    January 9, 2020 at 9:41 pm

    That was fun, thanks for the good laugh. I want to know what that creature is, though.

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    • January 11, 2020 at 8:00 am

      I don’t. It’s way too scary! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  15. January 10, 2020 at 12:56 am

    Either way, he’s still coming for them. Still grisly! Love it…

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    • January 11, 2020 at 8:01 am

      But will he ever make it? I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  16. January 10, 2020 at 12:29 pm

    Try, try and try again. I still want the creature to drown.

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    • January 11, 2020 at 8:03 am

      I’m sure something unfortunate will happen to him no matter how many goes he gets.

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  17. January 10, 2020 at 3:29 pm

    I like the way you played with this. In my story there’s a different ending..

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    • January 11, 2020 at 8:04 am

      Yes, no blissful unawareness for your campers.

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  18. January 10, 2020 at 10:32 pm

    I had an out loud laugh on this one, Ali. Bravo!

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  19. January 11, 2020 at 5:10 am

    I guffawed, Ali! Love it!

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  20. January 11, 2020 at 2:02 pm

    Wow! Swimming classes for monsters. What will they think of next? Hilarious, Ali. 😀 — Suzanne

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  21. January 11, 2020 at 2:12 pm

    I suspect that the family’s teenage daughter will destroy the creature with a roll of her eyes and some heavy sarcasm

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    • January 11, 2020 at 3:42 pm

      Ha! She’ll probably confuse it by accusing it of getting in the way of her mobile signal.

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  22. January 12, 2020 at 2:29 pm

    LOL…wonderful!

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  23. January 12, 2020 at 9:15 pm

    Maybe the swimming classes also made the creature benevolent… and they will all end up sharing a vegan barbecue

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  24. January 13, 2020 at 2:34 pm

    Love the take one/ take two stuff – very funny. Perhaps the creature could go to agility classes before taking over the world ?

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    • January 16, 2020 at 12:29 pm

      He could certainly do with some training! I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  25. Mike
    January 13, 2020 at 9:10 pm

    No no, pleased let them live🙂

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  26. January 14, 2020 at 4:13 pm

    Swimming lessons should be obligatory at any monster elementary school. So many lives could be unsaved

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    • January 16, 2020 at 12:31 pm

      How are they supposed to eat people, trashing around in the water like that? Dreadful.

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  27. January 14, 2020 at 6:16 pm

    Haha… health and safety above all else! 😀

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    • January 16, 2020 at 12:31 pm

      We wouldn’t want anything bad to happen to the creature while he’s on his way to lunch… 🙂

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