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FF – Endings

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by C.E. Ayr.

Copyright C.E. Ayr

 

“That’s weird.”

“What?”

“We burned everything. All our relationship stuff. Except that picture. That picture didn’t burn.”

“Okay…”

“It’s Paris. Where we met.”

“I know.”

“Why didn’t it burn? Maybe it’s a sign.”

“A sign.”

“That we should stay together. Maybe someone’s trying to tell us something.”

“I don’t think so.”

“Maybe we could… try again?”

“No. We’re past all that. It’s over.”

“So… so. Right. Who gets the Paris picture? Do you want it?”

“No. You take it. You were always more into… Paris… than I was.”

 

  1. April 22, 2020 at 7:27 pm

    No hope there! Good dialogue, though.

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:33 am

      Yep, he needs to accept it’s over. I’m glad you like the dialogue!

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  2. April 22, 2020 at 7:48 pm

    Burning everything seems rather extreme. 😀 Sounds like it’s over!

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:34 am

      I’m thinking she’s having trouble getting the point across 🙂

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  3. April 22, 2020 at 8:37 pm

    A fool to try and cling onto this last bit of hope in their relationship!

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:35 am

      Especially after they’ve burned everything – time to face facts!

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  4. April 22, 2020 at 9:01 pm

    Typical man!!!!

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  5. April 22, 2020 at 9:10 pm

    I think it’s sad when one half of a couple wants to keep trying to make it work whilst the other doesn’t want to know. Very believable story.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:37 am

      It is sad. Been there, done that! I’m glad you found it believable 🙂

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  6. April 22, 2020 at 9:31 pm

    I liked the fruitless speculation about it being a sign

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:40 am

      Thanks, he’s clutching at fruitless straws at this point.

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  7. April 23, 2020 at 12:09 am

    Those lopsided aspects of failed relationships always hurt, no matter which side of the equation you’re on. I believe it is a sign, it’s just one is ignoring it.

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:42 am

      Yes, no-one comes out a winner when things just fade away. I’m glad you liked it!

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  8. April 23, 2020 at 1:21 am

    That’s a great last line. There’s always one person in any relationship who’s more into “Paris” than the other.

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:45 am

      Thanks, I worked a bit to get that line to come out how I heard her in my head. It is often the case that one is more into it than the other.

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  9. April 23, 2020 at 2:11 am

    i can’t blame him for trying. she looks like she’s worth it. 🙂

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  10. Lyn
    April 23, 2020 at 2:36 am

    Great post based on the photo, Ali, but an unusual one for you. 🙂

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  11. April 23, 2020 at 5:50 am

    Cute! Haha. Why do I find it refreshing to read about love and heartbreak from you?

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:50 am

      Because it hardly ever happens 🙂
      I’m glad you liked it!

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  12. April 23, 2020 at 7:16 am

    That was quite poignant really. Still that little glimmer of hope… but so easily dashed.

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    • April 23, 2020 at 7:53 am

      Yes, I feel he was clutching at straws at the end.

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  13. April 23, 2020 at 8:40 am

    “into Paris”… my filthy mind took that one to a smutty place.
    Good smooth writing.

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  14. April 23, 2020 at 11:42 am

    Taking a page from Weird Al’s playbook, to properly end a relationship you should burn down everything that reminds you of it. Better get a bunch of matches and head to Paris…

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    • April 24, 2020 at 6:52 am

      On my way! No, I’ll have to wait until the lockdown ends. Darn.

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  15. April 23, 2020 at 11:50 am

    Dear Ali,

    This a bit of a switch for you. No aliens. No world invasions. Just a simple and rather touching conversation and a relationship that’s sadly at its end. Nicely done, sir.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • April 24, 2020 at 6:53 am

      Dear Rochelle,
      I’m glad you liked my attempt at something different. I can’t do a comedy apocalypse every week 🙂
      Ali

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  16. April 23, 2020 at 6:15 pm

    Pah!
    Any woman who isn’t into Paris isn’t worth hanging onto!
    Good one, Ali

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    • April 24, 2020 at 6:53 am

      True dat 🙂 I’m glad you liked it!

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  17. April 23, 2020 at 7:00 pm

    The italics for Paris made me think it is the name of a person…
    Out of the box for you, Ali! And ya done good… I really enjoyed this.

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    • April 24, 2020 at 6:55 am

      Or maybe “this relationship”.
      Yes, thought I’d mix it up a bit for a change. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  18. April 23, 2020 at 7:34 pm

    Sort of throwing the trash out with the trash. There was a good try to repair the relationship, but the final lined sealed its end.

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  19. April 23, 2020 at 11:12 pm

    It’s good to call it quits when the time comes. Kind of sad though ~ one wanting to try again, the other not. Well done.

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    • April 24, 2020 at 6:57 am

      It’s always saddest when it’s not mutual. I’m glad you liked it!

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  20. April 24, 2020 at 7:37 am

    Oh those signs we hang on to. Truth is we see the signs we want to see, and it seems his partner knew that. Good dialogue!

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:11 am

      The human mind is great at seeing only what it wants to see, or expects to see. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  21. April 24, 2020 at 9:25 am

    This relationship is finished and he needs to understand, not see signs where there are none. Nice vignette of a conversation in the ashes of a relationship.

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:12 am

      He’s grasping at anything, fortunately she’s not listening. I glad you liked it!

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  22. April 24, 2020 at 5:49 pm

    It’s over, but there are still tears to be shed, I fear. I’m glad you stepped out of your usual genre, Ali. This was a satisfying read.

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:13 am

      Tears on both sides, I’m sure. I’m glad you liked it!

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  23. April 24, 2020 at 6:25 pm

    I don’t know Draliman, but it seems that there’s a Paris involved, isn’t it? 😸Clean Pawkisses for a Happy Furriday. Stay Safe Healthy and Yourselfie🙏🐾😽💞

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:15 am

      There’s always a Paris involved, Binky! You all stay safe too 🙂

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  24. April 25, 2020 at 9:12 am

    A sad mis-match between the couple’s hopes, I feel for both of them.

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:18 am

      Me too, it’s never easy when the final decision has to be made.

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  25. April 25, 2020 at 7:21 pm

    It’s sad for the Paris person, but hopefully they can pick up the brokenness and move forward. Partings are always traumatic. Nicely written, Ali. Take care!

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:19 am

      I’m sure they’ll both recover in time. I’m glad you liked it, and you take care too 🙂

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  26. April 25, 2020 at 8:01 pm

    How they ever managed a romance, however short-lived, will probably be a question in their minds for a long time. Great dialogue here 🙂

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:20 am

      It does sound that she was never as into the whole thing as him. I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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  27. April 25, 2020 at 8:45 pm

    Good job of showing the distance between them. He just doesn’t get it, she’s already gone in her mind.

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:20 am

      That’s a great way of putting it, I’m glad you liked it!

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  28. April 25, 2020 at 8:49 pm

    Great dialogue – totally believable.

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    • April 26, 2020 at 4:21 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it! Many of us have been there on one side or the other, I’m sure.

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  29. April 26, 2020 at 7:00 am

    Many times, my doctor has said, autobiographical writings can truly help cleanse the soul. (I agree, there were no aliens, but there is something of the supernatural going on here?) Enjoyed!

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    • April 26, 2020 at 3:52 pm

      Sadly nothing supernatural, just a regular breakup 😦

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  30. April 26, 2020 at 7:07 am

    I had to return write once more- I knew I had heard of a “Paris”… He was a Marvel superhero- member of the Pantheon. Like all superheros, he had a superpower. Give up this girl… you will never compete. PARIS had the superpower of being a great listener. (I’m still way to caveman-like to want this superpower.)

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    • April 26, 2020 at 3:53 pm

      “Great listener” – no wonder he’s not had his own film. I couldn’t even find any mention of him on Google, just pages of Marvel at Disneyland Paris. The forgotten superhero…
      Possibly if I switch to a foreign site like google.com it’ll have less emphasis on Paris the city and I’ll have more luck.

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  31. April 27, 2020 at 11:32 am

    One day he will probably thank her for letting him go. A sad but funny story, nice one.

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    • April 28, 2020 at 4:44 am

      I expect he will, in time. I’m glad you liked it!

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  32. April 29, 2020 at 1:06 pm

    I think that picture needs a new date with the fireplace, furnace, etc. That special friendship is deader than a doornail. That is good dialogue, Ali. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • April 29, 2020 at 7:13 pm

      Yes, RIP both picture and relationship.

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  33. April 29, 2020 at 6:33 pm

    They need an outsider to suggest cutring the picture in half. If one of them freaks out and pleads for the picture to stay intact, then… never mind.
    A sad tale.

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    • April 29, 2020 at 7:14 pm

      Sounds like some sort of out-of-the-box couples counselling.

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