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FF – Pushed Too Far

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo was contributed by Na’ama Yehuda.

Copyright Na’ama Yehuda

He’d found the bauble in a bin. Not the meal he’d hoped for, but still… looked nice over his sleeping bag.

The sharp crack of an air rifle woke him. Around him lay his shattered bauble. A lad – no more than twenty – stood, laughing.

“Alright, grandpa!”

The lad lifted the air rifle and shot again, again. The snow spurted to the left, the right.

“Run, useless tramp!”

He fumbled in his bag, retrieved a souvenir from a long forgotten war, and blew the lad’s brains out. They looked kinda pretty in the snow.

No respect. Sometimes he wished he’d died in the Gulf.

  1. July 21, 2021 at 2:21 pm

    Fair enough!

    Liked by 1 person

  2. July 21, 2021 at 2:30 pm

    Don’t mess with Grandpa! Sad that there are so many homeless veterans.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. July 21, 2021 at 3:01 pm

    Oh, coo. Savage retribution, Ali. You set up the situation admirably. The line, “and blew the lad’s brains out. They looked kinda pretty in the snow” brings a depth of moral indignation that is palpable. Well done!

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    • July 22, 2021 at 12:07 pm

      Thanks, I’m glad you liked it 🙂 He’s feeling pretty empty by now I think.

      Liked by 1 person

  4. July 21, 2021 at 3:38 pm

    Wow! ‘Grandpa’, took care of that problem vehemently! Good story, well done!

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  5. July 21, 2021 at 4:18 pm

    Can you blame him? He’s right. There is no respect from these young hooligans!

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  6. July 21, 2021 at 6:00 pm

    Oh my, I was NOT expecting that, but oh my, am I pleased he fought back. I feel bad for the homeless, starving veterans at the cruel hands of so many of our youth today. The governments they served under should feel shame for treating them so shabbily.

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    • July 22, 2021 at 12:12 pm

      That’s one youth who won’t be bothering anyone else, anyway.

      Liked by 2 people

  7. July 21, 2021 at 6:41 pm

    A long forgotten war from the early 90’s. Now I feel OLD!

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  8. July 21, 2021 at 11:16 pm

    Dear Ali,

    I didn’t see that ending coming. Always best to keep your souvenirs loaded.



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    • July 22, 2021 at 12:16 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      In his situation, he’s learned to be prepared for anything.

      Liked by 1 person

  9. Ain Starlingsson
    July 21, 2021 at 11:26 pm

    Powerfully done…feels very real, and one finds oneself supporting the ex serviceman…

    Liked by 1 person

    • July 22, 2021 at 12:18 pm

      Yes, obviously he shouldn’t have shot the lad but I’m glad he did.
      BTW I enjoyed your story, quite philosophical dialogue 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  10. Lyn
    July 22, 2021 at 8:46 am

    I think a better punishment would have been to shoot off the lad’s “baubles.” Lasting memory there. 😁 😲

    Liked by 1 person

  11. July 22, 2021 at 1:26 pm

    That was a very matter of fact dispatching. He doesn’t take any prisoners, does he?

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    • July 23, 2021 at 10:49 am

      He doesn’t. I think he’s rather lost touch with his emotions.


  12. July 23, 2021 at 11:32 am

    Wow! What a twist in that tale!
    And the portrayal of the cocky youngster and the vet with PTSD are so real too.
    Yes, I do think the vet’s reaction is real.


    • July 24, 2021 at 4:50 am

      Thanks, I tried to imagine what it would be like to have done so much and then return home emotionally damaged and discarded by the world he’d fought to protect.


  13. July 23, 2021 at 1:06 pm

    This is why I hate guns – everything gets blown out of proportion.


    • July 24, 2021 at 4:52 am

      It does. And everything can become very final.


  14. July 23, 2021 at 1:13 pm

    Love the dark humour in this. No messing with grandpa, as it should be.


  15. July 23, 2021 at 3:50 pm

    i guess the lad didn’t know what was coming. 🙂


  16. July 23, 2021 at 8:02 pm

    A sad testament to how we treat our vets in some places. Have to say the lad deserves it…


    • July 24, 2021 at 4:53 am

      He did. Maybe not anything so permanent but I’m on the vet’s side still.

      Liked by 1 person

  17. July 25, 2021 at 5:10 pm

    Powerful story! So sad.


  18. January 2, 2023 at 11:55 pm

    Wow! Didnt see that ending coming! Hugs! Xo

    Liked by 1 person

    • January 3, 2023 at 7:28 am

      Me neither – what a shocker 😮 🙂


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