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His Favourite Place

It’s Friday Fictioneers, hosted as always by the talented Rochelle. This week’s picture comes courtesy of Danny Bowman – my (roughly) 100 word story follows.

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Copyright Danny Bowman

Andriy mopped the sweat from his brow as he looked out over the stunning landscape.

What rugged beauty, he thought. Much like my native Ukraine.

He had emigrated to this land years ago, quickly finding work in a job he was eminently suited to. It was these moments of solitude however, surrounded by such incredible views, that he lived for.

Bracing himself, he dragged his burden to the edge of the cliff and pushed it over. For a moment he wondered what the poor sod had done to deserve such a brutal end, but then shrugged and settled down to enjoy the view.

  1. March 5, 2014 at 7:54 pm

    Woah…. is that how they deal with dead bodies in the Ukraine? (Don’t answer that in light of recent world events)

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    • March 5, 2014 at 7:56 pm

      The setting was actually a fluke. I remembered a TV series with similarly rugged scenery and Googled it to find out where it was filmed.

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  2. NotAPunkRocker
    March 5, 2014 at 8:08 pm

    Your stories always make me laugh or smile. Which means there is probably something really wrong with me…

    Seriously, good job on this one.

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    • March 5, 2014 at 8:30 pm

      Well, I’m the one writing them so we can be “a bit wrong” together πŸ™‚
      I’m glad you enjoy them.

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  3. March 5, 2014 at 8:25 pm

    That snuck up on me. Nice!

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    • March 5, 2014 at 8:31 pm

      Good stuff – my goal was to paint an idyllic scene (as much as possible given the word limit) and then – introduce “the dark”.

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      • March 5, 2014 at 8:54 pm

        You’re good at that.. πŸ™‚

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      • March 6, 2014 at 8:11 am

        πŸ™‚

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  4. March 5, 2014 at 8:42 pm

    You could write scripts for Criminal Minds. Give the world the chance to enjoy your deliciously twisted vision πŸ™‚

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:10 am

      Funnily enough I’m currently working my way through Criminal Minds on my internet TV thingummy. Hikers could find remains at the bottom of the cliff… Hotch and his team spring into action!

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  5. March 5, 2014 at 8:50 pm

    Okay, that’s two hit men stories so far this week. You guys are on a roll–or at least your victims are πŸ˜‰

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:10 am

      Yes, I just read Adam’s.
      Seemed like a good place to dump a body…

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  6. March 5, 2014 at 10:34 pm

    Loved your story. You say a lot in a few words.

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:11 am

      Thanks! It takes a lot of thought sometimes to fit it all in and still make sense.

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  7. March 5, 2014 at 10:59 pm

    fabulous insight into a psychopathic mind!

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:12 am

      I’ve been watching too much Criminal Minds recently πŸ™‚

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  8. March 5, 2014 at 11:24 pm

    Another darkly disturbing treasure πŸ˜‰

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:12 am

      Thanks! Quite a few “darkly disturbing” stories this week.

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  9. Lyn
    March 5, 2014 at 11:48 pm

    Hmmm, did he do the killing, or did he simply dump the body. Either way, you’ve done a good job in few words.

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:14 am

      Thanks. I not sure myself – killer or clean-up man? Either way, it doesn’t seem to bother him!

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      • Lyn
        March 6, 2014 at 8:16 am

        Aha! One of those stories that seem to write themselves and don’t tell us all the details πŸ˜€

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      • March 6, 2014 at 8:20 am

        With these things I often just get a basic idea, in this case a juxtaposition of the rugged beauty of the landscape and a dark deed. I’m often not sure myself of all the other details!

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  10. March 6, 2014 at 1:54 am

    Very nice – I love the dark twists you so expertly weave into your stories, my friend! Well done!
    ~A<3

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:14 am

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I like to introduce a dark twist here and there!

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  11. March 6, 2014 at 3:26 am

    Your guy and my guy should get together for lunch some time. I think they’d get along.

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:15 am

      Birds of a feather! The stories they could tell.

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  12. March 6, 2014 at 6:03 am

    Yes, I agree with Marilyn, you could write for Criminal Minds. No rainbows and butterflies for your group of fans.

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:16 am

      Just darkness and death here. No butterflies unless they’re carnivorous πŸ™‚

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  13. March 6, 2014 at 7:58 am

    It’s a job, someone has to do it… Nice one. πŸ™‚

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    • March 6, 2014 at 8:17 am

      That’s true. There’s always someone who needs disappearing πŸ™‚

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  14. March 6, 2014 at 8:20 am

    Disturbing – I love it! πŸ˜‰

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    • March 6, 2014 at 10:25 am

      I don’t think the guy has a conscience at all.

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  15. March 6, 2014 at 12:14 pm

    I’d keep him busy, I should post him my list. I love the matter of fact delivery of the deed and his casual approach to life.

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    • March 6, 2014 at 12:50 pm

      It certainly doesn’t look like he’s going to lose any sleep over it. Evidently he’s very good at compartmentalising.

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  16. March 6, 2014 at 2:34 pm

    Well done and well-twisted. I thought that it was great he found somewhere like his home country and then…. Maybe they could use him back home right now. 😦

    janet

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    • March 6, 2014 at 4:24 pm

      Yes, I think it would be better if he went away. Of course, there would always be someone else to fill his shoes.

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  17. March 6, 2014 at 3:48 pm

    A hitman with a love of home and beauty–for some reason, I picture him smoking a cigarette (to quote Frasier’s Daphne Moon “I don’t know why…but I would guess it’s in keeping with the dichotomy of his personality).

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    • March 6, 2014 at 4:27 pm

      Funnily enough, I almost had him shrug, then light up a cigarette.

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  18. March 6, 2014 at 4:13 pm

    definitely twisted. loved his indifference to the corpse and his appreciation for the scenery πŸ™‚

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    • March 6, 2014 at 4:31 pm

      That’s what I was going for! I guess it’s important to enjoy you’re working environment πŸ˜‰

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  19. March 6, 2014 at 4:56 pm

    My God! I was starting to believe that this would end as calmly and pleasantly as it had begun… but then you delighted me with the unexpected end! Glad our man didn’t stand and brood for long. Might as well enjoy the view while its as picturesque, eh? πŸ˜€

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    • March 6, 2014 at 7:18 pm

      It was quite a job keeping any hint of the ending secret. I desperately wanted to call it “Body Dump” but that would have given it all away!
      I don’t think our man is one for deep thought, he just likes his scenery πŸ™‚

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  20. March 6, 2014 at 6:23 pm

    Dear Ali

    What a delightfully disturbing story. This man isn’t big on conscience is he? Glad he found a job he’s suited for. πŸ˜‰

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • March 6, 2014 at 7:20 pm

      Dear Rochelle,
      I certainly don’t think he’ll lose any sleep over his dark deed(s)! I guess there are always employment opportunities for a man with his particular “talents”.
      Thanks for reading!
      Ali

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  21. March 6, 2014 at 6:53 pm

    Mindless killing?Better and better,lol!DR,loved how you took the reader to a beautiful landscape and then whoosh comes a dead body-wonder if he killed or was he only disposing it for someone?Seems the latter-no wonder he,” settled down to enjoy the view.”-perks of such a job,eh? πŸ˜‰

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    • March 6, 2014 at 7:22 pm

      Yes, I think he’s probably the “clean-up operative”! Maybe he’s called in to remove all trace of the deed.
      He could probably have just dumped the body in the river, but then he’d miss the view πŸ™‚

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      • March 6, 2014 at 8:03 pm

        Lol-that he would πŸ˜‰

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  22. March 7, 2014 at 7:32 am

    he must be a real professional. πŸ™‚

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    • March 8, 2014 at 3:52 am

      He certainly seems to enjoy his job!

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  23. March 7, 2014 at 9:22 am

    Haha, I had a sense that something was about to go amiss. I haven’t been a part of FF for any stretch of a long time, but from what I’ve read, the innocent almost always turns dark. And I sure as hell am not complaining!

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    • March 8, 2014 at 3:52 am

      The more innocent and serene it appears at the start, the darker it gets towards the end πŸ™‚

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  24. March 7, 2014 at 2:24 pm

    Very dark. Are his skills a function of being from Ukraine?

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    • March 8, 2014 at 3:58 am

      Sadly I think these skills may be found in all countries.

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  25. March 7, 2014 at 7:40 pm

    Woah! Wasn’t expecting that gruesome end!

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  26. March 7, 2014 at 10:04 pm

    It’s a dread to do the wet job.. but hey the mob pays well…

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  27. March 7, 2014 at 10:20 pm

    Oh, whoa!! Okay, at first I thought we were simply enjoying a nice view! Chilling turn of events there. Great story!

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    • March 8, 2014 at 4:01 am

      I thought a nice little twist was in order!

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  28. March 7, 2014 at 11:03 pm

    Well you know we all need a job, might as well be one we are good at. I liked it, but then I love Criminal Minds too. πŸ™‚

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    • March 8, 2014 at 4:03 am

      It’s always good to do a job we enjoy πŸ˜‰

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  29. March 8, 2014 at 2:30 pm

    I love that he managed to enjoy the view while carrying out what would be considered by most to be gruesome work. We are all susceptible to being overcome by the beauty of nature.

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    • March 9, 2014 at 4:43 am

      Even psychopaths can have an eye for beauty.

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  30. March 8, 2014 at 2:45 pm

    Very well done. Loved it.

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  31. March 8, 2014 at 10:24 pm

    Andriy is always one to look on the bright side, I feel. At least he felt something for the poor sod, however fleetingly. Enjoyed this a lot.

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    • March 9, 2014 at 4:45 am

      Maybe he’s starting to question his work – there might be hope for him yet!

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  32. March 10, 2014 at 12:08 am

    Clever writing and story telling, that went in a direction I didn’t see coming. That said, knowing your stories, I should have. πŸ˜‰

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    • March 10, 2014 at 10:26 am

      I liked the idea of the contrast between the beauty of the landscape and the terrible deed of body-dumping!

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  33. March 10, 2014 at 4:43 am

    That was a clever take on the prompt. Well done with a twist near the end. He seems like a hit man with a love of beauty, odd combination or conditioning.

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    • March 10, 2014 at 10:27 am

      I guess even hit men can appreciate the finer things.

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  34. April 3, 2014 at 7:41 am

    That ending snuck up on me! You’re good!

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    • April 3, 2014 at 7:46 am

      I tried very hard to make all “lovely” and not give any clue to the horrific deed he was about to casually do.

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      • April 3, 2014 at 7:56 am

        It was perfect! Classic Draliman story – the ending always sneaks up on ya! πŸ™‚

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      • April 3, 2014 at 1:01 pm

        Yay πŸ™‚

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